Angela's Alive
"Lyle?!?" The filly asked. The dragon nodded.
"You'll never guess what happened!" The dragon exclaimed. He then noticed me.
"Who's the... alicorn?" He asked. "Wait... you're not that guy who made the magic forums, are you?" I smiled and nodded.
"Yep! That's me!" I exclaimed happily.
"What are you doing here?" He asked.
"What are you doing here?" I replied. "It sounded important." He shook his head.
"Oh right! So, I was walking to school today, and then Angela appeared!" I narrowed my eyes at him.
"But, I thought she was dead." I said.
"So did I! But, she appeared, and told me she was some, magic goddess thing, and she's gonna come back!" He replied.
"But... why are you a dragon?" The filly asked. "Wait, don't tell me,"
"Angela." All three of them said at the same time.
"Hold up," I said, raising my hooves in a "shush a sec" manor. "So... the witch that did this to us... did it to save us, sacrificing herself in the process, but isn't actually dead?" I asked. Lyle nodded.
"Yep."
I was sitting at home, grinning like an idiot. I had promised not to tell about what I had seen, in exchange for getting to meet Angela when she "came back," whatever that meant. But, wow! I was one of the first people in the world to talk to a dragon! I giggled to myself, and lay back.
This was a good day.
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This story is the definition of Gary Stu. Main character gets to be an alicorn, bosses his parents around, and instant acceptance on his situation. Basically gets everything he wants.
Also please proof read your work. There are a lot of autocorrect spelling errors.
7469390
*realizes I created a gary stu*
ummm... he isn't a magic prodigy?
Well... sh**. This deserves some investigation, and possibly a rewrite
7757685
I say, each story that isn't cannon adds it's own additional facts to the cannon, essentially being it's own parallel universe to the original.
In short: go nuts, it's your story.
Fair bit of warning though: try to make the character compelling and... you know, not OP. But more importantly: BALANCE THOSE TWO THINGS! I focused too much on making him "not OP" that he became a Garry Stu in a completely different way, being not compelling and bland as mush. Take that into consideration, succeed where I have failed.
Love this Fic!
Are u planning on addinf to it anytime soon?
7966942
Yes, but I have a LOT in the works right now, and this is is my B- grade material, so I'm working on rewriting others that need more attention. And there are quite a few problems with this story that I need to fix, namely that the main character is really uncompelling (a Gary Stu).
7966942
But yes, yes I am... just don't expect it anytime soon.
7968691
I honestly think that the character is perfectly fine, but I understand; its your decision.