She never admitted it, but she wanted friends more than anything in Equestria and now thanks to the Cutie Mark Crusaders she has just that. They have helped stand up to her mother and now she broke the link in the chain of bad things her family has ever done.
But the surprises aren't done just yet. Now the newly marked Cutie Mark Crusaders face one more surprise from their former enemy. A question that still surprises them every time they think about it.
"Can I join the Cutie Mark Crusaders?"
Takes place a day after the events of "Crusaders of the Lost Mark".
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that was fast.
This didn't take long at all. Not bad.
Definitely looking into this.
"Would it matter?"
I've got a feeling that I'll be adding a few fics to my little 'Diamond Tiara Gets Reformed' group this weekend alone...
And the fact you pumped out a story THIS fast, and made it THIS good (give or take a few grammar errors) is pretty impressive, too.
6512518 Thank You! I'm surprised that I was the first one that made one today.
Reading the description, I literally thought the question would be; "Would it matter if I was?"
6512450 No kiddin'. The episode aired only a couple hours back, and I missed it. (Marks for Read It Later)
Man, that was quick! I liked this story. I'd be interested in seeing a sequel.
6512600 Okay, I'm back from watching it, AND I LOVED IT!!! They got their marks, they found their calling, I heard the biggest burn of the show yet, they brought back Button Mash...
I apologize for gushing, but WOW that was a beautiful episode that may have altered so many fanfics, as well as the course of the fandom.
Very nice although the tenses really seem unfocused in the beginning. Sometimes it's first tense, sometimes it's second tense. Pick one and stick to it.
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Didn't even read the story, but this made me laugh louder than it should have...
This felt real to me, like an epilogue to the episode. Great job.
You know, I just realized that someone should make a group for the CMC following 'Raiders of the Lost Mark'.
6512570 That would be ridiculous! I swear, some author's probably done it... *Cough*
6512800 Then I guess I'm here to make you cry.
Seems you wrote it a bit hasty to get it out quick, there are lots of mistakes like missing words, a word too much, wrong words and punctuation mistakes. You also wrote it in present tense often, instead of past tense, which feels weird, but I guess that's your choice of style.
You should think about consistency, though, you skip between past tense and present tense quite a few times.
And there is a bit of excessive explanation of things every readers knows anyway (the looks of their cutie marks, that Applebloom is the leader, ect.) which sounds overall like an introduction of new characters the audience doesn't know yet. This part especially could need a little refining.
Otherwise, solid story. Good theory for how Diamond Tiara might act after the events of this day. It's fitting that she asks for becoming a member of the Cutie Mark Crusaders to make up for the havoc she caused.
Though, it would have been interesting to see Applebloom, Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle to be a bit hesitant with appointing her to a Crusader because she's not exactly the ideal member cause her special talent isn't to help other ponies get/understand their cutie marks.
That would make the story more realistic from their point of view.
What about Silver Spoon? You said that she would still talk to and hang out with DT, but is SHE reformed? Will she want to become friends with the CMC and join?
6567200 I believe so since this might not be the only fanfic I write about the Filly 5.
6567200 I smell i sequel in the making
Aww this was a sweet story that I wish the show could have done and would be awesome to have Diamond tiara and silver spoon to join in along with babs seed and the future member Gabby griffon and I still love this episode nice job on the short story