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The Devious Writer


"Inspiration comes and goes; that's neither a good or bad thing. It just means that I'm going to sit here and be lazy until I don't want to be." ~Some a**hole who quotes himself.

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She was suddenly free. She has quadruple the amount of friends she had before. In a moment, she had gone from their tormentor to their friend. How could that be?

She decides to see how strong friendship could truly be.


This started out as one of those Would It Matter? fics.


Contains spoilers for Crusaders of the Lost Mark.


I made it... to the second page of What's Hot?! You guys... You guys!!! :rainbowkiss:

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 51 )

6513988 Score! :yay:
Mind adding to favorites? :twilightsheepish:
Unless I'm totally misinterpreting what you meant. :rainbowderp:

Hmm... I seem to remember seeing a similar fic to this before today's spectacular episode...

Still, interesting way of creating more tension and feelz in the situation. If you were the writer of the show, would you make this canon? ;)

Boy! What a twist! Thumbs up!

Overall, I really enjoyed this story, though there was a tiny thing at the back of my head that bothered me (and no, it wasn't a flea). I don't get why Diamond Tiara would be a changeling. It doesn't really make any sort of sense. Or logic. Then again, this story is a parody, so it probably doesn't want to be taken that seriously. I think it deserves an upvote. You've given us a quick, enjoyable read, just so long as one doesn't think too hard about the logic.

Comment posted by Relevant Heavy Metal deleted Oct 11th, 2015

6514132 Well, it was originally a parody, but I turned it serious during the writing process. I thought up of a backstory that would explain why Diamond Tiara's a changeling that makes sense (and is not too convoluted and totally defeats the point of changelings), but I didn't see a good way of incorporating it, so I decided it was fine as it is. I did leave it incomplete, as I think I could make a followup that would explain it without feeling too tacked on.
Edit: Watch for those fleas, though. Might be a changeling disguised as a flea to drain your love.
Or it could be a flea.

6514006 Glad you liked it! And I don't think I would, at least, not for until DT's Heel-Face turn is at least a season or two old. DT already stole the show from the CMC as it was, and having such a revelation would throw the CMC in the dust.
Of course, if this really was canon, I think the entire season would have to have an arc where the changelings are slowly discovered and accepted into society.

Comment posted by The Devious Writer deleted Oct 11th, 2015

..... *sniffs* come on dude! My heart strings man! I am getting to dang soft! Curse you ponies and your sappiness!

6516931 I blame being sick damn it! *sniff* I get sappy when sick!

Incomplete.

This story has potential for at least a few more chapters. I mean, Diamond Tiara apparently lied about having enough food. You could go somewhere with that. Maybe. Just a sugjestion.

Have DTs starvation be what gives her away to Twi. That would make it interesting. Twi investigates the parents, finds she eats plenty of food then does a medical scan. Finds changeling.

6517639 Thanks! I decided I would have an alternate ending here, so it'll stay incomplete for now.

6517684 I did think about it, but I realized I was losing inspiration for this story, so I felt things were better off finished here.
Not that I remembered to add that detail.

6517753 That's definitely an interesting idea. But I know I'm not the author for the job. I don't think I can effectively portray the happenings needed to make the scenario believable.

Thanks for the brilliant suggestion, though! As it is, I've implied that the CMC will try to get DT and SS popular at school, and possibly through the town (wouldn't be hard to get Pinkie on board without telling her), so they aren't starving.

6517873
I am sorry to hear that.

6517891 I have been writing stories for over 22 years. Mostly for Table top RP games though. Glad to know you liked the suggestion.

6517892 Inspiration comes and goes. It's not a good or bad thing. All that's left for me is to rework the alternate endings and wait for more inspiration for a new story, likely from a new episode, and hope for the best.

Anyhow, I hope you enjoyed the story!

6517909 That's an impressive amount of years! And I hoped you liked the story!

6517928 Indeed I have and thank you. :twilightsmile:

They Crusaders gave each other suspicious glances.

the Crusaders gave each other.

Princess Luna’s back on the throne with Luna

that's funny but what?

only errors Nice job, MAN TIARA IS A STREEIN OUT! someone give her chill pills STAT!

6520849 Ah, I was just finished rechecking for errors on the second chapter when you commented this! I got the Luna mistake, but I didn't even notice the They Crusaders! Thank you!

And FimFic sends me notifications for every comment, so you probably don't have to worry about authors not seeing their comments. (Then again, maybe those super popular stories with thousands of views might have too many for an author to read every one)

Anyway, I hoped you liked what you read otherwise!

6520934 I did your welcome

I can't believe you're ending the story here. Do you know how much potential this storyline is? Apart from the CMC struggling to keep Diamond's true identity a secret and explaining Silver Spoon's story, there's also the possibility of Diamond's secret getting out and her ending up being accepted (especially the Mane Six) and her confronting her fellow changlings with them trying to sway her to their side, not to mention explain where she really came from.

There are so many directions you can take this idea.

6523056 I do see the potential, and I know that, if done correctly, it could be something amazing. Unfortunately, that's the problem.

I won't be able to do it right. I'm very driven by inspiration, working in the heat of the moment. My strength is working in one-shots. I have many ideas I'd like to write to a story, but unless I'm really in that mood, where I can imagine every single line of the fic as I'm writing it, I won't be able to do it.

I was originally going to end this with the first chapter. The second chapter was already mostly written when I was in that inspirational mood, as it was originally part of the story. I just had to do a bit of restructuring to get it to work as an addendum. I'm not even sure I'll be able to effectively write the alternate ending I promised here, but I'm still getting a feel for my abilities, and I'm hoping that since I did think into that ending a lot when I was in that mood (and it's really short), I'll still be able to capture it.

Hey, just read my profile bio that's at the top of this page under my name.

Anyway, I do hope you liked this story as it is. And thank you for the suggestions, they're pretty good.
Perhaps one day I'll look back to this story and feel inspired for an expansion.

6523231
Well, if you feel your own writing skills wouldn't do the story justice, why don't you ask another writer to continue this story for you?

6523797 If another author really liked the idea, I'd be totally fine with them continuing it, but I don't see the need to actively seek an author to continue this.

"Would it matter if I was a changeling?"

Oh dear please...

This is nice, though I guess I'd like for the crusaders to have checked with experienced individuals first.

"But she’s never killed nopony! Princess Luna’s back on the throne with Celestia… or… she’s sitting on the floor beside Celestia’s throne, apparently. Um… Discord’s back out of stone, and he’s now one of their friends! I think. Even that changeling queen didn’t get hurt by them! Unless they’re bad at surviving falls. Well, King Sombra was… not their fault, shut up. And… Tirek was locked in Tartarus! You’ve got nothing to worry about, Twilight’s got a great track record.”
“I swear you’re doing this on purpose!” Scootaloo shouted at Sweetie.

THIS MADE ME LAUGH SO HARD!!!:rainbowlaugh:

6514146 Well, that makes sense. Overall, I think it's a nice, healthy balance of humor and seriousness. Definitely worth reading.

Changeling or a flea, it's still not good.

6525519 Glad I could make you laugh! I'm sure she meant well :unsuresweetie:

666 views.
I gues I arived at a good time, eh?

6559671 There's never a bad time.
Except for Twilight Time.

Woah, Diamond Tiara is a changeling!!!!!!!! That is amazing!
I was first confused if she's really one now, went through she's just pretending to test them, then saying the truth that she isn't one again, then back to she's pretending in a skilled way to really test them out.
But she really is one!!!! This idea is amazing! Both Diamond Tiara being one (that fits so well for her, all that stuff of not receiving love because of the way she acted) and the general idea of a pony being secretly a changeling who lost his memory.
Both amazing ideas! Are you sure this story is finished? Or will you add more chapters?

6563820 I don't think I'll be expanding it anytime soon, though I'm very glad you liked my story! Thank you for the favourite!

6563998

You're welcome! I just wonder because the story is still marked as "Incomplete".

6564086 Oh, right! I forgot about that. :twilightblush: I was originally going to do an alternate ending, but I didn't think it turned out too well, so I decided to scrap it.

6564323

That means there will be no follow-up or sequel to this? :fluttershysad:

6564332 Well, there's none I have planned, sorry. Though it's possible I might come back to it one day on a whim.

First of all, this was an interesting read as is very well-written! I'm envious off how smoothly the dialogue and exposition flow between the characters. But... (yeah the but was coming)

There's a big problem with the premise, and it all comes down to how excited Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon were to be around Twilight in "Twilight Time." DT is so terrified of being brought before Twilight here that even if her cover wasn't blown at the time of the episode, I would think she would avoid her at all costs.

So much so, in fact, I was totally expecting DT to admit at the end the whole admission was just a test like the story summary implied.

6609600 Well, my thoughts were more so that DT was scared of the CMC telling Twilight something that might give her away. Twilight has been in Ponyville for a long time since the invasion, so DT realized Twilight likely didn't know, else she would have acted already. She specifically fears Twilight discovering, but since she hadn't, DT eventually gained the courage to approach during Twilight Time, in fact trying to get on her good side. Perhaps she's not so scared of the pony Twilight Sparkle, but rather the Princess of Equestria who fought against the changelings for her country. It's like a criminal that's friends with a cop. No reason for e criminal to fear his friend until he found out.

And thank you so much for the comment! I'm glad you liked the writing so much. :twilightsmile:

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