If Great Things To Small Ones Could Compare

(R63)

Dusk is all set to enjoy a good book and some tea on a stormy day when a visitor knocks on his door and turns an otherwise peaceful day into a mystery.

(A belated gift/request that I finally finished. Sorry about the wait. Hope you like it, man.)

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8542Madness

8542Madness #1 · Sep 20th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Usually, romantic slice of life just isn't my cup of tea. I'm glad I gave this story a shot, though. It was a wonderful little slice of life. Well done!

CrackedInkWell

CrackedInkWell #2 · Sep 20th, 2015 · 1 · ·

On the whole, it needs a bit of polishing, but it's harmless.

Incoherent Heresy

Incoherent Heresy #3 · Sep 20th, 2015 · · ·

6442974
If you think Cynewulf is the only person who writes like that, you're missing out on a lot.

Cynewulf

Cynewulf #4 · Sep 20th, 2015 · 1 · ·

6442974 you would like Cold in Gardez, Hoof-ful of Dust, and HoofBitingActionOverload I think.

6443763 I quite agree! Also I enjoy your username

Carapace

Carapace #5 · Sep 20th, 2015 · · ·

Y'know, I'm not normally big on R63 stories. Not so much because if it's two stallions I go "Ew, gay", but more because a lot of fics written in that umbrella just don't feel like the characters themselves. Or they go out of their way to try to write season 1 again, just with stallions.

This was very refreshing. Dusk felt like he was Twilight in more than just R63 counterpart nature alone, the narrative flowed well, and Butterscotch's awkwardness wasn't forced. Very nicely done.

Wing

Wing #6 · Sep 20th, 2015 · 1 · ·

A wonderful little piece here. :)

Mixolydian Grey

Mixolydian Grey #7 · Sep 21st, 2015 · 5 · ·

I think my favorite part of this is the way the characters aren't just the mares from the show but with SPOILERS between their legs, They actually seem like masculine personalities that still display all of the same traits. It's really interesting how you pulled that off. I think it's mostly the playful guy-ish humor between them.

Cynewulf

Cynewulf #8 · Sep 21st, 2015 · · ·

6445651 I try :)

Johnny Bravo

Johnny Bravo #9 · Sep 22nd, 2015 · 2 · ·

"Cute little story and although I'm not in here it still good. A couple of foxy mommies could of help the story a little bit though."
-Johnny Bravo

NikitaKitten

NikitaKitten #10 · Sep 23rd, 2015 · · ·

A wonderful little story. I do wish it were more than a one-shot though.

Feenkatze

Feenkatze #11 · Sep 23rd, 2015 · 1 · ·

Pretty neat. I like the POV, even though some paragraphs feel a bit choppy. Also, there are a bunch of typos, so some closer proofreading would be an idea (or at the very least using spellcheck - "His friend seemed to sieze up for a moment", really?).

But yeah, it was sweet, and quite relaxing. Like a good thunderstorm.

He thought about a cup of tea on a stormy day, and he thought of feathers against his coat as he leaned back on the couch and turned a page--he had thought of such things before.

This is my favorite line.

Xepher