My name's Luke. I'm a hacker. Not like a government spy or anything, although that would be cool. No. I'm just a 14 year old guy who spends his time pirating, hacking, and using cheats on games.
Kinda sad, right? Yeah. The even sadder thing is that I somehow got into an accident and woke up in a strange place, surrounded by colorful horses! Crazy, I know! I'm just worried that I won't be able to get home... That or the weird horse that keeps following me around, calling me "Sugarcube" will cause my brain to explode!
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Okay so a couple of things. One it's a self insert, or appears to be. Two, the main character appears to be something of a douche. Three hacking doesn't work like that. Four, muscle memory is a powerful thing, you aren't going to be running after being ponified without some intervention, you are just going to be flailing around on the floor like a retard.
Just some thoughts, I'm not going to give this story a rating either way but I would advise those people before me who thumbed down without a single word that that's not the best way to go about things.
But apart from that I can see that you have some talent at writing it's just that the ideas that you are working from are not that appealing. To me at least.
Hacking doesn't work easy like that. But i like your story
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I am not a hacker in real life so I wouldn't know how it works
