Fluttershy's Blazehound

by AnonymousAlicorn

Epilouge

It had been yesterday that the alicorn child had gone off back into the forest, and it was time to get up. She knew that she would have to explain the crystal. Luckily, The princesses took the guest room. So they could make sure they didn't think she was lying. She got up, and Angel brushed her hair back into a curl. At least her animals were back. She was walking out the door and Rainbow was waiting right outside her door.

"Fluttershy! Did you see that giant wolf thing in the Evergreen forest? It was fighting a bunch of changelings, and I stopped in to help. It was so fun! You should have been there, Shy, I kicked some major tail! Hey, whats with the necklace. It looks-. It looks like something Rarity would only dream about!"

"Well, Daring Do gave you that necklace that looks like your cutie mark." Fluttershy hid behind her bangs as she spoke.

"True, Rarity absolutely flipped out when she saw it! but imagine when she sees that one! Maybe she will make a necklace with a blue diamond for herself, am I right?" Rainbow let out a chuckle. "You still didn't tell me how you got yours."

"It's a soul crystal." Came Celestia's voice from behind Fluttershy. She jumped at the surprise, but was relived that she didn't have to say it. Rainbow had a puzzled look at her face.

"Princess?"

"Long story short, that crystal has most that giant wolf's soul in it.

"Is this something Twilight would understand?"

"Yes." replied Celestia.

"I'm off! Later 'Shy!" And with that, Dash was off.

Comments

[The Infinity Doctor]

It felt rushed, for lack of a better term. I personally feel that it could be fleshed out more, too. Question, though- why is the Alicorn a colt...if Luna and Celestia are thousands of years old? If the three of them came into being around the same time, shouldn't he be the same height and age?

This was good, but I feel it could be made better. There are some grammar and spelling mistakes, which can really turn readers off to a story. Why are did the Changelings just up and suddenly invade? Wouldn't it be more beneficial to the story to show the Changelings planning out the attack, or something of that nature?

Also, I think you missed an opportunity with the Blazewolf fighting the changelings. We get no description of it, other than 'he charged in and squished 'em flat'.

Two other small problems I have with this is the fact that...everyone who came into contact with Aiden noticed his forehoof was missing...and no-one thought to take him to a hospital? None of the characters reacted negatively to seeing Aiden without a forehoof.

The whole 'sleeping will regenerate my soul' shtick was interesting, but I felt it could've been explained a bit better, too. Does Aiden just need to lie down and take a nap? This left me a bit confused. As a side note, why is his name 'Aiden'? It seems out of place, considering some of the names ponies have.

Anyway, I hope this was helpful!