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This story is a sequel to The Costume
Two weeks after Halloween, my mother got fed up with me hiding myself away with my new problem, yet, the moment I walked out the door, a whole new world of crazy opened itself to me. Like, getting a boyfriend to start off with.
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FIRST COMMENT BEFORE RELEASE EVEN
6322772 nice, Lolz
Huh... nice story, but the stripper part, ummmm OK!
Are you planning on continuing this story at all in the future?
6322931 I dunno. Watch people ask for a threequel. Did you up vote?
6322934 Did now Lol
seriously, if this gets big enough I would consider just combining and making a fully fledged story
6322946 lol maybe
6322982 the first was far better
he got over being female fast but good story
well...I honestly didnt expect the story to go in this direction when i asked for a sequel.
6323021 well if you looked, it's been a month and a week. Since Halloween.
6323025 well it's whut you git now shut it! Lol XD
6323044 lol
6323133 I'm surprised how well it's doing as of now! I've never gotten even five upvotes in a row! Let's see how far this goes!
If you do make a threequel, how about Jaylissa finally giving him the ability to switch back and forth and giving Derik the same with a Lightning Dust costume?
6323271 maybe. Did you enjoy the sequel?
6323281 Yes I did.
Not so much about how the guy got done JUST for drugs when he was also forcing people to work for him.
6323291 well, he's a DEALER with a large STASH. The cop mentioned how they've been trying to catch him sooo
6323291 also, did you leave a like?
6323318 I did.
6323297 No, my problem is that there was no mention of him forcing people to work for him.
6323464 I know there wasn't. And thanks
What about getting costumes for Babs seed, apple bloom, and scootaloo so sweetie belle can play with her fellow CMC fillies?
6323512 I changed it from belle to scoots.
I like Annie as scoots
6323663 it makes more sense that way as well
Did you mean to make this a sequel? Because as is, none of the people who read the first one, except by blog, will know a sequel was released. To make it a sequel though, all you need is to grab the numbers in the url for the fic before this, and put it in the sequel ID code in this fic.
I try to make a short version of this comment at the end.
choice, only small mistake.
that girl is probably very stupid, i didn´t saw him giving her a reason to believe that.
okay he get´s probably used to his body, and i suppose small changes for what he likes can happen, i am just glad that his brain stills works a bit on the guy side, so that he really have to try different things.
i wait, and see what that means for his personality.
not sure about this, but i hope his body doesn´t force him to do anything.
not sure why he start to looks like a certain type of guy, that just want some fun.
I can´t help it but that guy looks like a creep, or how you may call him.
not sure if two weeks are enogh to make him more like a girl, but i saw a comic where it worked like that.
that was maybe a bit to much, and well the guy is nice sometimes, but the way they she got to know him was weird, and it made him look suspicious in some way.
wasn´t it sweetiebelle before?
errrr....i don´t needed that, the guy started to be okay, but that she has to strip, to stay in that clubs wasn´t really good for me.
The stripper theme wasn´t the right one for me. Not sure if don´t like how you have written that part, or if i don´t like the other guys you have created.
she is thinking like me for the most of the story.
oooohh come on.
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The first story was far better, and the guy seems weird, he isn´t suspicious anymore, but i don´t feel like i really now him, i think the way you introduced him was not good enough, he is just there.
I not sure if it is common sense not to take a girl to a strip club to make a good impression, just because it looks pretty weird as a first date, but well somehow i feel like he changed to much/fast, and maybe you rushed it a bit.
About that Candy girl, i am not sure, but i don´t think you showed her at the start, you probably just mentioned her at the end, as a sudden hero, i had liked it if she would have made a friend out of Rainbow, and tried to get some information, or something like that. Again the character was somehow just there.
It looked pretty much like instant love, i mean they didn´t really knew each other, and if he would have married her at the end, well this would have fit to the rest pretty well, i mean her mother could have told him, "here is a guy please marry him", and she could have said "okay i don´t care anyway, i probably love him someday.", or something like that.
Not sure how to desccribe it otherwise, but it feels a bit weird, and not as nice as the first story was.
I would say rewrite it a bit, or try to make the romance more believable.
Not sure how i vote yet, i think about it.
As Derick said: "That escalated quickly". From going out with a guy and becoming a stripper seems a little bit too fast.
Well... that was... different.
For a few reasons, I didn't really care for this one.
Did you seriously just ask people to upvote in the chapter name
Also why is this back at the top of the 'new stories' list?
6324494 this is a different one.
6324407 I felt this would happen. It was one of those stories s where, no matter what you do, the sequel just sucks.
can we have another sequel?
Besides a few slip ups here and there.... I loved this :D
So much cuteness and hilariousness.
Still would have been nice with a bit more work on the pacing though :P
after rethinking it.... I feel like there's ONE major slip up that needs to be rewritten in this story.....
this story happens about 10 weeks after Halloween right? well... in my country... every other country I believe, Halloween is on October 31st..... now..... 10 weeks later would end up being in december/january
NOW, correct me if I'm wrong.... but isn't that in... Winter? not Summer?
and since you added the fact the story takes place in Appleton, Wisconsin.... I am about 98% certain that Winter is in the December to February/March range and.... that snow happens in winter
6324640 oh wow I didn't see tat lol
6324647
at least someone caught it and despite this slip-up I enjoyed both stories and... let me reask....
sequel?
6324654 not now. Got a request from Eldorado for a story :D the moderator who you can thank for approving this :D
6322934 I would go for a threequel but from the points of his friends who got R63ed (Did any others get R63ed?)
6324741 nope :D people asked if I make another that I should have Derik be a pony too.
dude. what the hell? you made her strip? Fail. this had such potential too.
6324955 meh.
A one chapter masterpiece 5 points on the
itude meter.
6325121 yayitude? That's new XD
6325122 yeah, well if I used the badass-itude meter I'd get sued by the Blockbuster Buster.
6325165 you just used it.
This was a pretty good extension to one of my favorite one-shot anthro fics. But the stripping part is pretty much is Engie levels of nope.
6325174 lolz
6324773 Derik would make a good pony. If he was a pony what race and colors would he have? That way I can determine what der Babies would look like.
6325240 I'd have to come up with something