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Kavonde 68846

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    Kavonde's Stories (6)

    • A Teacher With No Class
      Prince Blueblood arrives at Ponyville's school to lecture the students about Equestrian government.

      4,880 words · 5,710 views · 448 likes · 5 dislikes
    • The Strange Destiny of Prince Blueblood
      Prince Blueblood's journey of self-discovery continues in the Everfree Forest.
      25,963 words · 3,491 views · 331 likes · 5 dislikes
    • Get Lost (In a Book)
      Twilight Sparkle is excited about her new book, but her friends won't leave her alone to read it.
      4,413 words · 3,739 views · 330 likes · 5 dislikes
    • Flutterspy
      Fluttershy, with the help of Fleur de Lis, tried to save Rarity from a rival fashionist'a espionage.
      11,732 words · 1,729 views · 124 likes · 2 dislikes
    • The Prince of Ponyville
      122,741 words · 3,206 views · 387 likes · 22 dislikes
    • Looking Glass, P.I: Coins and Crowns
      24,052 words · 467 views · 32 likes · 0 dislikes

    A special guest speaker arrives in Ponyville to teach Cheerilee's class about the inner workings of Equestria's government.  And, well... it's Prince Blueblood.

    Enjoy the story?  Everyone's least favorite member of the royal family continues his adventures in "The Strange Destiny of Prince Blueblood."

    First Published
    26th May 2012
    Last Modified
    26th May 2012

    Comments ( 72 )

    #1 · 52w, 6h ago · · ·
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    Haha! very good.

    #2 · 52w, 6h ago · · ·
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    dude, that was awesome. I would very much enjoy doing a audio version of this.

    Your writing style is very enjoyable and easy to follow but with good inquisitiveness.

    I would very much enjoy a sequel to this story; i would be in the front seat waiting.

    Very interesting and excellent story telling, keeping to plot, i look forward to more.

    ~~dezi94

    #3 · 52w, 5h ago · 1 · ·
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    We Demand a SEQUEL

    #4 · 52w, 5h ago · · ·
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    >>650275 Seconded

    #5 · 52w, 5h ago · · ·
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    I wanna know what happens to blueblood in the forest and see how he changes

    It's a good story :twilightsmile:

    #6 · 52w, 5h ago · · ·
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    Thank you, all!

    I'm piecing together a sequel in my head.  Honestly, I didn't expect the story to end as it did, but poor, depressed Blueblood kinda took it in his own direction.

    I'm pretty sure the next one will involve Zecora.  Beyond that, still brainstorming.

    #8 · 52w, 2h ago · · ·
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    That was very well written. I, like the others above, demand a sequel.

    I couldn't say exactly what made it good. It simply had the right touch to make a great story.

    Keep up the good work.

    #9 · 51w, 6d ago · · ·
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    SEQUEL? :D

    #10 · 51w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I. Love. This.  This was a great story that kept my attention.  I loved the way the characters all retained their personalities.  I loved how all the details were neccessary.  I just loved it.  So much.  :heart:

    #11 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I am impressed.  I was expecting something else from this story.  Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

    #12 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    At first I was like... Not HIM!:flutterrage::twilightangry2:

    Then I was like... What the?:rainbowhuh::unsuresweetie::applejackunsure:

    But when the end came I was like... NO! DON'T GO IN THERE! :raritydespair::raritycry::pinkiesad2::fluttercry::applecry:

    #13 · 51w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I DEMAND A SEQUEL!:flutterrage:

    #14 · 51w, 3d ago · · ·
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    SEQUEL >.> i know were u live sorta kinda somewere you currently on the left half of the hemasphere

    #15 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I liked it, it's nice to see Blueblood not being a complete snob

    #16 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Approved.:scootangel:

    #17 · 48w, 4d ago · · ·
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    i like, going to read the sequel naow.

    #18 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>662858 >>659065 >>651934 >>650325 >>650294 >>650275 >>650230

    Whew, that was a lot of li'l word bubbles to click.

    For those of you who were hoping for a sequel, I've got some news.

    There is totally a sequel.

    Enjoy!  :twilightsheepish:

    #19 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    WOW that was good!

    #20 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    ^Died a lil' of laughter right about that part...

    And just finished...

    Well then.

    Often times, writers will go through a maturity process with a character through something very deep, emotional, and full of angst.

    You did it with a schoolroom full of bright-eyes foals and a pompous prince.

    Some breakthrough writing here. Well done, well done.

    #21 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>816167

    I made someone laugh so hard that they made a screencap comic!

    I'm honestly grinning like an idiot right now.  Glad you enjoyed the story  :yay:

    #22 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Excellent!  All of the characters were well written, including and especially the secondary characters like Scootaloo and Big Mac.  And I'm glad to see that there is a sequel in progress.  I will have to give it a look!  :pinkiehappy:

    #23 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I tip my hat to you, sir. And have a thumb as well.

    #24 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Only at when Cheerilee came back into the room, and I absolutely love it at this point.  

    "

    The farmer regarded him silently for a moment.  And then, to Blueblood's surprise, he flashed an easy grin.  "Don't worry, buddy.  You'll find a filly.  Yer alright."

    The prince stared after him in shock.

    "

    Awww... fanon Mac is one of my favorite background ponies.  

    And that was some of the best writing for a ponyfic I've ever seen.  After reading every 6-star fic and many of the others, I really mean it.  

    Back to editing fics!  :P  

    #25 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I'm guessing there are no big banks in the Everfree Forest.

    Wonderful little piece here.  (Is this where I yell "Bravo!"?  I never could get the hang of those fancy protocols.)

    #26 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I came here expected a story about Blueblood being an idiot. I got that... and a touching story about Blueblood's character. Well done.

    Also, Cheerilee reminds Blueblood of Celestia. Both are voiced by Nicole Oliver. I see what you did there!

    #27 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Huh, interesting take on Blueblood's character. It was a very satisfying read, and I have this sudden image of Blueblood running into Zecora and having some sort of character-building misadventure with her.

    #28 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    A zecora/blueblood couple? that should be fairly interesting.

    #29 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    THE SEQUEL

    After taking exactly 3 steps into the Everfree Forest, Blueblood was pounced by a manticore and devoured.

    Fluttershy was at first horrified by what her forest friend had done, until she saw who the remains had belonged to.  Then she gave the manticore a medal of honor.

    And Celestia totally never missed Blueblood at all.  In fact, she kinda forget he ever existed.  

    The End!  :trollestia:

    JAG
    #30 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Huh. I expected a dumb-but-passably-funny, forgettable comedy about Blueblood being Blueblood. Instead... this wound up being pretty good. Blueblood was hilarious, and actually learned a lesson that apparantly set him on a life-changing journey. The foals were equally hilarious and believably in-character. And (a big pile of icing on the cake) we got some CheeriMac! That doesn't happen anywhere near often enough, in my experience.

    So, good stuff. Thumbs-upped, and I'll defintely read the sequel ASAP.

    #31 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>816695

    Wow, thank you!  That's a massive compliment.  Some of those six-stars are flat-out phenomenal.  I'd better put on a hat so my head doesn't swell too far :twilightsmile:

    >>816983

    There might have been banks, once.  Hrm.  That was a missed opportunity for a gag... :fluttershysad:

    >>817040

    Haha, yeah.  Was wondering when someone would point that out.  But then again, crushing on Cheerilee because she sounds like his aunt...man, poor Blueblood has enough issues without throwing in an Oedipus complex. :moustache:

    >>817287

    *cough*

    >>817916

    Well, not exactly, but things don't go a lot better...

    >>818067

    You know, it's ironic that the show's one obvious attempt at ship building has been largely ignored, while basically the entire fandom's agreed that Lyra and Bon Bon are a thing.  Nothing wrong with that, just odd.

    #32 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>818089  Ohhhhhh...

    So he gets eaten by a hydra instead of a manticore.  :trollestia:

    #33 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>818089

    Wow. That's convenient. I have some reading to do, it seems. :pinkiehappy:

    #34 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>818097

    Yep!  The hydra just snaps his spine in half with one bite, so he barely even feels his guts being ripped out.  If the manticore had killed him, he'd have still been aware of everything until he finally bled out.

    It's a fun story.  I'm gonna submit it to EqD with an "Everyone" rating.

    #35 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>818196  Wow!  That sounds amazing!  I'll bet it'll hit 6-star in 10 seconds flat!  :rainbowkiss:

    #36 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The jungle is dark and full of diamonds, Blueblood. Unfortunately, that particular tale ended in disaster.

    I'm with Poptard on the Cheerilee/Celestia reference. When Blueblood compared Cheerilee to Celestia, I leaned back and said, "That's so meta."

    #37 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The story is well written, but personally I find the nerverending stream of hatred for Blueblood to be disappointing.

    He was written the way he was to make a point. He was a deliberate gender reversal. He expected everything of Rarity that the traditional prince-loving fangirl expects of a prince. Expecting Rarity to pay for him? Standard thing for girls on a  date to do. Expecting her to put her cloak on the puddle for him to walk over? Cliche thing for a guy to do. Just like the cliche of a girl sitting and waiting for a guy to open a door for her.

    The point to all this was not to paint him as a bad pony, but to point out how ridiculous it is for women to expect these things from men, by showing how ridiculous it looks when a man does it.

    Bashing Prince Blueblood for being a jerk is completely missing the point of his character.

    #38 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This.Is.Amazing!! I need more!:pinkiehappy:

    #39 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>818767

    Well, I don't know about that.  I think you're definitely onto something--he's a gender reversal of the typical helpless damsel archetype--but he's also an example of the classic snobbish, detached-from-reality noble.  I mean, this guy didn't even know who Rarity was.  She helped save the frickin' world, and he was so wrapped up in himself that he thought she was just another hanger-on.  So in addition to the gender-oriented aspects of his character, there's a bit of good, old-fashioned "down with the aristocracy" classism taking place as well.

    Plus, look at the show's primary audiences: kids and young adults.  A lot of those young adults are male.  And I think it's safe to assume that a lot of those males are pretty nice dudes who couldn't imagine treating a date like Blueblood did.  Hence, he gets the same kind of hate piled on him that a jerk linebacker treating his cheerleader girlfriend like crap would.

    Not that I'm trying to change your mind, here.  Just explaining what my own impressions of the character were.

    #40 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Loved it!  The writing style is very easy to follow, the banter from the CMC was funny, and I like the characterization of Blueblood!  

    Off to the sequel I go! :pinkiehappy:

    #41 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    There was at least on fic where he was a jerk to Rarity because Luna was trying to 'help' and gave him horrible advice.

    And another where he was deliberately trying to get her to buzz off because he was sick of annoying fan-girls like her.

    #42 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Excellent story. It was very well written and I had a great laugh out of the disruptive class scene, right before cheerilee tossed the two trouble makers out. I could CLEARLY imagine that scene.

    I'd like at least two sequels and maybe a prequel. First sequel would be of him facing the everfree forest and changing for the better, or facing that his failure is down to his nature and he cannot really change that. Sorry, I'm a cynic. Anyway, the second sequel (maybe an epilogue?) would have him return as a better pony as we get to see his changed life. If, along these lines, there's still very little details on background going on him, (how he got his life like that in the first place) I'd like a prequel explaining some of it.

    Well, you're no Santa I know. I know. And by no means think of this as a list of demands or whatever. I just liked it soo much, I'd like to see planty more :pinkiehappy:

    #43 · 47w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I think the "children are so honest and candid that talking to the right one works better than a trained psychologist aren't they adorable and innocent bwaaaa" is done in a sort of cliche way.  Although it's still funny at the beginning when they're calling his bullsh*t and slowly tearing him down.  As for Blueblood himself, this is a really original take.  The idea that he was once next-to-useless, now rendered TOTALLY useless by circumstances outside his control, and he's totally aware of it.  

    I'm also praying that the follow-up doesn't ship him with Zecora.  It's already up, so here goes!

    #44 · 46w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>818089

    Well, that episode also had the lesson 'Don't try to force two ponies together, even if you think they're perfect for each other', so maybe that had something to do with it.

    #45 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·
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    That stoic muffin tear from Dinky and I just lost it.

    #46 · 45w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Very nice piece of writing, I do always like these Blueblood redemption fics and this maybe my favourite :raritywink:

    My heart absolutely broke when Dinky started crying though :fluttercry:

    #47 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This was very good, and it felt like an actual episode! Redemption and Self-Actualization are always excellent topics for fan fics.

    I've been a teacher before, and I can tell you that you nailed a room full of children excellently. They are cruel, never-tiring, ever-curious and always wanting more. If they see you squirm it's already too late to recover. I particularly liked his interaction with Dinky Doo, that was just darling. This could've been a very awkward stream of self-loathing, but you made it into a nice build up and although this was VERY dialogue heavy-- I enjoyed it quite a bit.

    Big Macintosh was surprisingly stoic, and frankly that made him as a character in this story. He could've made a mean face, said nothing, and gone on. That would've been the end of that, and I would've thought nothing of it. Of course he would threaten the Prince away from his mare-friend, right? Well no, you took the higher road with him and that showed a real level of understanding for Big Mac as a character. The words you chose and the actions he took gave him a lot more staying power than I can usually conjure in the mostly-mute stallion.

    I will CERTAINLY be reading the next bit of this series, and I'll give my thoughts as I go! You've got me hooked. :pinkiehappy::heart:

    ~Aegis Shield


    P.S. I've written a blog about this story, and am sending some of my readers your way. Expect an influx of comments soon. :)

    #48 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Read off a recommendation, heading for the sequels now :D Good work!

    #49 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Thanks To Aegis Shield, you have a new follower.  I had initially written off this story since I never thought much of Prince Blueblood other than he was a complete jerk.  As I read through this, you transformed his character from being completely pompous and self-centered to somepony that hopefully get a second chance at that all important first impression.  I really like your writing style and look forward to more of your work.

    #50 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>894879

    Wow!  Thank you for the compliments and the recommendation :pinkiehappy:  I'm thrilled that the story's turned out so well-loved.  When I wrote it, I definitely didn't expect it to spawn two 25k+ word sequels, but Blue just turned out to be a fun guy to write about.  Though I've taken him to some darker places than some folks were expecting... :scootangel:

    >>895170 >>895197

    Thank you for the kind words :pinkiehappy:  Hope ya enjoy the sequels, too; I tried to stretch my writing boundaries with them, and they go in some odd directions, but I've had fun writing them and I hope that shows in the work.

    #51 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    WAIT the foals said you weren't bad enough to warrant going into Everfree Forest! :pinkiegasp:

    I must admit, I didn't expect him to leave, I thought he'd maybe stay, and either apologise to Rarity and ask her for a new suit, of he'd go back to Canterlot to do as much as he could.  I most certainly didn't see that coming.  I'm impressed with your handelling of Blueblood, and I may give that sequel a go to.  You also handled the story itself very well, the Crusader, and the other characters were well executed, and the story was a nice little thing.

    On another note, actually I don't want to make assumptions, but with all the clues listed during Blueblood's regrets, about falling in love with a princess, I can only assume that means Cadence, since he also mentions she married an idiot, and reffers to Shining Armour in a similar fashion.  Both she and Blueblood are related to Celestia, which would make them related.... and in love with her.

      That makes me think, that I've missed something obvious, because I really don't want to decry a story that is as well done as this, by missing an obvious fact, so before I dig myself a deeper hole in the ground I'm gonna stop.

    BACK TO HAPPY :pinkiehappy:

    A very well done story, with no glaring errors, well conducted characters, and a well thought out and executed plot.  Glad I had a look at this from Aegis Shield's blog post.

    :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:

    Very well done, see you in the sequel.

    Honora Imperator

    #52 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>896582

    You actually totally put the pieces together.  They're not blood relations, but... :unsuresweetie:

    #53 · 45w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>897194

    Wow really? Okay, that sounds a little :applejackunsure: 'creepy' to me.

    However, you said that they aren't blood relations, and by this fic, you've put alot of thoughts into this, I admit you have me interested my good author :pinkiehappy:

    You have piqued my curiosity, see you in the sequel. :eeyup:

    Great job again.

    Honora Imperator

    #54 · 45w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Excellent. Nice to see a character such as Blueblood get attention. And it was genius how you made Diamond Tiara have a crush on him.

    I kind of feel sorry for the guy. I mean, he's useless, but for him to know that he's useless...

    I knew this was going to be great when he called Twilight's brother 'Shining Idiot.'  

    #55 · 44w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Glad I got around to reading this, I always love a good Blueblood redemption fic and this looks like it is the start of something special.

    Hilarious story too, had me laughing out loud about three different times.

    #56 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    so what about silver spoon and her glasses?

    #57 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>932558

    The broken lens came out while she was wearing them, and she lost an eye.  :trollestia:

    #58 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>932570 now this is the interesting material, more of this please. silver spoons glasses is clearly more important than some princes emotional development. sequel: A Frame With No Glass

    #59 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>932596

    Sure!  It'll be a grimdark tale of how she loses her eye in excruciating detail, but one little shard of glass gets stuck in her brain and the doctors can't pull it out, so it gradually drives her insane and she starts hallucinating that everypony around her is a changeling spy, eventually leading her to become what she thinks is a renegade vigilante, but really, she's just murdering innocent ponies.

    #60 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>932614 yes please! :pinkiehappy:

    #61 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Damn... I liked this. Almost beautiful.

    And I'm so glad there is a sequel!

    Thank you for sharing.

    #62 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Greatly enjoying this, particularly Blueblood's letter.

    There's something about the 'Blueblood redemption' kind of fics that really appeals to me.  Probably the combination of fidelity to the source, with everypony being a complex character and not just a stereotype (bad pony or not, nopony is unequivocally positive or negative) and characters, as in real life, changing as things happen to them, and the theme of self-invested growth for the sake of improvement.

    Reading sequel next.  :twilightsmile:

    #63 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I found this to be an entertaining short story. The chaos that is the classroom came off wonderfully. Blueblood must have had a pretty rough shape since the Gala if a classroom of foals managed to break him in under five minutes.

    I am now compelled to read on with the sequels thanks to a funny first chapter.

    #64 · 36w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Blueblood enters the Everfree Forest, stumbles into a patch of Poison Joke, the Poison Joke gives him the power of the Mercer Virus, and he proceeds to wipe out and consume any and all non-sentients that he encounters on his journey through the Everfree Forest.

    #65 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I very much enjoyed reading this story, you sir are well worthy of the watch fav and like you have earned this day.

    #66 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1327761

    Thank ya!  :pinkiehappy:

    #67 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    HA!!! Blueblood shown up by a class of foals!!!

    At first I wanted to hit him for making Dinky cry, but at least he accepted her muffin!

    I want to know what happened outside with Applebloom and Diamond Tiara!!

    #68 · 27w, 3d ago · · ·
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    "... and that he had his head shoved clear up his..." Cheerilee cleared her throat.  "Class"  :pinkiecrazy::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

    I love that.  I absolutely love that sort of thing.

    This is an outstanding story.  Incredible.  I shall head forthwith (or maybe tomorrow instead, it's a little late here) to the sequel.

    #69 · 24w, 1d ago · · ·
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    ...and you managed to make me like Blueblood.

    Enjoyed this immensely; off the sequel I go!

    #70 · 9w, 2d ago · · ·
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    First, he makes Dinky cry. :ajbemused:

    Silver Spoon is basically assaulted, and begins to cry. :trixieshiftleft:

    Blueblood admits to being a stupid, irritating character, and wants to change his ways :pinkiehappy:

    Blueblood kills himself? :fluttershyouch:

    #71 · 8w, 2d ago · · ·
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    It's always nice to see a Blueblood fic with actual character development and some genuine personality on the part of our favorite spoiled prince. Onwards, to the sequel!

    #72 · 5w, 1d ago · · ·
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    This is excellent.

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