I like candlelit dinners, walks along the beach, sleeping under the stars and hardcore BDSM.
When I awoke in this horrifying and multicoloured world, I thought my life was going to be pretty bad, but I never imagined it would get this bad. Being locked up in a cage, taken from town to town amusing the folk that live there and having a beast of a ringmaster is a living nightmare.
Funny thing is: I'm an insomniac.
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Not bad, not bad at all. There's a few grammar/spelling errors here and there, but they're nigh unnoticeable. I like that you didn't give everything away in the first chapter regarding the MC and the pace is balanced as well. Only thing that irks me is you making Trixie a generic, easy to hate cunt as other HiEs have done, but that's mostly personal taste. I am rather fond of the showboating mare. Other than that, I look forward to where this goes.
Please don't make the human a complete, submissive pussy.
Really good shit.
got some inspiration from the piano man fic huh interesting
So why are the ponies ignoring the fact that he can talk?
Oh wait, sheep and cows. Nevermind.
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Yeah, I am so wishing for Trixie to get her comeuppance, perhaps her getting captured by humans as a bit of karma biting her in the flank?
Or perhaps a interstellar human empire finding out about this and promptly invading them?
Eh, not a fan. Trixie is too generic in her evil ways and the fact that a known sapient creature is both being treated like dirt and no one is doing anything about it turn me off.
How stupid is this kid that he can't manage to better his situation when he has access to the public? I'm sure there will be attempts to explain this, just as I'm sure they'll be ridiculous stretches.
I'll wait until you've gotten over 15000 words before I cast my vote, but I'm leaning towards a thumbs-down.
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Yeah I despise the fact you made him weak as shit and beat THE shit out of him on a daily basis.
Screw...This...Shit...
Is there a way to stop a story from showing up on the main page?
So im seeing a far bit of hate for this story...... Don't know why if a good start to something that can be pretty cool story
can you punch Trixie in the face
It could use some polishing- I've an interest in stories like this, but mostly they end up being the same. This type of story has been done before, but mostly I read it for how the author does it differently every time. Like I said, it's good so far, and yes, I believe it needs work. The character of the human in question seems interesting in that his personal beliefs bar him from leaving Trixie's caravan and just telling the ponies 'I'm a sentient creature.'. The other freaks with the human don't seem to be cutouts, but I'll need to read further in order to make a judgement concerning them. Trixie's character in this is about the same as any other human-hating Trixie, but- then again, this is only the first chapter, so I'm not going to downvote this right away. I look forward to reading more, I hope this was helpful.
I hope trixie dies in this :)
Can't wait for more.
Interesting story, it grabs my attention well. I would like to see more.
I'm keeping my eye on this one. It has potential, and needs some editing, but it's interesting so far.
Definately putting this one on my watch list. Hope to see an update soon.
How's it coming?
i think the guy died
MORER!!!!!!!