What is UP! It's Jackie The Shiny Gourgeist but y'all can call me Jackie TSG, I hope we'll all have a wonderful time together and I'll catch y'all later
Electra Strike is a Pegasus who moves from Cloudsdale to Ponyville to seek out some new friends, when she comes across the well known and loyal Rainbow Dash, instant friendship is made, but there's something different about Electra that Rainbow Dash soon discovers. So then an adventure is formed, a villain is made and heroes must save the day.
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You seem to be needing an editor. I seem to be floating around. I just got done editing another story on the site, and it was a mess before I did. This is only slightly bad. Only a few spelling mistakes as far as I can tell from just reading it.
6271294 Well, I'll be sure to fix the mistakes as soon as I can its just my first time so I'll try to improve in later chapters
I was offering to help edit it, but oh well.
You might want to fix the indents between paragraphs. Just a thought
"Electra" is a brick of a plane, and is slow as molasses going uphill in January.
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6272383 if you don't like it, that's okay
6271841 I want to complete my first book by myself, but thanks for offering
6324818 thanks for your very detailed insight
6325303 Thee art forsooth very welcome, kind sir.
6325364 Lol, I'm what you may call, a maiden