It's not easy for Sweetie Belle, waking up one morning only to find a pair of wings strapped to her back. It's even more of a problem for Rarity, though, to find out that the one that gave Sweetie Belle those wings might not be able to remove them. Predictably, Rarity sets off to Twilight's to try and see what she might be able to do about this. As for Sweetie Belle, after discovering just how powerful she's become thanks to the transformation, she makes other plans that involves Diamond Tiara, and Silver Spoon especially.
A Sweetie Spoon shipfic.
Chapters (3)
The description doesn't really represent the contents all that well. Picture and romance tags feel misleading for anyone coming in expecting some adorable three-way romancing. Still cute as short Silver-Belle stories go, but it just didn't go far enough in my opinion.
Liked everything leading up to the jacuzzi though. Pretty solid.
A sweet little story, I loved it
6114076 I see what you mean with the desc. Went ahead and edited it so that it matches the story a little better. Thanks!
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A series of plot points without the plot. "Sweetie Belle becomes socially powerful. Sweetie Belle leverages her power against her bullies. ??????. Sweetie and Silver are in love."
That was a fun and cute read. I could see Sweetie Belle doing what she did if she ever had the powers of an alicorn princess for a day. Anyway, there were a few typos I noticed. I'll draw from a few examples I noticed in the second chapter:
I think you meant "here" instead of "her" in this instance.
In this passage, "what's" should be "that's" here.
And one more thing I wanted to mention, which also occurred in the second chapter:
While there's nothing technically wrong with this sentence, I bet you could add a little more pizazz to it. Maybe show Diamond Tiara panicking by mentioning her body language, having her stutter or gasp, and so on instead of just mentioning from the start she was panicking. I think such a tweak could help in some places in the story such as the passage above, but that's my own opinion. You're more than welcome to disagree with my suggestion.
Also, maybe you could extend the story in the future if you ever felt like it. Maybe Sweetie Belle causes more shenanigans as an alicorn. Or perhaps we could learn more about her new relationship with Silver Spoon. You're more than welcome to keep it as is, however.
Anyway, I found the story cute, funny, and worthy of an upvote. Keep on writing, and I wish you the best of luck on your future projects!
6114437 Yeah, I had thought about extending the story, but I was going for a chaptered oneshot. And it's been awhile since I've been in the game. Kinda rusty, so you'll have to forgive me if the describing of things is a little lackluster.
6114412 Wasn't it magnificent?
6114477 It's okay, and I understand why you'd want to keep it as a chaptered one-shot. Still, you did a fine job on this story despite being a little rusty at the moment. I hope your future writing projects all go well!
6114322 Looks good. And forgot to mention but I love the new avatar. Bunnyjack. Makes me wonder if there's an AJ dresses up as Angel in order to cheer up Fluttershy or maybe AJ losing a bet to Fluttershy xD
Well, that was certainly an interesting read if nothing else. Fun, but ultimately felt like a lot of story was missing, or fluffy porn without any actual porn. But I digress, have a like.
I just read the description and I can already tell this story ain't gonna end too well
This is probably my fav Sweetie Belle story i read so cute !
Where did the crown come from?
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6116073 So have you, portalz.
Nice one. But i was kind of waiting for the next day of school for alicorn sweetie bell. Or a spell that took longer then a few hours to undo.
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(*The Moments After* with SWAGNIMITE and spoderman)
WHAT JUST HAPPENED
it is now porno
WHEN DID THIS HAPPEN I AM SO CONFUSED
it turnd intu a porno so fest I gess u culd say it was like dey were
riding horses
SPODERMAN PLS
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Uhhh...
So instead of trying to make friends with the other crusaders, they'll only make friends with ONE and continue to make fun of the others and Sweetie Belle is just OKAY with that and won't try to get them all to get along?
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Yeah, no. Sorry. That just sorta killed it for me.
Cute but I have to agree with 6114412 , especially near the end where Diamond Tiara and Sweetie become instant friends even though sweetie threatened to send her to the moon.
6117382 I had considered just making it all a dream... perhaps that would've been better after all.
The note with the Discord thing made me laugh so hard!!!
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I have to agree, I just don't see Sweetie Bell hanging out with those two while they still hate AB and Scoots.
6116070 It was a letter from the princesses and Discord, so we can assume since she is technically princess, either Celestia gave it to her or Discord's being Discord and gave it to her to inflate her ego.
Awesome story!!
6117717 I think it would've been fine if Diamond and Silver made an attempt to, you know BE BETTER PONIES, but they really aren't. They're gonna keep harassing Apple Bloom and Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle's not gonna even stand up for them because they're "friends." and basically being a double agent.
Yeah, don't mind that your new friends are possibly causing emotional damage to your current friends at all. It also really irks me that Sweetie only giggles when they flat out say it's gonna continue. There's nothing funny about that, even remotely. This is just REALLY out of character for her to not stand up for her friends.
There's a few words that are mispelled, but otherwise it's... interesting. (For example, "She decided to ware it for..." ware should be wear. A "ware" is an object for sale. Like a peddler selling his wares.)
I loved the story, and I loved the fact that SB is a secret friend with Silver, freaking OTP there