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I enjoy ponies. I enjoy coffee. I enjoy writing. So therefore, this pegasister enjoys FimFiction.

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Sweetie Belle and Rarity go shopping. When Rarity starts acting greedy about what they she buys, her younger sister tells her that she's not being very kind. So when she goes to pay, she asks the clerk at checkout to keep the remaining $00.01. But will he accept?




Now with an audio reading! Thanks so much, MyDarkCookie (The Daring Cookie)!

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Comments ( 39 )

"Let's fly to the castle," The toy said.

Guess what I found on Youtube? :trollestia:

:unsuresweetie: Cheap sis real cheap

:raritydespair:What will Twilight think?

:moustache: A cheap date , good news for me!

:facehoof:SPIKE !

:raritystarry: SPIKEY Wikey?

:twistnerd: Was this the EXPRESS LINE?

"Ribbon, Yarn, String, Cloth, Needles, Gems, Buttons..."

Why are there gems on that list?

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:ajbemused: Applejack wishes Rarity would stop being such a little brat.
:flutterrage: Fluttershy would've gotten that guy to keep the change.
:rainbowderp: Rainbow has no idea what the heck just happened.
:trollestia: Celestia wrote a letter in Rarity's name to the stallion admitting her love for him.
:applecry: Apple Bloom wanted to be in this story.

5316507 bruh, gems are on that list cause why would rarity go back to those diamond dog dudes???? (idk thats just mah guess)

Very enjoyable story, indeed. Rarity shouting the title was pretty funny, if you ask me. :rainbowlaugh: But, aside from the good comedy, there was a slight problem. Even though Sweetie Belle is just a child/filly, I can't really picture her saying that her sister is mean just because Rarity won't buy her a toy. However, this is just my opinion.

Overall, like I said, this was a nice and entertaining read. :twilightsmile:

5458773 This story was inspired by me & my sister. (My little sister somewhat hates me, so that's where I got the inspiration for Sweetie Belle.) Other than that, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

5459188 Yeah, I guess you're right. I guess Rarity and Sweetie Belle is the closest thing to being your sister and you. After all, I Applejack and Applebloom's relationship showed absolutely no signs of hatred, and Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo don't really show evidence of a sisterly relationship at all. So, now that you have cleared that up, I completely understand why Sweetie Belle acts this way. :twilightsmile:

"Yeah!" A green mare next to her said.

Pardon, but it should have been,

"A/The mint-green mare next to her said/exclaimed/shouted.

Or maybe

"A/The aqua mare next to her said/exclaimed/shouted.

:raritywink:
:twilightsmile:
Have a nice day!

5316507
Do you remember that episode titled 'Sister-Hooves Social' where SB used up Rare's "Extremely rare Baby Blue Sapphires'?
Or the episode 'A Dog and A Pony Show' where Rarity looks for gems/jewels in Diamond Dog territory?
Or that one episode where --
*Cough*
Do you understand?
:twilightsheepish: Sorry if, in any case, I offended you.
Good day. :twilightsmile:/:pinkiecrazy:

True story too? xD

I hear this phrase all day long at my work. Liked for sheer relatability (spelling...is this even a word?). :pinkiesmile:

5473340 Either way I :rainbowlaugh:'d. :coolphoto:

5473368 I'm glad you liked my story, then. :twilightsmile:

love it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:ajsmug:

Best story ever!:rainbowlaugh:

5726365 thank you very much!!!

:rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: !!!

Love it, love it, LOVE IT! And I've seen similar things like this happen at a checkout line, too! XD

This was worth reading XD :rainbowlaugh: have a like and fave.

Does Rarity know shes making a fool of herself?

*she's (It's a contraction)

6066628 Thank you! I'll be sure to edit it.

Glad I don't have an annoying sibling to accuse me of being cheap. :rainbowlaugh:

I just realized this is an old story, but you still have the offer of crowd-editing in the author's note, so I will point out the one I noticed:

I will be generous today, and there's nothing you can't do about it!

I'm assuming that Rarity means that there's nothing that the clerk can do about it? Aren't double negatives fun? :moustache:

Rush and Pony on!
T4E

6776006 Thanks for pointing out the double negative XD when I get off my phone and onto something else I'll edit it. (It's impossible to edit a story on mobile :twilightoops:)

Hi there.
I somehow had your profile suggested on a sidebar and thought: I definitely have to take a look at this coffee-mare :rainbowderp:
Turns out, the first story I randomly clicked was great :pinkiehappy: , especially two parts: When Rarity goes through her shopping list and just says "Now this is a lot more like it."^^
And 2nd, when I read your note that this hilarious tale is based on a true story xD

P.s. I hope it´s okay if I stalk your profile a bit for the next few days :pinkiecrazy: I´m searching for some short random or SoL-stories and I like this style

Sincerely,
M. Quill

7010479 Thank you! And XD go ahead! I don't put stuff on the Internet for no one to notice :rainbowwild: If you want any story recommendations, just let me know. ^-^

7010846 Yeah, some recommendations would be nice. Funny, random, and with pleasure something silly :derpytongue2:
Except for that, expect me to randomly scroll through your stories from time to time :twilightsheepish:

7010879 Hmm...well, there's Pinkie Pie Tries To Get Twilight Sparkle To Eat A Quesadilla (that one's pretty popular among my comedy), Sneakie Pie, and my Opposite Personality Series. (The series is based off a prequel story by an old co-author of mine. It's easier if you read in order- you can find the whole series on my page ^-^) Oh, and if you want something a bit longer, I'd recommend The Terror of Nightmare Night. It has more comedy than intended, it's adventure, a little romantic, and pretty random since it was mostly written off improv! :rainbowlaugh:

Anyways, thank you for taking intrest in my works! :twilightsmile: I really appreciate it, it means a lot! :pinkiehappy:

7011144 Thank you very much :twilightsmile: I will try my best to get through them as soon as possible, but I fear that although it sounds interesting, "Terror of Nightmare Night" will have to wait, at least as long as I am still working on one of my bigger stories. (Okay, If you have looked at my profile, it´s my second story anyway and I can hardy be shorter than my first, poor try :facehoof:) But it is simply costing too much time, so I will keep to the Quesadilla for the begin :derpytongue2:

Yeah, no problem :) I always like to get in touch with the authors whose work´s I enjoy :twilightsmile:

7011204 Alright ^^ You don't have to read the ones I recommend to you, anyways. I appreciate what you've read so far, anyways! :pinkiehappy: It means a lot.

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