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When Discord comes down with a dangerous strain of magical flu, the entire town becomes Ground Zero. And the only way to cure him... is from the inside.
This might be the last chapter story I write as I'll probably only do one-shots after this, so, hope you like it.
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What an interesting beginning to a great story.
Discord version of Innerspace?
Well, I'm game! :D
Well, this is going to be interesting.
XD spikes reaction though, that is what i see when spike watches smile hd and cupcakes hd
I read that as "Magiktits". And I will forever.
One, two, three, four, five, six! Six! Six extra spaces! Muwahahahahaha!
Let this ship sail.
This does not sound correct. It should either be "get hit by" or "get near".
Cute. What strange things could be lurking inside Discord's body ready to confuse, bemuse, and re-smooze our heroines and hero? What titillating surprises could turn this mediocre voyage into a Fantastic Voyage? Find out next time in: Wait, what is the title of this? Oh, right. Journey to the Center of Discord!
~KBO.
...they're going to ride a white blood cell to surf a brain freeze avalanche?
...cool.
6036427 It's Discord. You expected logic?
The most dangerous place in the universe...
Hmmm...
Inside of Discord or inside a Dalek?
Silly Pinkie, Minty is not in this story.
1.) Extra space.
2.) Missing word here. Without a "to" or a "might", it sounds like another accent crept in here. A more *ahem* "urban" one.
I am going to make the joke again because it is damn funny. I think this sentence may be pregnant because it missed its period.
We need more Spiked Apple Pie.
There are a few more things:
This: — Is an Em Dash. It is what all of these hyphens are supposed to be. To replace all these hyphens with em dashes, just copy the one I provided, control+F the hyphens, delete them, and paste. To make your own em dash, hold down the Alt key and, using the number keypad to the right of your keyboard, type "0151". (Not including the quotation marks or the period.)
I love the title of this chapter. The double entendre is strong in this one.
~KBO.
...that is so perfectly Pinkie.
Weirdest way in I've ever seen. I've gotten used to classic
6040009 Since when I do use the expected? It's no fun doing what everyone else has already used.
Small inconsistency here. The first paragraph says only one lost consciousness, but the second suggests that they all did.
Extra space.
Considering what comes after this, there should be a colon at the end.
Extra space.
Thank you for keeping the puns to a minimum. They physically hurt me on a cellular level. Every pun I experience kills a single cell in my body. However, I do not mind dying a slow, painful death if it means I can continue reading your stories.
~KBO.
>commercial reference
More biology puns
I use train of thought too much in conversation, but it keeps getting derailed
"Go inside me," Discord continued, ignoring her, "Find the virus, and eliminate it. I know it's a lot to ask, but you two are the craziest," he looked at Pinkie, "strongest," he looked at Applejack, "bravest," he looked at Spike, "friends I have. Will you help me?"
Author needs to add quotation marks, and Discord needs to learn how to count.
A real shame this hasn't been updated. And an even bigger shame you haven't signed on in eight weeks. I hope whatever's keeping you from writing isn't serious.
So will this ever be updated? I just read it yesterday ands it’s very intriguing!