Applejack is in the hospital and Rarity won't leave her side until she gets better.
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You've got some potential. I'd offer some critique if I had time, but I've got about five minutes. I'll be back in a few minutes for a bit longer, and I'll give some advice.
make it teen instead of everybody and add the "sex" tag for kissing scene. also, "parallel universe" tag for Rares x Applejack. until then, your story is a 5/8
5934792 This in no way requires a Sex tag for a kiss. Nor is this within the realms of a 'parallel universe' There is no gore, nor reason to really relate this to teen. On that note. It isn't a bad story, but it does feel a little bit on the rushed side. You did a good job, though
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