The latest addition to the Sparkle family, Morning Star, takes to Ponyville in the care of her big sister, Twilight Sparkle. Well behaved, talented with magic in her own way, Morning also suffers from Twilight’s former affliction; she has no friends, but it’s more by choice than by chance.
Happiness isn’t all she'll bring into Twilight’s Ponyville life. Will the secrets this little filly carries change the relationship between Twilight and her friends?
Take place before season 3. In this story Season 2 does not happen in the order of release (Twilight's birthday is after the Christmas pageant for example)
Sex tag is mostly for adult ponies talking about sex.
Chapters (15)
Well... it's cute and I like the idea. But I could tell English wasn't your native tongue. I think you need to work on that.
Please update
I really like this story hope to read more soon
The idea of the story is good and I enjoyed it but I highly recommend someone proofread it first. Other than that it's really good.
I wo t lie I am confused. Is twilight her real mom or is velvet or is she really an rphan. If you dont want to spoil it can you just send me a message with the answer? It is taking awhile otherwise I would wait.
Sorry for the long wait, chapter 3 give me a lot of troubles for some reason.
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Haha, I kinda glad you feel that way.
Twilight did not really lie to Pinkie Pie
5985059 ok so she isn't REALLY twilights daughter? Cause this is one of those stories where it happens and i look and wonder if this is one of those stories where twilight had a kid before coming to ponyville and just like her brother she never mentioned it.
Too bad this turned into TwiDash. Not reading anymore
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Hum, you should not stop, the TwixDash/Romance is not really the focus of the story (I am not fan of this pairing myself, it's more a setting for something else)
6346539 pretty good u might want to rewrite the summary i see a lot of spelling errors other than that good story
Cute picture. Waiting for next chapter.
Now the question is: who was the father? Or was it some kind of parthenogenesis?
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There is no weird birth method in this story ^^
6584043 With Twilight and her occasionally unpredictable and uncontrolled magic hardly anything is weird :)
Is Shining Armor the father?
6763402 Yes, there is actually enough clue already to understand what happened (and they are not in a weird love affair)
6763881 I did find enough clues to figure the father, but not the rest. Was it an accident when Twilight studied pony reproduction?
6763977 My best guess is Celestia trying to breed a super-unicorn or something. Heh, thinking about it, Celestia would make a perfect Bene Gesserit. So then we get Morning Muad'dib, the Kwitzatch Ponerach.
6784975 Yes, but Twilight said Celestia doesn't know.
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Dune reference. I love you.
is this dead please dont be dead i really liked this one
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Not really, I already have the next chapter half written and the start of the one after.
7266255 that's good to hear. I've seen to many exemplary stories die and after the story I just got done reading good news is nice. Give Out.of.character a read if you want to know why I'm so happy to hear something nice it's a great read but man buckle up your in for one hell of a ride.
This has been an interesting story so far, but it's barely readable because of the MANY issues with grammar, punctuation, and tense. I know that you're not a native english-speaker, but still, there's so many issues with the writing thus far.
I'd STRONGLY recommend that you find a native english-speaker to proofread and fix/edit your story, from the very beginning. It could be a very good story, if only it got a lot of fixing up. You can find proofreaders here to help you out.
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Hm, I remember having the first chapters going through an editor.
um...i think you need an editor. good overall but that was only after i reworded more than half of the story in my head to actual sentences rather than something that feels like it went through google translate one to many times.
Called it! She's twilight's daughter
Very hard to read with so many wrong verbs.
Also, "arm"?
7641292 Maybe you can point me at what is wrong exactly (not everything, but some example) It's a bit more helpful ^^
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I'm not going to have time to sit with a grammar checker today or tomorrow, maybe next week, but you can try https://www.languagetool.org/ It detects many of them.
A few examples:
it turn out -- turned
she hear the door -- heard
interweaved -- probably "interwoven"
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Thank a lot. I deleted your other comment (but save it) to avoid 'polluting' the comment section. I will make the corrections in the week :)
Wow i forgot about this story
great story. cant wait for more
great job. cant wait for more
wow an update to the story yea
You should edit your short description, and that semicolon should be a colon.
How did you make the Luna doll?
Don't get why spike isn't with Twilught since he is family
Great update. I can't wait for more
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On the cover? I took it from this picture https://emerlees.deviantart.com/art/Cadence-and-Her-Favorite-Doll-Collab-502800986
Sassoon good plz keep going on it. It really touched my heart 😍
Great update. Cant wait for more. Keep up the good work my friend.
I do hope applejack and twilight make up,
yes, I like this story already but it does need an editor.
I liked this story too but I do feel the need to suggest you get an editor whose first language is English.
So is this story taking place at the beginning of season 1 now?
where during the my little pony timeline does this story take place?
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It's actually in the description ^^
"Take place before season 3. In this story Season 2 does not happen in the order of release (Twilight's birthday is after the Christmas pageant for example)'
Really good story, really enjoyed reading it :)
Hope it is not dead
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I am currently nearly done with next chapter x)