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Mathew_The_Raridash_Fan


I love My Little Pony and Littlest Pet Shop. My favorite ponies are Rarity and Rainbow Dash. I love to write fanfiction, but I need to learn to pace better.

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Apple Bloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle hide in an abandoned shack after running from a monster that had been chasing them.

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Comments ( 5 )

Fillies, not files.

I was hoping for a Fools of April type plot here. O.o

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Oops! I typed the story on my phone, and when I proofread it, I must have missed it. I will correct it.

Unfortunately. No one was there to help her nor her friends.

The period after "Unfortunately" has to be a comma.

before the beat got to them.

*beast

every place where the beams formed of an angle.

Delete the marked word.

Sweetie used her horn the illuminate the area

*to

They weren't even talking rats.

Word missing.

Giant, black, rats lined every inch the walls.

Word missing.

Luna explained in fruity voice.

Word missing.

Besides...

Sweetie used her horn to search for the fire, but to her dismay, she couldn't find it.

What fire?

5881665 edited it. It was written on my phone, and I didn't catch many mistakes. I don't know why I didn't notice the fire one.

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