“When the Moon fell in love with the Sun, all was golden in the sky, all was golden when the Day met the Night.”
—Ancient Equestrian legend on the meeting of Princess Celestia and Princess Luna.
Entry for the 2015 Everfree Northwest Pre-Con Writing Contest
Story Title and themes inspired by song with the same title, by Panic! at the Disco.
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Does beg the question of how they became Alicorns, did they ascend like Cadance and Twilight, or maybe a certain Draconaqus decided their "cute princess game" needed to be more real?
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The summer sun matched her bright, pink mane, just like the early sunlight on an autumn evening.
matched her bright, pink, mane just (move the comma or just remove both of the commas)
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Decent story, overall 3~5 from me.
Pfft, more like "ancient Uriean" legend
Such a nice little scene!
I must confess, what catches my attention the most is the thought that Celestia and Luna aren't actually blood sisters, but rather self adopted. I'll confess, it's a nice spin on it and one I haven't seen before. It does make me ask questions such as; Who're both their parents?; When did they officially become sisters, or are they even?; How did they both become alicorns?
But then again, that's not the point of this story; it's just a nice little window into the two sisters. In that respect, it works nicely! Good job Quillery, have an upvote.
Once again a great story. I admire how you managed to fit so much in so little. I can't quite describe emotions I felt when they were playing out their 'princess fantasies'. Thanks for an amazing tale!
Hello there! I'm reviewing this for the Everfree Northwest competition's Community Choice Award.
I didn't think I was going to like it. It bothered me that Celestia and Luna aren't really sisters in this and weren't born alicorns.
But... it's actually really good. I admit it, as headcanon goes, it accomplishes a lot in the space given and even puts forth things like the Castle of the Two Sisters, the EQUESTRIAN VOICE and even perhaps the origin of alicorns and their ideas about bringing the different factions together. The dialogue is good, the story is spot on and sweet, and the ending especially is rather touching. So, I'll be adding this to my list of nominees! Way to go!
Good luck in the competition!
This does a whole lot with so little. Its impressive, really. My only quibble is that the first two paragraphs feel out of place compared to the rest of the piece. If I were to change anything, it would be to alter those to be part of the "flashback," delivering the exposition through the description of pegasus Celestia, her small village, and the living legends that are the council of three.
Aside from a line that said a forest was older than the land it was on, no other complaints. A definite contender.
Really surprised that was only 2.something k words. Very well done using what you did for the story. Great job!
I cried the whole time. Damn.
The idea of Celestia and Luna not being sisters by blood is a bit odd, but this story was very cute!