Cave is a sixteen-year old, airsoft-playing, anti-brony who constantly gets annoyed by all of the conversations he hears regarding My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic from his friends who recently became bronies. As if things couldn't get any worse, he suffers a mysterious bike accident while on his way to an airsoft game and ends up in the fresh-air smelling, sugary sweet land known as Equestria. Now, he must find out how he got there, especially a way to escape the land of ponies, or else he just may be stuck there forever! As much as he is very ticked off to be stranded in his worst nightmare, he may, at some point, realize that his brony friends may be right about the show after all. But for now, it's him, his airsoft gun, a bunch of girly ponies, and one heck-of-an adventure.
NOTE: The story takes place BEFORE the return of the Crystal Empire. Characters will be added as soon as they appear in the story.
Rated: Teen for Extreme Action, Suggestive Themes, and Violence
Seen it unfortunetly.
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Who hasn't
The dialogue seems a little unnatural and the first half of the story seems really unnecessary. Also I hope this isn't gonna be 'Anti-brony hatehatehate' because even an anti-brony would be fascinated if he was sent to another world even if it did contain characters he previously disliked. Just be careful not to fall into this pitfall or the 'he actually lovey doves them a big huggy bunch after all!' ending because both are cliché. It's like a torture fic I stumbled across where Dashie went to earth but was tortured by an anti-brony. Even someone who hates the show wouldn't do that becaue it's a FRIGGIN TALKING PONY! Even if it's annoying to you you don't think about it at the time you just think 'SCIENTIFIC ANOMALY OMG' You know?
Work on your dialogue a little and be careful with this. It could turn out like a pile of horse-apples.
Edit: And it kinda is already. It's trite and cliché and half of it is unnecessary. Hope I don't seem to harsh, just saying.
Pretty good! I'm interested in seeing where this is going!
Keep 'em comin, bro!
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Thats probably some of the most logical observations I've ever heard. Why haven't you written one yet?!
567468 I may in the future
looks interesting... One thing that isnt really related though, when he falls off the 100 foot cliff. He thought "Oh crap, I'm gonna to get owned by gravity." While it is true that time does seem to slow when something like this happens (I know from experience) you usually dont think all that, its usually more just like "Fuck." and then impact. Anyways, cool idea.
I dont know why the people would dislike it
Its well written and different instead of a Brony an anti brony well played mister well played
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Hes not the first author to write a story about a brony hater.
It's not terribly well-written, but it's cool to see another Airsofting Brony! Also, you guys play every day?!? I'm lucky if I can find an event to go to each month.
I think this would be better as one of those tongue-in-cheek stories that try to sound really bad just to be funny. It just seems to fit the story.
>>dancing mop
Unfortunatley, I don't play airsoft, but I love the game and I wish I could freakin' play it! Hopefully no one is thinking that I'm making an Anti-Brony stereotype, because one of the guys, who in which I showed him it, thought that I was making an anti-brony stereotype. But he's not a brony anyway so yeah.
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Don't worry, I know what you mean! It's just that I don't swear and I also want to keep it appropriate enough for other people. Maybe I should have included a more "out there" thought that doesn't include swearing, but I tried my best.
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Yeah, I see what you mean. But the reason why I included the first half is in order to go more in deph of the character's background. Without it, people may not be able to fully understand the character.
i will read more when its out
The tense changes
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Yeah, I can't help it man! That's just what I do even though it doesn't fit. By the way, can you find any easter eggs in this story? There are a few.
569340 Didn't notice any, and I can't be bothered to reread it dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy_umad.png
569403 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png
I don't get why so many people don't like this. I like it, and I have never read an anti-brony fanfic ever in my life. Dialogue was a bit unnatural, but still pretty good.
Of course, I haven't even started writing my first fanfiction.
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Don't worry! I understand how hard it can be starting out. In fact, I have yet to figure out what to put at the beginning of the first chapter even though I have the middle and end done! My first fanfic ideas tend to be a guy going into the show's universe and they embark on an epic adventure.
I'll admit it, I, too, thought that some of the dialogue was a bit unnatural but that was because I was trying too hard not to put any profanity in it. All I could say, is try to be original. Mine isn't that original but it's still in my viewpoint.
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Thanks for the input! I just started my fan-fiction (Can't put it off) with some sort of originality (OR IS IT) and some seriousness involved.
KEEP IT UP!
A few people say they don't like the beginning of the story. I, however, actually like seeing what this guys life is like before he crashes and is sent into Equestria. It shows you his dislike for the show and the changes he'll be going through in the future.
So great story bro. I can't wait to see where this is going.
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I appreciate your feedback! I'm glad I'm not the only one who knows how important character backgrounds are. That's why I put the beginning part of the story in it. Keep on the lookout for easter eggs!
Just another Human in Equestria story i.imgur.com/aZjli.gif
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You could say that. But keep in mind that despite it being an HiE or any other fic, you may be surpised on how interesting it is! And besides, it's only the prologue, things will get more interesting later on. Can't always immediately judge how good a fic is from the prologue. If HiE isn't your thing, then the only thing I could say is WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE!?
But don't worry dude, I know that I can't please everyone. Maybe in my other stories that I may type up at some point that aren't HiE related just might interest you. Who knows?
I'm a serious airsofter and die hard brony, I dissaprove
please read my fic :)
Suspension of disbelief right there.
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Wait, what does that mean? You didn't like the suspense? Or was it so good that it was hard to believe? Sorry man, I'm not sure.
I think this is ok, I like the idea of an antihero I just hope that he doesn't just stay that way.
Also Pinkie demands pie to the face!
Lol. This i gunna be good!
Even though I'm a brony, I approve of this story because Humans should be superior to the 1920s tech that ponies use xD
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Thanks man! Though the ponies do, in fact, use some modern-day technology. For example, There are construction vehicles, speakers and subwoofers, and song mixers like Vinyl Scratch's little instrument used to throw down beats. But most of all, thank you for the feedback! I'm a brony too, you know 
. I started off not caring at all about the phenomenon, then became curious yet confused, and finally, I saw so many pony videos on YouTube that I became a brony.
Nice fight.
Ok, I have to say it.
Shit just got real.
he beat the main 6 WHAT A TOTAL BADASS
Not bad. Others may say this story has been done before but don't listen... that's a load of crap. People say my story has been done before too, but every story is different even if some elements are similar. Keep up the good work, I'll be waiting for more.
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! Though keep this in mind; I tend to get lazy when writing chapters. The 2nd chapter is almost done and I do have the whole story planned out. It's just that it needs more detail...
I appreciate it man
By the way, if you have an Xbox-360 and Halo:Reach, I suggest checking out one of my blog posts on my page. There may be a clan just for you!
838143 I know how it goes... I'm writing my fic the same way. I have all the pieces... just have to figure out how to put them together. Also, I do have X-box, but I don't have Reach. Sorry.
However, if you want my gamer tag it's the same as my name on here.
this is real good. and you know, Im a brony and i respect pinkie pie but i would probably end up doing the same thing cave did. but i probably would have tried a little harder to explaine what was going on.
Encountering the mane 6 without fainting, getting knocked out, or getting captured. This guy's a total badass! Keep up the good work!
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Sorry about that. Lots of things going on from where I am. Plus, I need to finish storyboarding the entire fic so that I don't forget what happens next!
Well, he was briefly knocked out from Applejack's hind-kick and crashing through town hall with Fluttershy. Other than that, thanks! ARRGH! MUST.......GET........CHAPTER.....DONE....BUT......LACK.....OF.....DETAIL....RAAAA!!!!!
>> ThatBronyGuy I know but whats also badass about him is that he literally pwned the mane 6!
Most HIE storys i read is that they always dont stand a chance against them, especially RD. 
And i really don't mind about the next chapers release. BUT IF ITS CANCELLED, THEN I WILL BE PISSED 
naw but really just take your time on the next chapter. 
Hmmmm... well, I found the concept interesting, but in terms of the story... I guess I'll have to pass on reading more. I don't know.
I can't really add much to what was said above. The dialogue seems like a kabuki theater thing. I mean... bronies just don't talk like that in real-life. Or at least I don't. I don't think that many people do. And the whole "brony-hater" thing, well... it would make more sense if he was just annoyed a bit by it rather than being a "hater". There are plenty of reasons not to like the show and to prefer other things (same way you'd dislike a band, a piece of artwork on the wall, et cetera).
The flip-flopping between tense also doesn't help. The whole thing could use some serious editing.
I won't downvote. I'm just commenting here because I like the idea of airsoft being tied to a HiE thing (maybe his airsoft skills play in later, with him discovering ponies playing airsoft in some contest setting that's important?) and I like non-bronies in Equestria.
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I never thought I'd see the day you actually found my fic! I agree with the dialogue being unusual. I tend to have some issues getting the characterization correct. Mind if you send me some tips on that? There's not a lot of Bronies where I'm at so the way they act is a little questionable to me. I could seek YouTube but that may not give me much because the Bronies shown may not act like Bronies; therefore, I don't exactly have proof of the overall Brony personality. 
Also, yes, the tenses change and I fixed that in the upcoming chapter. Why don't I try to fix it in my posted chapters? First off, because I may just leave it like that and second, for the prologue, I kinda want to keep my perfect 2k consistent. Haha!
Keep in mind that I first launched the fic back in May, when I was kind of a "Noob-Brony". I haven't posted a new chapter in months because of lack of detail! I've been, pretty much, been editing a bit of the chapters. To tell you the truth, the REAL story hasn't even been revealed yet in this fic. I still need to finish storyboarding the rest of the fic so that I don't forget what happens next. I sure hope this new chapter gets me somewhere because I'm kinda jealous of BronyWriter to be honest!
So what got you into the Non-Bronies in Equestria subject?
After another recent encounter with an anti-brony, I fear that I don't feel like reading this fan fic. Sorry.
Finally my hard work of proofreading has payed off.
..... I remember this!!!!
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Yeah, it's been five months since the last chapter was uploaded. What do you think of it so far?
1563602 I enjoyed it immensely. Just don't take as long to update again, k??
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Mr. West also approves.