Rainbow Dash claims that she isn't afraid of anything. But Applejack begs to differ. So they bet to find out what can actually scare Rainbow Dash by the end of the day. Winner forces the loser to get over their true fear. But as it starts, Applejack doesn't have any ideas. So Twilight, Fluttershy, Rarity, and Pinkie Pie decide to help her out. Will they be able to actually scare Equestria's bravest and quickest flier? Well, the only way to answer that is if you read the freaking story.
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After reading, however...I came to the conclusion that this fic was nothing more than an excuse to throw the Human Centipede into a fic. I WOULD however like to see what each of the other 5's fears are.
Human Centipede wasn't scary. Gross, yeah. Scary, no.
Good story.
I'm sorry, but that ending completely ruined the rest of the story for me. It was like you couldn't think of anything that could scare Rainbow Dash and just decided to throw in some completely unrelated human movie.
The rest of the story was good, I think it really could have been a lot better with a more clever ending.
You should have done spiders, They are terrorifing, evil, wanting to kill, creatures. I mean look at them,
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Evil writen all over it.
>We're just going to have to try harder
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>They made a lederhosen outfit
Pink flamingos
>The Human Centipede
That movie is funny dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png
How the FUCK did I know what movie it was going to be?
I laughed a lot though.
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Dramatic Reenactment: "Holy crap! This story is amazing! I wonder what the movie is. Wait. What? The Human Centipede? Really? It's quite a movie but I think you can do better than that."
Oops! Sorry guys, I probably should've seen this coming. I should've known better than to put movie that I didn't know much about (fail). To tell you the truth, I've never seen the movie (fail), I've only read the plot on Wikipedia (fail). Maybe I should've instead put something like Silent Hill or The Grudge. I was trying to put a movie that wasn't too supernatural; that still stuck with certain human qualities but I screwed up. I could simply change the movie title but then it might tick off some people so yeah.
It was priceless when they scared Applebloom and she fought back, I doubt Pinkie Pie will forget that expierence anytime soon.
684256 I actually knew about the Human Centipede LOOOOOONG before I read this.
I really don't think the ending made much sense. I mean, a scary movie is always scary the first time you see it. It was natural for Rainbow to be so freaked out. I think you should have thought of a more root fear, possibly pertaining to something a pegasus would be scared of, or possibly some interpretation of a childhood trauma realted to Rainbow Dash. I'm also sorry to say that your characterization was a little off, as was the dialouge. The giant robot idea was also a little farfetched. All in all, a good story, it just needs a little reworking.
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Don't get me wrong, it's still good.
nice the human centipede
rainbow dash i feel sorry for
I keep getting reminded of 24 for some reason...
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. But keep in mind that it was a human that brought a scary movie to Equestria. It would make more sense if the movie contained some specific human qualities and wasn't too supernatural. You get what I mean? And I'm not sure if the fears of pegasi have been revealed yet. I could make that up but still. And I agree with the robot being far-fetched. I was just not sure of any other drastic ideas. To tell you the truth about the charcterization, I haven't seen all of the episodes so their personalities are still a bit new to me. I also try my best to make the dialogue as realistic as possible. I guess it just needs a little more work. It's a good thing I'm heading into an AP English course next year. I appreciate the feedback 
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I understand your comment
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Lederhosens Rock!
(I looked up pink flamingos on urban dictionary site; really!?)
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The ending was painfully contrived.
There are SO many opportunities wasted here. Spiders, Zombies, anything would have been a better ending than breaking canon for the sake of hap-hazardly tossing Human Centipede into the story.