I couldn't see any major problems or grammar errors. (mainly because I'm not that good at spotting grammar errors. Oh well.) I think I'm going to enjoy to see where this goes, and as a first fic, this is good! Tracking and thumbing up. You're off to a good start on this one.

Yay, a new fic to look at.

This is a great beginning. And is has a lot of humor on the Changeling's perspective. Nice job so far!

So yesterday, I was looking at my FiMFiction account during my break. I noticed this was uploaded, but not submitted yet. I thought, eh, why not, it's not like people would actually be interested in this.

The next day, I see an email that this was approved. I check FiMFiction...

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My God, it's full of stars! Favorites, comments, thumbs up, holy moly! Not a single bit of negative feedback!

Thanks everyone! I never even thought so many people would want to read what I wrote. Guess I have to continue writing this now.

Interesting i like it

More? now? please?

Very cool concept of the changeling to take (borrow) things from the main six character. And great job with keeping everypony in character.

With the awesome power of photoshop's tools (lasso + eraser), I have made a simple image! Huzzah!

Curious question do you use Google Docs?

Good chapter BTW

Yes, I do. Mostly because it automatically saves whatever I'm doing, since I'm one of those people who write an essay, then Word crashes, and then my stuff is gone.

Or I save it and can't find it in my documents. It's a bigger mess in there than in the average teenager's closet.

Thanks for the feedback!

Like the reactions from "Suncloak". Afterall, anyone that is not instantly paranoid of anything being a lie must be an idiot.

Great chap. Love the changeling's POV with everypony. Keep it up!

I love how wonderfully oblivious everyone is. That tends to lead into the funniest plots.

That changeling's lucky that everpony's so willing to accept what he says. Wonder how long he'll be able to keep it up.

Good chapter, hope to see more soon!

It's like you people enjoy giving me heart attacks in the morning

I mean, this is turning out to have been a good idea. The last time I had a 'good idea', I caused an energy spike in a USB port and my PC spontaneously shut down.

The way this is going, I'm fully expecting this fic to come alive and eat my face when it's done.

But I have to continue writing! I enjoy you people enjoying this, but if I continue, this'll be the end of me. YOU'RE TEARING ME APART READAHS

In other news, I'm at work, I'm bored, but I'm simultaneously very happy that people enjoy this so much!

You my fellow sir or madam, deserve a baker's dozen of cookies and candied bacon. Alas, my screen does not allow for objects of any kind to be sent through it to other people on the internet, only causes the screen to get dirty or broken.

I'm not a pro at grammar but I wasn't really looking for errors and stuff. So anywho, you still deserve cookies and bacon, or cookies and pie if you are a vegetarian.

Well I AM able to give likes, watches and tracking stars....so there ya go

(Typing up this comment started out full of energy then spiraled into awkwardness )

I've got nothing else to say.

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Crabby patties

This chapter's a bit short, but hey! Comedy! I hope.

Next chapter will probably be longer, to compensate.

xD I love how he thinks they're dumb

Next chapter: Applejack comes up and tells him she knows and he gets blasted, or he gets confronted. XD

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Like you said, comedy.  Better short than long winded for a comedy in my opinion.

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Oh my god my fic is in the feature box

Nicely done on getting featured Nia ^^,

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Great story! Definitely tracking!

Congratulations on the feature! and shame on me for just realizing i never gave a thumbs up...sorry

See you at the next chapter.

I was reading this before it was featured.

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"so he could feed of it’s lover’s love for that pony" -- two adjacent mistakes; it should be "feed off its love"

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Thanks, fixed it!

I knew I had to have an error somewhere, but hey, that happens when you randomly edit it really fast during a break from work.

"Good-looking changelings were black, which was obviously the prettiest color. Then again, all changelings were black, but that was just a minor detail, because it pretty much guaranteed that all changelings were good-looking."

Oh, wow, I'm loving your writing style here. Reminded me of Douglas Adams.

Quite entertaining. I'm curious to see more.

Hey look, a longer chapter, just like I said!

This one was way easier to write, since I had it planned out a lot more. Also, some gags I've been aching to use

Heh.... Ninja Mode ...On

yet another good chapter.

even tho i haven't got much to comment about.

I love how completely daft all these ponies are q;

Pfffft oh the tea gag was great, this chapter got quite a few laughs out of me. Thanks

Also I will henceforth be referring to the element bearers as the Elements of Chocolate.

The best part about farces like this is when the character knows how screwed he should be, yet sidesteps danger anyway.

please continue? this is good

The 'elements of chocolate' and the tea gag were hilarious. Awesome chapter

It's a good thing ponies are so trusting and gullible, isn't it? Suncloak's really going to need all his luck to stay undetected here.

Another good chapter, and I hope to see it continued!

I get the feeling the ponies are just screwing with him, keeping him under surveillance, cause the other alternative is that Twilight is an idiot.  

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Everypony's an idiot under the influence of the Rule of Funny! Well, except Pinkie Pie, she's the master of fun, after all.

Aww, I got my first thumbs down Still, 1 thumbs down for every 80 thumbs up isn't a bad ratio for my first attempt at writing something in English that isn't for school. Not bad at all!

Also, holy moly 200 favourites! When I started writing this, I could barely imagine 1 person clicking that star. Boy was I wrong! You people are amazing.

Congratulations on your success! I have to say, this is one of my favourite 'fics to date; there's just something about it. The writing style, the humour...all great! Keep writing, or I may die from update withdrawal symptoms!

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Should have known, PINKIIEEEE!!

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My fav chapter up to this point. For me it had more lol's than the previous chapters combined

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Not at all! If anything, these favourites are incredibly humbling. It's sort of a surprise that by now, almost 250 people are interested in seeing this continue. It only motivates me to try and write even better!

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The stress would kill me, mainly cause I am a huge self doubter.  Way to be ballsy enough to continue forth into the muddy scene that is fanfiction.  

Why do I get the feeling the ponies are all humoring him and they really know who and what he is? Some of the breaks going "Suncloak"'s way have been convenient, and it would be absolutely hilarious for him to think so highly of himself and lowly of ponies only to have it break upon him that they've just been pitying the poor fellow.

Ah well. However it goes I want to see more.

Pfff...changelings are such silly creatures arnt they hmmm? hahahahaha the chaos they caused was pathetic

make him befriend him! please/

I think the only pony "suncloak" should worry about finding out his identity is pinkie pie because thats just how she is, and also being pinkie pie she wouldn't even care that he is a changling because her pinkie sense hasn't alerted her to him being dangerous

And then, he is found by The Pink One....