Poor Applejack. This one was still fun, but lacked as much entertainment. I'm not sure why. Maybe because there was no real climax?
The others sort of build up, there is a problem and things go bad for a bit, then things get better after the "Climax" which might be just at the end or 3/4ths of the way through. This one sort of built up good with no significant problem, and then it had an anti climax or something weird like that. So it didn't feel as entertaining or satisfying to read. It's not bad, I'm just saying that due to the story flow it wasn't as exciting. I could see saying "but the end was the climax", however there is no satisfaction in it. It's also not really a cliffhanger or anything like that. I dunno why it felt like this to me.
This observation is incredibly interesting to me, and I think I'm going to try to be aware of this when I write things. I'm still enjoying your story, I just thought I'd comment on the story flow for your benefit.
Poor Applejack. This one was still fun, but lacked as much entertainment. I'm not sure why. Maybe because there was no real climax?
The others sort of build up, there is a problem and things go bad for a bit, then things get better after the "Climax" which might be just at the end or 3/4ths of the way through. This one sort of built up good with no significant problem, and then it had an anti climax or something weird like that. So it didn't feel as entertaining or satisfying to read. It's not bad, I'm just saying that due to the story flow it wasn't as exciting. I could see saying "but the end was the climax", however there is no satisfaction in it. It's also not really a cliffhanger or anything like that. I dunno why it felt like this to me.
This observation is incredibly interesting to me, and I think I'm going to try to be aware of this when I write things. I'm still enjoying your story, I just thought I'd comment on the story flow for your benefit.
Thanks for writing these!