Rainbow Dash always says it's important to look to the future and be as awesome as possible! So get up, take this opportunity, and be as awesome as I know you can be if you really put your heart into it!"

So Rainbow is really Shia Leboeuf? Interesting.

First of all a disclaimer. This isn't a genre I'm really used to reading, but I do feel giving you feedback is the least I can do, after all the helpful comments you left on my own fic. Just something to keep in mind.

I admit, from the description, I expected something a bit more cloppy, and was pleasantly surprised that the story focused more on the relationships between characters. Using Scootaloo as an outsider pov character is a good choice, and creates a good air of mystery. The writing is also pretty good, although I find you have a tendency to give too much exposition, rather than just showing us stuff. A good example would be the entire backstory of how Scootaloo likes to stretch. Sure, it says a bit about her character, but it takes us away from the story. Something I felt I'd point out.

The big thing I feel I should comment on are the clothing descriptions. I get that the girls dressing like hookers (sorry, couldn't think of a better word, haha) is a plot point, but having every single outfit described gets tiresome after a while. It's justified in the situations when Scootaloo is shocked by it, but eventually we're left to wonder why so much energy is spent on these descriptions.

The story is still early, and the mystery elements do work. I was curious about why the characters all acted this way, and what the hell leash day is, and why even characters like Twilight seem to go along with something that sounds like a BDSM party. Either way, good work on your first fic. I really don't have much more to say regarding the early stuff. It drags on a bit at times, but otherwise you seem to be on the right track.

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Hey, thank you very much for the review! That's some of the most useful feedback I've ever gotten!

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It's the least I can do, I'm happy to help.

Oh man, is Scootaloo walking into a trap? Will she fall under the same spell that's afflicted the others? I bet Diamond Tiara has some "plans"...heh heh.

This is pretty great, but it's been a while - I hope you've been able to work a little on the next chapter! You built a great setup here and I for one am dying to see where the story goes next.

6579201 The chapter, yes. It seemed like a fun addition. I'm not going to incorporate every new episode in the story (that just wouldn't work) but if it's not really damaging to the plot, why not?

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Yes, I do plan on continuing soon. I know it's been a long time now, and I'm sorry for the wait. Had a case of rather horrible writing block coupled with a lot of real life shenanigans.

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You're right. You deserve better than this.

I'll get a chapter out before next weekend is over if it kills me.

Thanks for giving me the kick I needed!