Vandheer lorde wanted equestria, for it was the only realm that opposed the dark forces of Vandheer
Weakling must die, and Vandheer knows how to deal with weaklings.
he is after all the controller of darkness.
but when six ponies with six elements stand in his
way, will equestria fall, or be saved once more?
Note: this is a short story, so don't complain, you were warned!
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Sorry, but once you post the story in a public place, I get to complain all I want. Lucky for you, I'm only going to be complaining about your story description, because the errors in it are enough to keep me from reading the story itself.
- You have several capitalization errors.
- You have some punctuation errors.
- Your formatting is atrocious.
- You probably shouldn't start your FIMFiction writing career with a "Human in Equestria" story.
- You definitely shouldn't start your FIMFiction writing career with an edgy villain.
- If the villain is your creation, you need the OC character tag. If he's from somewhere else, your story needs the Crossover tag.
- In the cover art, what the hell is going on with that dude's outfit?