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Kind_Of_A_Rarity


Just another fanfic writer. Nothing big, yet...

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Ponies would only dream of being in such a position, and a simple guard has found himself in that position, but this isn't a dream. That would be too cruel. Now a date has turned into the beginning of the rest of his life with, or possibly without, his love. What will the others think of their romance? How will they react?

For the Super Happy Hearts & Hooves Day Lovefest Fanfic Event on Equestria Daily.

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PresentPerfect
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Neither character has much of a voice, and given the way you've written this, that deflates the entire piece. With personality, they have no chemistry. With no chemistry, the romance doesn't work. Without romance, there's nothing going on. I found it difficult to care about what was happening. I can only urge you to try again with a different story.

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Cool, thanks for the feedback! Now that I think about it, you're right. Maybe I will try this again someday...

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