Twilight Sparkle, bearer of the element of magic, student of princess Celestia, and younger sister to Shining Armor. The problem is Twilight Sparkle doesn't exist.
It's been a while since I read this story. I come into this chapter going, "Oh ya this had vampires and other weird things. Didn't I originally read this because I was interested in the concept of Dusk Shine and Twilight Sparkle being the same person. I think I've lost interest, especially when I notice I'm only skimming it." I'm not sure if it's due to the distance of time but this story just isn't drawing me in. Good luck with it though.
7037488 I completely understand. One of the reasons why it took so long for this chapter to come out was because I felt the vampony thing while interesting were too distracting from the main premise. While I still think they're too important to Rainbow Dash's character to entirely remove I've renamed them and made it clear on the first chapter of this three part section that they can be skipped with a plot summary on them on the currently unwritten chapter nine. I really wish that I could find a way to rewrite these where they focused more on the Dusk and Twilight thing, I really do, but hopefully I can avoid doing something like this again because I was sick of these three chapters by the time I finished them because they distracted from the main plot. I might still just remove the chapters and put a link to a four chapter story where they stand alone as a side story with the plot summary still in place so nothing seems like they came out of nowhere, but yeah these chapters were a little off the mark.
And thank you for your honesty, I appreciate hearing your thoughts on the story and it helps me realize when I'm starting to detract from the main story. So thanks.
7605218 Don't Worry i'm not done with this story yet, the vampire thing took the story into a really weird direction and I've been trying to think about what to do with that part, I'm to the point where the next chapter is underway but I'm thinking either having the vampire parts be a sister story to this one with a few references now and then or just letting them stay in this story, I also feel it kinda came out all at once when it should have been let out on a slow burn. I almost wish I had an editor or someone to ask on what should happen, but the main thing I'm thinking of doing is making a sister story with references to the vampires until they make a move against Equestria outside of the chat's between Cadence and Artemis, especially since Artemis is supposed to be focused on right now anyway since what he's doing right now is kind of important in the grand scale of things.
Also thank you for enjoying the story, i really enjoy it when my work is appreciated even when I'm trying to fix a problem that happened because I let my train of thought run itself off the rails.
8630557 Yeah, I'm gonna be honest... I don't really care about this story anymore. The execution of this admittedly interesting premise is too mangled for me to take it seriously.
8632536 Sorry about the earlier comment, I think I had a few ideas mixed with Bipolar disorder which is in a similar vein to depression. I Know depression isn't a simple thing to convey at all, living with a family member who is affected by depression has taught me that much. Some are affected worse than others and depending on treatment can act differently. For now I'll just stay away from Pinkie's antics as I have a lot on my mind right now and more important projects to finish. Thanks for the info by the way, it can be hard to get valuable feedback at times and there are still a few parts of the story that I'm hung up about that I'm trying to rectify, but the feedback on those is more a dislike of a concept, and has made me feel like I may have accidentally jumped the shark. Sorry for rambling, but I hope to return to this story one day once I have everything figured out, it;s not a lack of ideas for the story that has halted everything, but an overabundance and overcoming the hurdle presented by that disliked idea.
It's been a while since I read this story. I come into this chapter going, "Oh ya this had vampires and other weird things. Didn't I originally read this because I was interested in the concept of Dusk Shine and Twilight Sparkle being the same person. I think I've lost interest, especially when I notice I'm only skimming it." I'm not sure if it's due to the distance of time but this story just isn't drawing me in. Good luck with it though.
7037488 I completely understand. One of the reasons why it took so long for this chapter to come out was because I felt the vampony thing while interesting were too distracting from the main premise. While I still think they're too important to Rainbow Dash's character to entirely remove I've renamed them and made it clear on the first chapter of this three part section that they can be skipped with a plot summary on them on the currently unwritten chapter nine. I really wish that I could find a way to rewrite these where they focused more on the Dusk and Twilight thing, I really do, but hopefully I can avoid doing something like this again because I was sick of these three chapters by the time I finished them because they distracted from the main plot. I might still just remove the chapters and put a link to a four chapter story where they stand alone as a side story with the plot summary still in place so nothing seems like they came out of nowhere, but yeah these chapters were a little off the mark.
And thank you for your honesty, I appreciate hearing your thoughts on the story and it helps me realize when I'm starting to detract from the main story. So thanks.
It, an interesting story so far, and I hope to seem more of this story again soon.
7605218 Don't Worry i'm not done with this story yet, the vampire thing took the story into a really weird direction and I've been trying to think about what to do with that part, I'm to the point where the next chapter is underway but I'm thinking either having the vampire parts be a sister story to this one with a few references now and then or just letting them stay in this story, I also feel it kinda came out all at once when it should have been let out on a slow burn. I almost wish I had an editor or someone to ask on what should happen, but the main thing I'm thinking of doing is making a sister story with references to the vampires until they make a move against Equestria outside of the chat's between Cadence and Artemis, especially since Artemis is supposed to be focused on right now anyway since what he's doing right now is kind of important in the grand scale of things.
Also thank you for enjoying the story, i really enjoy it when my work is appreciated even when I'm trying to fix a problem that happened because I let my train of thought run itself off the rails.
8630557
Yeah, I'm gonna be honest... I don't really care about this story anymore. The execution of this admittedly interesting premise is too mangled for me to take it seriously.
8632536
Sorry about the earlier comment, I think I had a few ideas mixed with Bipolar disorder which is in a similar vein to depression. I Know depression isn't a simple thing to convey at all, living with a family member who is affected by depression has taught me that much. Some are affected worse than others and depending on treatment can act differently. For now I'll just stay away from Pinkie's antics as I have a lot on my mind right now and more important projects to finish. Thanks for the info by the way, it can be hard to get valuable feedback at times and there are still a few parts of the story that I'm hung up about that I'm trying to rectify, but the feedback on those is more a dislike of a concept, and has made me feel like I may have accidentally jumped the shark. Sorry for rambling, but I hope to return to this story one day once I have everything figured out, it;s not a lack of ideas for the story that has halted everything, but an overabundance and overcoming the hurdle presented by that disliked idea.