Twilight Sparkle, bearer of the element of magic, student of princess Celestia, and younger sister to Shining Armor. The problem is Twilight Sparkle doesn't exist.
I'm curious about Scootaloo's dad and I found it cute the way Sweetie Belle spent the day with Spike. Lastly, your characterization of Blueblood is interesting.
5781418 The Pinkie scene was hard for me... I almost felt like scrapping it at first, but its importance to the story won out in the end. I'm still not entirely pleased with that part and I myself thought that scene felt forced and tried to make that part smoother. This is why I enjoy getting comments. It lets me see places where things need some improvement and I'm curious as to what else feels too forced or may need some explanation or improvement if you don't mind sharing your thoughts on things. I personally view Pinkie in an odd way somewhat, she's happy and bubbly to be sure, but that is only to force back the crippling depression she is shown to have. I have no idea if she takes medication for it in the show but with how things are presented, not likely. The reason why Pinkie acts more...bitter towards Twilight/Dusk because she blames her exclusion from the element bearers primarily on them. I am currently reworking the Pinkie scene in order to make it feel more natural and again thank you for pointing that out otherwise i would have forgot that part was a little hard to swallow. I'll post a blog when its been revised, but for now it's what it is...
5738097 Blueblood's actions will be explained later when his character is given more light. Currently though he can be considered to be a tad bit of a butt kisser and more snobbish when dealing with those he views as lower class citizens. He reals that in when dealing with those seeking his guidance and I'll say only one more thing and that is his current actions are partially because of what his special talent is.
5785387 I understand completely and I'll take a look in seeing what that edit comes up with. I'll still need to find a way to get across that the elements can move to a different bearer and Pinkie is pretty much lined up as a reoccurring antagonist for only Dusk. The reason is because of how I view Pinkie as suffering from depression and in this universe I feel that it's more towards the surface and that she easily allows it to turn into anger towards those who have wronged her. Yes I do know someone with depression and they do easily get angered during similar circumstances. Hopefully this sheds some light onto why Pinkie is still out of character. I sort of wanted the promise to be goofy in a sense because Pinkie's typically silly, even though her character appears to know more than what she lets on. I can still change a few things and the story will hopefully not be too greatly affected, still need to figure out how Pinkie might get upset with Dusk enought to pop up sand occasionally cause trouble, intentional or not, and like I said before suggestions are appreciated and I'll continue to try and make them s story as good as it possibly can be with me writing it.
I'll try and make it so that the way Pinkie is handled doesn't make people want to stop reading even if I have to remove her from the spotlight. Again I view Pinkie as having depression which isn't just sadness. Those who have it tend to go from one emotional extreme to the other in sometimes what is only a few seconds. I know this partially from my friend who suffers from the condition. In the show I believe Pinkie is constantly distracting herself which keeps her mind off of her condition but when directly affected by things that are important to her ,her defense crumbles. And it seems for all of the insights I have on Pinkie I still can't get her character right...oh well what can you do? I'll fix this as best I can I don't mind rewriting parts of a few chapters I have too much inspiration and ideas for this story than what I know what to do with right now anyways.
5785496 I have depression. While I can't describe it so easy(thanks, autism), I can describe what it feels like to me. Ok, so imagine there's this ocean constantly raging, just banging and crashing like a very stormy GIF. The ocean is contained in your skin, larger than you can imagine even as you see it before your eyes. There's a single figure dangling over it, barely above the water line. This figure hangs from strings like a live puppet, the strings disappearing into nothingness far above, seemingly rooted to Andromeda or something equally far. Sometimes the strings snap, and it can take days for them to mend, sometimes longer. The ocean is my Depression, and all the emotions I 'bottle' with it. This includes Grief, Sadness, Apathy, Guilt, and even Anger. This is only what I've identified, though. The strings supporting the puppet are made up of many things. I've identified a number of them. Within them exists my love for and knowledge of MLP and a few other fictions of choice, my disgust of all things suicide(which is not anything other than a mental construct so I don't try it again, but it worked already, so props to the Bad Dog theory), the people I choose to be around, my chosen family(some of whom are also blood), and my personally constructed playlist(I called it Be Careful in an attempt to convince myself I'm something to reconsider, even just something I put to gether using YouTube). The puppet is me, constantly swaying in the winds blown by the movement of the world outside the flesh prison, almost as though it wants those strings to snap. I hope I haven't bored you with this, I just thought you might like to see what my depression looks like as best I could tell it. I'm hoping I got my intention for this message across, if I did not, PM me and I will attempt to explain myself better.
I'm curious about Scootaloo's dad and I found it cute the way Sweetie Belle spent the day with Spike. Lastly, your characterization of Blueblood is interesting.
5781418 The Pinkie scene was hard for me... I almost felt like scrapping it at first, but its importance to the story won out in the end. I'm still not entirely pleased with that part and I myself thought that scene felt forced and tried to make that part smoother. This is why I enjoy getting comments. It lets me see places where things need some improvement and I'm curious as to what else feels too forced or may need some explanation or improvement if you don't mind sharing your thoughts on things. I personally view Pinkie in an odd way somewhat, she's happy and bubbly to be sure, but that is only to force back the crippling depression she is shown to have. I have no idea if she takes medication for it in the show but with how things are presented, not likely. The reason why Pinkie acts more...bitter towards Twilight/Dusk because she blames her exclusion from the element bearers primarily on them. I am currently reworking the Pinkie scene in order to make it feel more natural and again thank you for pointing that out otherwise i would have forgot that part was a little hard to swallow. I'll post a blog when its been revised, but for now it's what it is...
5738097 Blueblood's actions will be explained later when his character is given more light. Currently though he can be considered to be a tad bit of a butt kisser and more snobbish when dealing with those he views as lower class citizens. He reals that in when dealing with those seeking his guidance and I'll say only one more thing and that is his current actions are partially because of what his special talent is.
5785387 I understand completely and I'll take a look in seeing what that edit comes up with. I'll still need to find a way to get across that the elements can move to a different bearer and Pinkie is pretty much lined up as a reoccurring antagonist for only Dusk. The reason is because of how I view Pinkie as suffering from depression and in this universe I feel that it's more towards the surface and that she easily allows it to turn into anger towards those who have wronged her. Yes I do know someone with depression and they do easily get angered during similar circumstances. Hopefully this sheds some light onto why Pinkie is still out of character. I sort of wanted the promise to be goofy in a sense because Pinkie's typically silly, even though her character appears to know more than what she lets on. I can still change a few things and the story will hopefully not be too greatly affected, still need to figure out how Pinkie might get upset with Dusk enought to pop up sand occasionally cause trouble, intentional or not, and like I said before suggestions are appreciated and I'll continue to try and make them s story as good as it possibly can be with me writing it.
I'll try and make it so that the way Pinkie is handled doesn't make people want to stop reading even if I have to remove her from the spotlight. Again I view Pinkie as having depression which isn't just sadness. Those who have it tend to go from one emotional extreme to the other in sometimes what is only a few seconds. I know this partially from my friend who suffers from the condition. In the show I believe Pinkie is constantly distracting herself which keeps her mind off of her condition but when directly affected by things that are important to her ,her defense crumbles. And it seems for all of the insights I have on Pinkie I still can't get her character right...oh well what can you do? I'll fix this as best I can I don't mind rewriting parts of a few chapters I have too much inspiration and ideas for this story than what I know what to do with right now anyways.
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I have depression. While I can't describe it so easy(thanks, autism), I can describe what it feels like to me. Ok, so imagine there's this ocean constantly raging, just banging and crashing like a very stormy GIF. The ocean is contained in your skin, larger than you can imagine even as you see it before your eyes. There's a single figure dangling over it, barely above the water line. This figure hangs from strings like a live puppet, the strings disappearing into nothingness far above, seemingly rooted to Andromeda or something equally far. Sometimes the strings snap, and it can take days for them to mend, sometimes longer. The ocean is my Depression, and all the emotions I 'bottle' with it. This includes Grief, Sadness, Apathy, Guilt, and even Anger. This is only what I've identified, though. The strings supporting the puppet are made up of many things. I've identified a number of them. Within them exists my love for and knowledge of MLP and a few other fictions of choice, my disgust of all things suicide(which is not anything other than a mental construct so I don't try it again, but it worked already, so props to the Bad Dog theory), the people I choose to be around, my chosen family(some of whom are also blood), and my personally constructed playlist(I called it Be Careful in an attempt to convince myself I'm something to reconsider, even just something I put to gether using YouTube). The puppet is me, constantly swaying in the winds blown by the movement of the world outside the flesh prison, almost as though it wants those strings to snap. I hope I haven't bored you with this, I just thought you might like to see what my depression looks like as best I could tell it. I'm hoping I got my intention for this message across, if I did not, PM me and I will attempt to explain myself better.