Twilight Sparkle, bearer of the element of magic, student of princess Celestia, and younger sister to Shining Armor. The problem is Twilight Sparkle doesn't exist.
Feel free to talk to me about the story. Personally I think my other story The Darkest Kind of Kindness is better, but I won't judge it until I start getting responses about it. Also please be patient with this story, The Darkest Kind of Kindness has higher priority right now and will receive quicker updates even though it is not submitted to the site yet.
This has potential, dood. I'm rather interested to see how this plays out, dood. Shame that Spike doesn't know that Twilight and Dusk are the same, but that's up to you, dood.
“Poor, poor, dumb Spike, I really should teach him more.”
Well that's... Twilight (well, Dusk) is really that awful? This is like the fourth time he's thought about how stupid Spike is this chapter alone... and Spike even said "sorry to intrude on personal matters" as if he's just his assistant...
So not only is the relationship broken from the start, but Dusk holds Spike in contempt and insults Spike in his mind about how dumb Spike is, and apparently Sunset, the love of Dusk's life, hates him too...
And you even say that Twilight raised him, which... if you're raised by someone who wants to laugh at how stupid you are, and isn't allowed to to talk about your life, you're probably inflicting more than neglect on the boy.
... Its hard to understate how terrible this makes Dusk seem like, to me. It straight up, right out the gate, turns the relationship between "Twilight" and Spike into one that feels broken, and one where "Twilight" actively conspires against him and treats him in ways that a caretaker should never treat someone in their care.
... So I'm guessing there's no Equestria... Guy chapter? (... What was your first clue?) Dusk was dating Sunset. Anyway, it's a shame the Dazzlings are just going to shenanigize everything.
6027089 Ah! So Someone finally noticed that little bit of detail. The relationship between Spike and his caretaker isn't meant to be stable. A lot of the characters in my universe, as strange as it is, tend to have a lot more going on than what they let on. Spike is never told the secret because, well quite frankly, he is close to Celestia and can't keep anything a secret for too long.
With the way Dusk Shine's life is, he's also probably got a few mental issues, add on the fact that he never really has time to care for Spike. In reality even though Twilight is the one who is responsible for raising Spike, she's more of a grumpy nanny that shows up every once in a while to him. Spike respects Twilight and even loves her, but she doesn't really return the favor outside of trusting him to be an assistant. Spike will later learn that Twilight really isn't all that interested in taking care of him, and assuming you've read later chapters, it is even mentioned that Fluttershy is more of a mother and caretaker to Spike than Twilight is.
Dusk Shine, for all that he does, is written in a way where you aren't supposed to fully like him. If you read later you'll find that I add little bits of odd pieces to his personality or actions that in the long run give you a better idea of who Dusk Shine AKA Twilight really is.
Feel free to talk to me about the story. Personally I think my other story The Darkest Kind of Kindness is better, but I won't judge it until I start getting responses about it. Also please be patient with this story, The Darkest Kind of Kindness has higher priority right now and will receive quicker updates even though it is not submitted to the site yet.
This has potential, dood. I'm rather interested to see how this plays out, dood. Shame that Spike doesn't know that Twilight and Dusk are the same, but that's up to you, dood.
Damn, this seems like an interesting story.
You have my attention and my interest! Please, continue.
Also, DAMN this Celestia is a bitch. Sunny called it right.
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It's funnier if you call the ship name sunshine
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Well that's... Twilight (well, Dusk) is really that awful? This is like the fourth time he's thought about how stupid Spike is this chapter alone... and Spike even said "sorry to intrude on personal matters" as if he's just his assistant...
So not only is the relationship broken from the start, but Dusk holds Spike in contempt and insults Spike in his mind about how dumb Spike is, and apparently Sunset, the love of Dusk's life, hates him too...
And you even say that Twilight raised him, which... if you're raised by someone who wants to laugh at how stupid you are, and isn't allowed to to talk about your life, you're probably inflicting more than neglect on the boy.
... Its hard to understate how terrible this makes Dusk seem like, to me. It straight up, right out the gate, turns the relationship between "Twilight" and Spike into one that feels broken, and one where "Twilight" actively conspires against him and treats him in ways that a caretaker should never treat someone in their care.
... So I'm guessing there's no Equestria... Guy chapter?
(... What was your first clue?)
Dusk was dating Sunset. Anyway, it's a shame the Dazzlings are just going to shenanigize everything.
Sexists!!! I demand the Sam right for the guys in equestria!!!
6027089 Ah! So Someone finally noticed that little bit of detail. The relationship between Spike and his caretaker isn't meant to be stable. A lot of the characters in my universe, as strange as it is, tend to have a lot more going on than what they let on. Spike is never told the secret because, well quite frankly, he is close to Celestia and can't keep anything a secret for too long.
With the way Dusk Shine's life is, he's also probably got a few mental issues, add on the fact that he never really has time to care for Spike. In reality even though Twilight is the one who is responsible for raising Spike, she's more of a grumpy nanny that shows up every once in a while to him. Spike respects Twilight and even loves her, but she doesn't really return the favor outside of trusting him to be an assistant. Spike will later learn that Twilight really isn't all that interested in taking care of him, and assuming you've read later chapters, it is even mentioned that Fluttershy is more of a mother and caretaker to Spike than Twilight is.
Dusk Shine, for all that he does, is written in a way where you aren't supposed to fully like him. If you read later you'll find that I add little bits of odd pieces to his personality or actions that in the long run give you a better idea of who Dusk Shine AKA Twilight really is.