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DimTye


A fetish author who enjoys all sorts of kinky stuff; PM me if you'd like to commission a story!

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Well, unlike most other clocfips i read, this one was readable.

However, I did not expect them to be hermaphrodites. It would've been convenient to know what was going to be read, but I digress.

Good pacing, with a nice backstory thingy(Rarity having a headache and whatever else). Possibly one of the few clocfips i prefer to actually be good, not bad with rushed in scenes and bad reasons.

I hate clop, but you've managed to impress me and show not all of it is terrible(except it is in my book).

would fap if i was a clopper, but im not.

8/8 gr8 for a clocfip.

Great story. However, it did surprise me that they turned out to be hermaphrodites. But that is hardly a problem when compared to the overall splendor of the story itself.

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Is there a way to inform people about that before they read it? Should it go into the short description?

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I would put a content warning at the bottom of the long description.

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Aaaaand done.

5510218 5510341 This was the original description:

After a long day with a trying client, Rarity has a killer headache. Fluttershy suggests a trip to the spa to get her friend to relax. Once there, the Aloe and Lotus perform their duties flawlessly, leaving both futa-mares rather excited.

The final treatment is a dip in the mudbath, where Fluttershy proposes an age-old cure for headaches.

This description explicitly states that both Rarity and Fluttershy have dicks... right there in red... with the key word underlined. It does not need a content disclaimer because the content in stated in the description, just like you don't need to warn people that a package of nuts contains nuts. Seriously, if you are allergic to peanuts and you need a warning to tell you not to eat a package of peanuts then you deserve to die! My allergic-to-peanuts-brother and allergic-to-peanuts-sister have both agreed with me on this! ... I'm sorry, what were we talking about again? Oh right.

Asian Assblasters!
"Watch as these hot young women of the orient take it up the ass hard for your viewing pleasure!!"

*warning: this film contains anal

...Huh. That was actually pretty good, especially for a first-time story. I actually don't really have anything bad to say about it. Have a like, fave and follow.

5511993
Thank you, sir!

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Must have missed that...my bad.

that was pretty great for your first clopfic!

Shafts sinking into muzzles and marehoods, bellies swelling with cum.

but I would really dig some more of this if you ever do another one!

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Consider it a teaser. I've got a lot of kinks I personally enjoy, and that's just one of them :)

5510129 Don't you mean:

I r8 8/8 gr8 'bate m8?

First, you say...? :pinkiegasp: Wow.

“NO BODILY FLUIDS IN THE MUDBATH (Swallow please!)”

This requires a sequel merely to explain why that sign became a necessity.

I liked it. Not much else to say. It was fun, and I would look forward to another installment.

It had been a whirlwind day at the Carousel Boutique - over a dozen orders had come in before lunch, and Rarity had been in a tizzy ever since. Her customers had been nothing but polite and cordial, with the one exception of an Earth pony bride-to-be, who put dragons to shame with her displays of aggression and entitlement. Rarity had spent the last hour of her day gritting her teeth and putting on her most polite facade to the young mare and her hovering mother, but when the door finally closed and she flipped the “Open” sign to “Closed” she slumped down, sighing heavily.

Why do I truly believe that it seems like it's Diamond Tiara that was the Bridezilla, and implicitly states that her mother is a pegasus? Honestly I haven't seen that before where Tiara's momma was not just alive and kicking, but she can fly, it's certainly a refreshing change. And you know, now I could reasoning for bullying the CMC--Tiara is from a intertribal family: Filthy Rich is an Earth Pony like Tiara, and Mama is a flyer. That would be pretty cool if I say so myself. But back to the story....

Like many ponies, Fluttershy and Rarity had been blessed with both sets of reproductive organs,

I would think that it would be incredible for just one of them to have both sets of functioning baby-making organs, but to show that both of the main characters have all the parts, as well as implying that it's a known facts that it's not rare...well it makes me wonder if there was a radiation leak, or that it was just a symptom of being an Element of Harmony or near one....

Rarity and Fluttershy looked up at the sign, which read “NO BODILY FLUIDS IN THE MUDBATH (Swallow please!)”.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:........wow...

“One b-book even said that w-when a pony has a headache… an o-o-orgasm c-can help them f-feel better,” Fluttershy rasped. “And I was wondering if… if… I could… help you have one? An orgasm, I mean, not a headache! That would be silly.”

That's not silly at all, Fluttershy!! A good cum is good for ya, makes you fall fast asleep after that, because you're relaxed, and I'm pretty your mate appreciates it too....The 'I have a headache' excuse is forever wiped, but still respect your partner at all time and get consent....

I've got to tell you, truly loved the double blowjob scene in the mud. And both of them adhered to the sign too!!! I feel a little jilted though because now you've gone and ended it just as the getting's good...well better than it is. You stayed with your premise of being a one-shot fic, especially with that last paragraph that pretty much is gonna show what happens after the mudbath. I have a feeling that even though they want to curb their arousal and wait until they get back to the boutique, it isn't gonna stay that way. Also, I assume that since they are heading for the showers anyway, it could come into a bit of a party with the twins in the shower.

This needs more....but then again, it may be good to stop it at this point and let the imagination take over. I can understand that. Great story. Another RariShy similar to your latest one, but you flipped it and made it unique. Well done!! :raritywink::heart::yay:

Fluttershy froze at the edge of the tub, blushing fiercely at her friends words.

Should be a possessive apostrophe on "friends."

why have flutter and rarity have female parts? they are futas, aren't they? female body, male sex.

Please tell me you're planning on writing more.

Seriously there's got to be a sequel for this in the making I love this world you created in this story

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