This story is a sequel to Equestria Wars Episode VII: The Return of Revan
A few years after the death of Regal Crescent, a dark presence emerges from the shadows. Light Sparkle wishes to join the Crystal Knight but her father refuses to let her. With Sombra as Charming Thunder's guide, he will soon become king and confront the forces of evil that have risen.
Note: The reason why Light Sparkle looks like Twilight is because of the last episode that described her to have the same mane as her but red.
Chapters (10)
This story is awesome! You totally portray the spirit of the source material in a way George Lucas would be proud, the pacing is consistent and your spelling and grammar display your clear mastery over the English language.
Of course, there is a very, very tiny, inconsequential little mistake that not a lot of people will notice and isn't really a big deal. And that is that this story is horrid. All of the above compliments were a lie. Please, take a break, get an editor, and put some effort into your work.
Also, random observation (I'm good at those):
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You reminded me of a much better series. If you'll excuse me, I'm off to rewatch Teen Titans.
dis storee iz really good!
5497402 Hey, you're back online!
How's it been?
Great story I'll follow and like
5497402 Yes, how are you?
5496665 its the only name I could come up with
5500128 I wasn't saying it was unoriginal (which it debatably is), I was saying that it reminded me of Teen Titans.
5500151 Do you really think the story is awesome? Or are you just lying?
I just want to be sure.
5518962 He straight up said its a sarcastic comment when he was praising it.
5518962 Clearly you just cant seem to understand how everyone feels about this story, so before you delete this comment, hear me out because you just need someone to give it to you bluntly.
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...its absolutely awful, the worst Star Wars crossover I have seen to date and thats coming from a Star Wars fanboy. Its taking all of my energy not to go ballistic and make a rage comment about this thing or post up a clip of a reviewer from youtube saying its awful in some way, because if I do either of those things its a one way road to delete-ville, Im already on thin ice with you as is from what Im expecting. Please reply to this comment with questions on what you did wrong or how to improve, dont just ignore this or delete it. Maybe there could be a chance for you if you just start over with better writing skills and knowledge of wrong from right.
5587295 private message me on what I should do. I appreciate it.
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Hello good sir. Even though I'm new to the system here, I want to talk to you about something. Have you thought about adding a new military force? I have a profile and I am a leader to a organization called "The Phantom Consortium". We spread corruption but the tech we get is from this link.
Zann Consortium
Now, some call us bad guys and some call us good guys. However, conquest is NOT our way.
5953125 I'll keep that in mind. You want me to write a side story fanfic based on them?
List the name of characters who are in that group for me.
5955292 I was thinking that Suri Polomare should be second command cause Sunset Shimmer is still in the human world.
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I agree with the idea. But what about HK-47? Last I recall during the Revan crisis, Charming Thunder destroyed him..... Wait! I have an idea! Let's say that I found him, repair him, and reprogramed him. But you also need to know what I'm capable of since only Luna and Sombra knows of my still existence, since I sent to the Ghost Zone (Because of Clockwork's request and Celestia permission). So, here is my data Darkbine did for me.
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Name: Danny Eclipse
Species: Equestrian Halfa [Pegasus Halfa] & Vampony [Pureblood]
Powers, skills, and abilities of: Danny Phantom
Other Abilities: Immune to Nightmares, Able to walk into others' dreams, can't be overshadowed by ghosts, & can use Ghost Artifacts to the same effectiveness (So he can wield Soul Shredder and Ember Mclaim's Guitar).
Relatives: Princess Luna/Nightmare Moon (Mother), Princess Celestia (Aunt), King Sombra (Father), Twilight Eclipse (Twin Sister), Princess Cadance (Cousin), Prince Blueblood (Cousin), & Nyx (Cousin-in-Blood)
Weapons: Lightsabers [4: 3 single blades (2 normal sized, 1 short size, like a dagger) & 1 Doudble-edged Lightsaber (Gained after killing Stalker)]
Swordman's skills: Duel Wielder (Mainly), Double-edged combat (Secondary), and single handed combat (Secondary, but only uses it when he uses only 1 lightsaber.)
1st Appearance: "Son of Princess Luna" by Danny Eclipse [me]. [It is still under work, but will be coming out soon. I have to work on it on a daily basis so you will be seeing it on FIMfiction under Danny Phantom and MLP Crossover.]
Feats: Help defeat Nightmare Moon, defeated Discord [By using the Reality Gauntlet], defeated Queen Chrysalis [At the 2nd try, was defeated at 1st because of her ability to change forms], help defeat Sunset Shimmer, defeated Pariah Dark [By himself and claimed the Throne of being "King of the Ghost Zone"], Defeated Twivine Sparkle [With Twilight Sparkle and Twilight Eclipse's help], and reformed Omega Brony.
Weaknesses: Weak to Ectoplasm Attacks, Sun Magic [Due to him being the Son of Princess Luna, and the dark hates light, it stands for reason he is weak against Princess Celestia's Magic]
Boyfriend [And later Husband] to: Rainbow Dash
CM Detail: Before he became a Halfa, that CM was tattooed to his flank, so it isn't an actual CM. [Meaning; Starlight Glimmer's Cutie Mark removing spell or The Staff of Sameness has no effect to him because he is a permanent Blank Flank. Clockwork Tattooed the insignia to his flank so he wouldn't be laughed at when he returns because he was believed to be a Blank Flank.]
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So now, you have my data. Use it wisely.
5958667 and Charming Thunder could be his long lost brother.
5958965 True, there is that part. But he wasn't exactly recovered from the ruins of the Crystal Empire. He was born in Canterlot. Oh, and Darkbine forgot to add the Vampony powers.
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Danny Eclipse's Vampony Powers:
Magic: Drain Heal & Lightning Magic [Both enhanced due to him being a pureblood.]
Abilities: When he gets at least a sip of blood; he unlocks hidden abilities and status increase [Ex: Applejack = Increase on Strength and Durability or Twilight = Increase on Magic Using and incredible intelligence.], When consuming blood within 2 weeks increases his status and power while buying more time before the deadline for the next meal (Rarely does this, unless needed absolutely or when he comes across criminals), increase on status and magic, able to walk into daylight (Pureblood), able to hide his true looks (Appearance changes: Eyes, teeth), etc.
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That is all of that. Anyway, if you wish to do that, you should my personality so I don't act out-of-character
Personality: Similar to Danny Phantom but 1 key difference. I get angry if annoyed too much, which is not a good thing due to my "Defense mechanism"/Dark Side.
Dark Side: Called itself "Darth Revan" (No copyright). He acts like a jerk and won't hesitate to kill the target. He is able to perform Dark Magic and can easily use the Dark Side and Universal Powers.
Besides that, that is all about me.
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Where have you been man? Beginning to think you left me with no reply.
5981746 Sorry. I have been busy but I have read your character's vampony bio. It is very interesting.
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Hey, its ok. 2 things I will ask/say, if you don't mind. 1) When are you planning to continue this story? And 2) don't mind the haters. If they hate this so much then they can stop reading the series. Those who like it, they keep going. Listen, its your story. If people hate the story then screw them, this is your story and no one is going to change that. YOU are the writer and author, THEY are the readers. Their opinion is theirs alone and you can't let that stop you. Keep to the story and I will read it. I love the story so far, don't stop it now because of haters. Also, 1 thing to ask. I'm finished up with Chapter 30 and was hoping before I do Chapter 31 or somewhere around there, I was hoping to add Charming Thunder into it. Do you mind if I do that? He's your character, not mine. I'll even add the love relationship between Charming Thunder & Twilight Sparkle.
5985482 I'm coming up with ideas on what happens next in the story. I am happy for you to add my character in your story.
5985605
Ok and thank you.
5988958 Where in the timeline does your story take place for the Equestria Wars series? In between an episode to be exact. I wish to see your story.
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My story isn't exactly that. Its mostly a Danny Phantom and MLP Crossover with many other crossovers in it (Ex: Star Trek, Star Wars, Sonic the Hedgehog, Five Nights at Freddy's, etc.). I can send you a link if you want.
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Hey dude. I have made a Side Story, made by myself. I call it " Phantom War: Rise of the Consortium". Its about a side story after "Fall of the New Lunar Republic" when Danny came out of hiding, after he organized a small military force of Ponies, Droids, and Rogue Changelings. I have decided a replacement 2nd in command named: "King Metamorphosis", he was like chrysalis but male version and more of a military person than Chrysalis was. Plus, he is faithfully loyal to me and would die for my cause. Hope you like it, I JUST got started with it.
5993290 I'm sure I will once it is posted.
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Dude, where have you been?
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IMPORTANT MESSAGE AND NEED IMMEDIATE REPLY!!!
I plan to make a Death Battle between Danny Eclipse and Charming Thunder to see which brother is the greatest! I need to know Charming Thunder. His Likes, Dislikes, advantages, disadvantages, powers, skills in battle, weapons, armor, etc. If you need to make it out how to make it good, look up on Youtube "Screwattack" and look for the series "Death Battle". That should help you figure out how to make an intro on Charming Thunder
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Name: Charming Thunder
Height: Approx 5'
Two Time War Hero
King Of Harmony
Raised with Princess Cadence
Son of King Sombra
Married to Twilight Sparkle
Unicorn Spells:
Lightning
Magic Choke
Magic Blast
Teleport
Levitation Spell
Attributes:
Brave and Loyal
Preferred Weapons:
Lightsaber (red)
DL-44 heavy blaster pistol
Unicorn Magic
Abilities:
Immortality
Skilled with Lightsaber
Healing Factor
Strengths and Weaknesses:
Loss of Life in his Family
Guidance from King Sombra's Spirit
Had his Right Hoof Chopped Off by King Sombra
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That is all I have. The rest is up to you if you have read my fanfics.
5985482 the next chapter is finally done. Sorry it took so long.
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Sweet man! It's going awesome so far! I'm working on Phantom Wars II and I've already got something going. If I'm lucky, my series will cross over to yours. Just don't add Griffins, Minotaurs, or Zebras (Except for Zecora) in. My plans tell me that the series is going to make more logic and sense.
Wait, Charming! It's too dangerous!
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Hey, this is actually good! Chrysalis has Meta for contact! We can drive Meta into this conflict since he IS Chrysalis's husband. Meta, The Changeling Faction of the Phantom Consortium, and an army of Droids from the Phantom Consortium (Most likely Droideka MK IIs). But we can't allow Meta to tell of Danny Eclipse. The thing is on the part, Danny's been gone for more than 3 months, and they can't find him. This can work 2 ways. During Meta's absence, Lightning takes over. We should do that, and besides, Meta will fight with his Wife any day. He does respect Danny, so he would respect Charming. Wait, I got an idea when Meta meets Charming and Luna.
How's that on how they meet?
6100351 That's a great idea. Is it for my story or yours?
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Yours. I'm busy doing Chapter 2 - "Element of Greed" for Phantom War III. Its basically all about Danny and his team. Oh, and I found you on Gmail. On Gmail, my avatar is "Darkbine Darkblack".
For two seconds I thought he was going to say mother.
6102722 All that remains is the coronation of Charming Thunder. Any ideas? I already came up with his speech.
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Here is an idea. Meta, Chrysalis, Twilight, and the other Princesses arrived. During that day, Chrysalis and Meta sign a treaty for a Equestria-Changeling Alliance. Also, during the treaty, Dusk contacts Meta.
You can make Equestria War IX after that chapter. What do you think?
6105047 that's good. but what about the coronation scene. the speech I already came up by myself.
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Well, do you want your OC to become an Alicorn or remain a Unicorn for 1. 2) make the crown and think of a title. Make the coronation like Twilight's, if you want. And 3) Have Fireworks.
6105360 This is what his crown looks like:
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Made the picture myself. He is still a unicorn and is titled the king of Harmony.
6105370
Alright. So, make the coronation like Twilight's and add the fireworks. To add show, making the TIE Bombers do it or whatever they are called.
6105559 It is finally done.
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Indeed. Now the time of darkness is approaching.