This story is a sequel to The Journey to the Xenomorph Temple
A rebel cruiser lead by Luke Skywalker was fighting the Star Destroyers over an unexplored planet. The cruiser then crashed landed in the planet in the Everfree Forest. The rebels will have to team up with talking ponies named Charming Thunder, Twilight, Shining Armor, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, Rarity, and Princess Celestia to stop Darth Vader from taking over Equestria.
(This story takes place between Episodes V and VI of the Star Wars saga)
Chapters (12)
Congratulations. You have done worse things to Star Wars in 1,160 words than George Lucas did in three movies.
2589209
I have not
2590070 Well, actually, let's compare this to the prequel trilogy in terms of awfulness.
Awful OCs: Jar Jar vs. your godawful self insert - TIE
Horrible graphics: Constant bad CG vs. that cover art - TIE
Established Characters: 15 different shades of stupid vs. impossibly OOC everyone - TIE
Stupid Plot: Everyone runs around like morons vs. Everyone runs around like morons - TIE
Hmm... I think you're right. You ruined the Star Wars universe with your presence just as much as the prequels did, not more
2590156 Its not like the prequels.
It is before Luke Skywalker rescues Han Solo. 
2590896 I didn't say it was during the prequels. I just said it was shit.
2590918 OK then.
What do you think it should be about? Or do you think the plot is fine? 
2590925 Well, for me, as long as its star wars, its gold.
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We'll see how you react once Disney is finished raping the Star Wars franchise...
2590156 dude the clone troopers were awesome! (because they could hit a target unlike a storm trooper)
2594377 Well, look at it this way, they can't make it any worse then it is on and I think Disney mite be able to do the franchise some good.
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(on a side note, now they can put Star Wars in Kingdom Hearts and that would be totally awesome.
2594557
*sigh* No, no and NO. Now we can kiss goodbye to 1313 and Battlefront 3...
Thanks, Lucas!
2594564 I see...but I heard that they are giving those two to...I think EA or Ubisoft.
2594579
A shame THQ died... they could do a better work of it than EA.
2594581 WHAT!!!!! THQ, dead...NNNNNNNOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!
My life is ruined.
2594588
Have you been living under a rock or something?
Caveman...
2594590 OH, what about you, you thought we were going to kiss 1313 and Battlefront 3 good-by.
2594604
I'm busy. I have to write crossovers...
2594611
Must...read...crossovers.
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I have several. And several more in the works.
2594557 Dude, they're planning on churning out a new movie literally every single year simply because they know people will go see it because it's star wars.
It's DEAD.
Rather than comment on the failings of George Lucas or the handling of the Starwars franchise I think I'll talk about your story. The pace is TOO FAST! Your zipping along at mach speed, try describing the locations, the atmosphere, why characters are where they are. I mean Luna, Cadance and Shining Armor are in Ponyville with no explanation at all. Also why are the Rebels in a unexplored system? This story has potential but it's way to short and skips the details that create a feel for the locations and events that dialogue can't do on it's own.
2598415 You think they mite do a re-boot of it?
2599950 I would fucking hunt them down.
2598687 Did you read my first story? It will tell you why Shining Armor and Cadence are in Ponyville. Luna was just visiting Ponyville only in the first chapter because she is the princess of the night.
You should describe their facial emotions.
Give the battle scene a bit more details.
You should read every statement again, one example you wrote:
"When he hid, the blasted the spot where he was last standing."
If you would be kind, check all the chapters again to correct the mistakes.
Secondly, don't just put what you think they should do, they sound like they know what their doing which ruins the atmostphere.
Put it in first perspective, think what would a rational person do first then slowly build on it towards your goal to make it more believable.
You will have to find a way to continue extending the same atmosphere longer. Its almost like every statement ruins the previous atmosphere in an instant.
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I don't think I'll be doing that. Also why didn't you mention this was a sequel in the description? If another story helps the reader understand the situation then you should say so. You should still explain in THIS story why Cadance and Shining Armor are in Ponyville briefly. The chapters are still to short and lack any sort of details of the setting or situations. When you write you should try to get in the head space of the reader, if your using your imagination to fill in all the details but NOT writing them down, your doing it wrong. You need to describe more of what characters see and feel, not just say when they are and have them start talking.
Thanks for the advice everyone.
I did say in one of the chapters that IG-88 is going to make an appearance in this story. If you have advice on how to describe him, please reply to my comment. Thank You. 
2589209 Am I the only one who liked the prequels more than the originals?
2659944 Yes.
Yes, you are.
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Quick chapter, yet resourceful, MOOOOOOORRRRRRRREEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
not that this isn't fun to read but i was expecting more especially from this chapter like how tia is incapacitated for a small while by vader and fights an enraged luna & vader taunts her saying "you can do better if you want to kill me" & completes his goading by saying "perhaps you would do better if you were still nightmare moon"
2608700 not that this isn't fun to read but i was expecting more especially from this chapter like how tia is incapacitated for a small while by vader and fights an enraged luna & vader taunts her saying "you can do better if you want to kill me" & completes his goading by saying "perhaps you would do better if you were still nightmare moon"
2611075 hers 2 pics of ig-88 a funny one and a descibed one null
http://starwars.com/explore/encyclopedia/characters/ig88/
one more chapter and then I am finished.
you do know that the Y-Wing is the slowest rebelfigther? The fast ones are the A-Wings.
wait why is Rainbow a Squadron leader? if the ship is still intact, the pilot is ok and has more than rainbow´s one day of fligth trainig and also combat experience. if the pilot isn´t ok how is his ship not a wreck?
A lot of the grammar isn't good. Some sentences are confusing as well. Needs editing
2590156 How can you hate his OC?! HE'S GOT THE TRIFORCE AS HIS STUD STAMP! IN A STAR WARS STORY! HOW CAN YOU HATE HIM?! IT'S THE MOST GLORIOUS THING THAT HAS EVER HAPPENED!
It is fast but not as the A-Wings, but I think it does have the speed booster ability like them. But its secondary weapon, the sonic pulse, is devastating and sound barrier breaking. If u hear a loud boom, it unleashes a deadly shockwave that destroys everything in its path. Chances of surviving the attack is between five to zero, the former number if you're lucky with only your shields completely destroyed leaving your craft ready to go down with one last shot. What's make it even more deadly is, like the Y-Wings, it can replenish overtime.
I knew this info because I played multiplayer on the GameCube "Star Wars rogue squadron 3: rebel strike", which is the only game mode to play as the starship. Pretty cowardly to play as if u really suck going against pro players.
What the hell??!!
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!!!!!!!!!! You can't just end it like this that's complete rubbish!!!!!!!!
I like your stories involving Star Wars!
The entire Empire vs One Planet?... How's Alderaan doing these days?
2611075 just look him up
3818843 I guess the original pilot got caught in the cruiser's explosion.
so someone else took it