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More of a reviewer than a writer...

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Princess Celestia, when not facing down end of the world catastrophes, has a very basic routine she's come to tolerate. From sunrise to sunset, the same schedule over and over. Listening, petitioning, more listening and then finally announcing her verdict.

When she's finally done with the affairs of the court and tending to the populace, she decides to go take a nap. To a special place that no pony can find her, a place that no pony would suspect a princess to safely secretly slumber . For where she's heading is worth more than a dragon lord's horde and it makes her happier than a day spent at a Summer Sun Celebration. It's a magical place that Celestia doesn't feel the eyes of everypony watching her. Magical Daycare.

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A cute story. I enjoyed reading it.

My heart exploded.

How well written! :twilightsmile:
I really enjoyed this story... By any chance, are you going to do a sequel? :pinkiehappy:

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I try and no this was just something I wrote off the top of my head.
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Charging defibrillators, CLEAR!
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Thanks, it means a lot that you left a comment.

I’m reviewing this story in return for your sweet review of My Friend Tenty.

Here's my Review:
This is a very positive story by No1Special. A perfect relaxing read after a long work day. It teaches us the value of cherishing small things in the midst of life's great struggles.

It starts on a bit of a tedious side, which is a perfect contrast to the second half of the story. We find Celestia being exposed to judgement and expectations. It is wearing down on her, but she persists as there is no other choice. It is all just a prelude to establish the things that Celestia truly enjoys. A place where she refills her energy. A place where she feels most at ease. A safe haven where she can lay down the burdens of her obligation.

This story explains a bit why Celestia would act so distant whenever there was a task to complete. Ruling is not her true calling. Her heart lies elsewhere. It’s a nice inside into Celestia’s mind.

The random tag might be off putting for somepony, but in this case, it really shouldn't be. I’m not entirely sure if this story even deserves it. Personally, I’d only tag it with Slice of Life which fits this story perfectly. It’s a typical day with her regular get-away.

I give this story 7/10, which is enough for my upvote.


And now for the fun part (fun for me). No1Special, when I asked if you wanted me to sugar coat it, it was, actually, a trick question. You should have said yes! :trixieshiftleft:

Short description:

The simple luxury of napping is the greatest treasure Celestia cherishes the most.

If it’s her greatest treasure, isn’t it obvious that she cherishes it the most?

How about:
A simple luxury of napping is what Celestia cherishes the most.


Long description:

Princess Celestia, when not facing down end of the world catastrophes, has a very basic routine she's come to tolerate.

Princess Celestia, when not facing down world shattering catastrophes, has a very basic routine.

New paragraph after

From sunrise to sunset, the same schedule over and over. Listening, petitioning, more listening and then finally announcing her verdict.

When she's finally done with the affairs of the court and tending to the populace, she decides to go take a nap.

After running the court for the day and tending to the populace, she decides to go take a nap.

To a special place that no pony can find her, a place that no pony would suspect a princess to safely secretly slumber .

She goes to a special place that no pony would suspect her to go.

For where she's heading is worth more than a dragon lord's horde and it makes her happier than a day spent at a Summer Sun Celebration. It's a magical place that Celestia doesn't feel the eyes of everypony watching her. Magical Daycare.

Chapter title:
If you change it, you will be able to put this story in One Shots With the Chapter Named

Content:

Some would say they were the pillars that supported Equestria’s modern political structure.

Who is they? You were talking about Celestia …

Scholars and sages alike have all formed their own theories and ideas if the royal sisters hadn’t been there.

Scholars and sages alike have all formed their own theories and ideas what the world would look like if the royal sisters hadn’t been there.

The one universal that they have all come accept

The one universal that they have all come to accept

the royal sister’s powers in not only magic but also guiding their nation was and always will be the cornerstone for Equestria’s prosperity

the royal sister’s power does not not only consist of their magic, but also the ability to guide their nation. That was and always will be the cornerstone of Equestria’s prosperity

frivolities that could eventually everything that they had built.

frivolities that could eventually ruin everything that they had built.

Even more so when you took into account

Even more so if you take into account

Trotting at a moderate pace

Oh, so stopping means landing? Okay.

“Back again, sunshine?”

“Back again, Sunshine?”

Pulling off her golden regalia

http://www.fimfiction.net/group/50/the-writers-group/thread/149626/celestias-regalia

Grabbing pillow of a nearby shelf, she placed it carefully Celestia.

Grabbing a pillow off of a nearby shelf, she placed it carefully near(?) Celestia.

Celestia sighed in content, this was truly bliss.

Celestia sighed in content. This was truly a bliss.

Lustrous Shine began to count the foals, saying their names out loud.

Parallel processing counting and identifying? Is she like a super pony?

However before she could begin

However, before she could begin

she announced, making the rest of the nursery’s foals to watch what was happening.

she announced, making the rest of the nursery’s foals look at what was happening.

Author’s note:

Did this in one day, just cause.

It is not necessary to state this. It is already implied by the story’s grammar. :trixieshiftleft:


I just don't know what is it about the shredding of stories that I find so enjoyable. Probably the shredding part. :pinkiecrazy:

Celestia... just damn it man. You trying to give me diabeetus?

So, I love this concept and the subtle playful nature of Celestia through the narration. I enjoyed this story and giving it a thumbs up.

This is a sweet little read I'd recommend others to read if they needed a short and sweet Celestia fic.

Now that I've said that, I've found two typos that can be easily taken care of.
Floating dialogue tag.

said Celestia as she made googly eyes at a little pegasus foal, eliciting a gurgling laugh.”

Missing words

she placed it carefully Celestia.

I love this story,it's so cute!

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