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  • Thursday
    Coming Soon: Confide Part Two

    Having moved to another unit, and therefore waiting on my Internet to be reconnected, I found myself inspired to write again. And since lately I've been diving further into my headcanon, I decided to finally print out another piece of Celestia’s history.

    Chapter two of Confide, titled "Not Creators, Only Timekeepers", will be out as early as tomorrow evening.

    In this second installment, I explain my views on the origin of Celestia and Luna themselves. I also delve into the nature of their own magic, and their purposes on Equestria as a whole. If that's your kind of thing, I think you'll enjoy the chapter. If not, then I welcome your own views on the subject! Tell me what YOU think.

    If the mood strikes again, I'll continue down this Celestia-headcanon trail until her story is exhausted. Then maybe another character! Time will tell.

    See you guys tomorrow!

    ~Leo

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  • 1w, 1d
    [Mini-rant] Finally Reading this Beast

    So The Immortal Game has been in my Read Later list for about a year and a half. I finally decided to crack it open last week when waiting for laundry to finish. And I basically haven't put it down since.

    Now, I'm not yet finished with the tale (apparently I have three chapters left), but holy crap is this thing good. No wonder I was asked about it alongside FoE and Past Sins - this is exemplary stuff! The one thing I love the most, more than any of the graphic battle scenes (my inner sadist cheers for those!), is how every plot device, no matter how minuscule, has been expanded upon and made to work with the narrative. Even events way back in the past, before Celestia's reign, are brought up and worked in seamlessly. It's beautiful!

    As it stands, I've finished with the setup and first contact of the "final battle" - or what I'm hoping is the final battle. There are a few questions I have left about the story, but so far the story itself has done a great job of addressing my questions in time. I'm willing to put faith in the author (AestheticB you beautiful monster!) that my remaining questions will have answers by the end.

    Pretty much the only question I have not seen answered is why the hell I waited SO LONG to read this wonderful beast.

    ~Leo

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  • 3w, 4d
    I Reviewed a Thing


    Love this tale. Give it a look. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/216805/a-friend-of-a-friend

    ~Leo

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  • 5w, 1d
    Let's Play with Leo!

    I was bored. Decided to do my own Let's Play series. Starting out with an RPG gained from the RPG Maker Midweek Madness sale on Steam this past week.

    Come check it out. http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLL3oaOC9NrcuZVtR8Us12pDygEyU-sFkA






    Right now I've got the first three videos up. The recording is pretty lackluster, but from what I've seen of other Let's Play's, it should meet standards easily enough. Anyway, I'll be continuing the series as time allows (and between other projects like The Other Side), but since this is my first time doing anything like this, I'd like feedback. Anything you guys have to say about this, please let me know.

    ~Leo

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  • 5w, 2d
    [AMA] Let's Try Somethin'

    I've been wanting to do something like this for a while. Here's another Ask-Me-Anything, but this time the theme is all about Rain without Rainbows!

    *So it's not necessarily 'anything' but wha'ev'.

    So let's try somethin'! This particular AMA will remain open for...maybe ever. Dunno, depends on the reception (which will be low) and the questions (which I hope will be tough). In any case, if there's ever been a question you wanted to ask, or perhaps a plot point you want explained, voice your thoughts! I welcome absolutely anything for this, and who knows? There might even be a secret or spoiler revealed in the answers.

    Anywooz, if you have a question about RwR, Rainbow Dash, Alucard, me, Cyros, the Prestige Edition, the Asides, the dead-in-the-water sequel, or why Alucard isn't as smart as he lets on, ask it!

    ~Leo

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See below summary for additional information


"Make a wish."

Rainbow Dash is presented with an opportunity to gain the skill she needs to join her idols, the Wonderbolts. However, the opportunity seems false, and she learns to accept it as such. But does that mean the wish was a lie? If not, then just whose wish is actually granted?

"You cannot hope to defeat me, dear Princess. Your Harmony lies broken!"


Note: This story began in July 2011, between Seasons One and Two. Show continuity has been considered, but due to constraints, the following canon is entirely ignored:

•Discord's reformation

•Twilight's ascension and coronation

•The wildlife of the Everfree Forest

•The relinquishment of the Elements of Harmony, the Tree of Harmony, and anything regarding the finale of Season Four

•All background characters that do not directly affect the plot (such as Shining Armor, Princess Cadence, Trixie, Snips, Snails, etc.)

Author: Leoshi. Co-Author: Cyros Lugoth. Featured on EQD, Star-5.

Additional tags: Adventure, Drama, Action, Dark, Thriller, Suspense, Struggle, Serious, A/U, Everypony, Rainbow Dash, Twilight Sparkle, Luna, Spitfire, OC

First Published
20th May 2012
Last Modified
8th Jul 2014
#1 · 127w, 1h ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

hmmmm

lets see where this goes

#2 · 127w, 53m ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

>>617656     I the great and powerful :trixieshiftleft:   well also stay to see what happens

#3 · 127w, 20m ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

Oh I saw this one in Equestria Daily! :pinkiehappy: Didn't read it though .... Will read now!

#4 · 127w, 19m ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

Ah, hell. :ajbemused: I was hoping to get first post for once! That's what I get for forgetting to check my email. Oh well, still happy to see this here! So much easier to track stories on FIMFiction, in my most humble opinion.

#5 · 126w, 6d ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

Oh, I LOVE this story. So glad to see it here! :heart:

#6 · 126w, 6d ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

:rainbowhuh: Five comments in the first ninety minutes? Sweet cider, I really should have uploaded here a LONG time ago.

I'll be spending the majority of tonight updating the story with the chapters-to-date. Expect chapters two through nine to be available before too long.

And for anyone who has followed from EQD or fanfiction, here's an update: chapter ten is very nearly completed. Cyros and I are estimating a release on the 23rd, but it could very well end up being the 21st instead. Stick with us, and we'll help you get a pony fix this summer. :twilightsmile:

#7 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Five: Assault ·

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah

must...know...more

:D

yay updates updates UPDATES

#8 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Six: A Dark Tree ·

>>618451 Sheesh, you read fast. :trixieshiftright:

I'm nearly done with putting in the chapters. Sit tight a moment longer, and you'll have half of a full story to enjoy.

#9 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Six: A Dark Tree ·

:pinkiegasp: shits bout to get serious

:D keep it up

#10 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Nine: The Root ·

Dunno how many times I've read this particular chapter, but I still find myself somewhat mesmerized by your description of the magic that's subsumed Rainbow Dash. I can practically visualize it, sometimes.

#11 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Nine: The Root ·

Jesus I was surprised when I saw eight more chapters :pinkiegasp:

EDIT: Still haven't read the second chapter ,don't know how this comment got to chapter 9 lol

#12 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Nine: The Root ·

>>618736 Cyros tells me the same thing. Apparently, detail is my strength. It makes sense, I suppose, but that also means that conversations are my weakness, and THAT is most definitely the truth.

>>619871 Magic, that's how. :rainbowlaugh:

Ok, this story is pretty interesting, but certain things keep making me pull back from it. I don't think Rainbow's friends would ditch her that easily, and I don't think they would automatically assume she was a murderer. Like you mentioned, it was magic that killed the wonderbolts, and Dash is clearly incapable of such (being a pegasis and not a unicorn). I would have thought that Twilight at least would have gotten more into the investigation, if only to understand it better and help her friend. I know a lot of this is because you probably want to get to the real plot you have planned, but it just trips me up how easily everyone gives up on Dash, who is the element of Loyalty and would thus have the least legit reason for hurting her idols or her friends without being under the influence of some other malevolent force. Anywho, rant over, I shall continue reading now :twilightsheepish:

#15 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Nine: The Root ·

>>620187 Valid points. Allow me to address them:

Concerning Rainbow's friends ditching her: This wasn't up to them. Given the situation, they were not able to defend her name, while Spitfire openly blamed Rainbow for the deaths of her teammates. Over time, Spitfire's accusation became the accepted 'truth' for the residents of Equestria. Because Twilight and co. had no facts with which to counter-argue, nor could provide clues to Rainbow's whereabouts, they were left with no choice - they had to move on without her, under the guise that she was at fault.

Concerning Rainbow's friends assuming she's a murderer: This isn't actually touched on until chapter seven. In fact, only one pony (besides Spitfire) thinks Rainbow is guilty. The rest try their best to not have an opinion on it, because even thinking about it makes them sad. Applejack is the only one who will openly defend Rainbow Dash and still claim she's innocent of any wrongdoing.

Concerning the magic: This is discussed in chapter six, in quite a bit of detail. Remember, this is a thriller/mystery story, so not all the facts will be known from the start.

Concerning Twilight investigating: She did. She spent nearly a full month looking into the dilemma, but was unable to turn up anything useful. She eventually dropped the subject as time went on and other issues demanded her attention.

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Anyway, yes, please read on. You're bound to find some answers, but don't hesitate to raise any further questions. :pinkiehappy:

#16 · 126w, 5d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

Sweet Odin, that was freaking awesome. Gotta let the epic sink in, so as not to take it for granted.

Oh, saw just the one thing you might want to look at, here:

“A pony’s honor. You know, the difference between fillies and mares, guards and villagers, rulers and beggars. Where does it lay?”

The first part of your three comparisons on honor is backwards, I think. If you're setting them up as 'more honor -> less honor', I'd expect Mares would come before Fillies.

[/nitpicking]

#17 · 126w, 5d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

>>628406 Hmm, you have a point. I never considered that line too much after I wrote it, especially since I wrote it over half a year ago. I'll take a look.

#18 · 126w, 4d ago · · · Three: No More Dreams ·

Wow. Spitfire's a bitch.

#19 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

>>632915 Think so? I love how she turned out, personally. Don't forget all that she's lost - her bitchiness isn't unfounded. :raritywink:

#20 · 125w, 6d ago · · · One: The Wishmaster ·

this story intrigues me

#21 · 125w, 6d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

>>655263 Glad to hear it. That has been one of my goals with this project.

#22 · 125w, 6d ago · · · Two: Tryouts ·

this is cool bro

#23 · 125w, 6d ago · · · Three: No More Dreams ·

let go for even more :D

#24 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

>>656163 Read on, brony, read on. :twilightsmile:

love the story, i must see more

#26 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

>>656450 Be prepared to be taken for one hell of a ride. The best is yet to come. That I promise. :ajsmug:

#27 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Five: Assault ·

yes

#28 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Nine: The Root ·

looks good bro

#29 · 124w, 3d ago · · · Nine: The Root ·

Mushroom.

Good job. I can totally picture Rainbow Dash eating a mushroom. o_o

#30 · 124w, 3d ago · · · Ten: Defiance ·

>>706991 Om nom nom.

Good thing Rainbow played Mario as a filly. She knows exactly what mushrooms are safe to eat. :pinkiesick:

YES its finaly on fimfiction :pinkiecrazy:

WOOO YEAH, ALL THE SEXI PONES.

ALSO i stand by my initial belief that suicide-as-drama is in NO WAY cliche'd or overdone. At all.

another chapter done

>>756011 Aye, I finally managed to get a response from the EQD folks. With any luck, I'll get the Googledoc links scrubbed, and go FIMfic-exclusive.

>>756292 Considering these ponies love their life and normally would not want to kill themselves...yeah!

>>756765 Only seven more to go. :unsuresweetie:

Now that's a powerful friendship. :yay:

Now that Rainbow Dash is back then the Healing can begin, right ? :rainbowhuh:

Also when is Rainbow Dash going to be meeting up with the older Scootaloo in your storyline ? :scootangel:

You did a great job balancing the royalty of the Princess of the Sun with a justified factor of being a ruler. :twilightsmile:

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.:pinkiehappy:

Rainbow Dash decides to seek forgiveness from the one mare she’s wronged the most - Spitfire, former captain of the ruined Wonderbolts.

>>756820 It's magic! :ajsmug:

Eeyup, her road to healing is underway, and the start was quite rough. But she can make it, as long as she has help along the way. :pinkiesmile:

She'll encounter Scoot eventually. :trixieshiftright: But that's a later focus. Just relax and enjoy the ride.

Thank you! I was trying very hard to capture Celestia the mare, rather than the tried-and-true Celestia the Princess. I'm proud of how she turned out. :raritystarry:

I sure will! Thanks a million. :yay:

>>756835 Bwahaha, cue the sweet rave music.

>>756928 Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes ye-

OKAY WE GET IT YOU SHOULD READ NOW. :raritywink:

this had better not turn into a appledash fic :twilightangry2:

>>759420 While I support Appledash, I have no intentions of this turning into a romance story. No, AJ and Dashie are best friends, and nothing more.

If your concerns are from the end of chapter eleven, then just consider what Applejack is going through. That should clear up some worry. :raritywink:

>>758704 When the kingdom is threaten, send Twilight and friends. But when Luna gets hurt, the gloves come off and steel plated boots get put on! :trollestia:

>>765678 I would like to kindly say "HELL YEAH!" :yay:

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Though I must say: Is it me or has the story taken a slight sad turn?

Anyways love it and I am excited for the next chapter already :rainbowkiss:

>>785055 You're not mistaken. This story comes in three acts, six chapters each. We're currently in act 2, "The Pariah", where much of the drama and mystery is revealed. It's also where nearly all of my "character abuse" takes place, though I can never bring myself to hurt them too much.

Act 3 will be arriving with chapter thirteen, and that's when answers will come and the real battle begins.

On a side note, chapter twelve is in-progress right now. I plan on releasing it very soon, then taking a small break while chapter thirteen is made. So you'll be able to see Spitfire soon, then you can chew over the latest development for a bit. :twilightsmile:

Woot for awesomeness! Bring on more chapters! :pinkiehappy:

>>822853 My friend, it will be my genuine pleasure. :twilightsmile:

YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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