It's a good start, a little over the top but good for sure!

5412307 its my first time writing something like this so i didn't expect it to be as good as i hoped but thanks for taking a look

looking at this as a taste for a plot idea. not bad.
from looking at the actual story. that is dark. but not the darkest thing iv'e ever read.
and while i can understand why your editor decided not to work on this one. i can say it saddens me that this might not be continued.
i don't think i need to say why a lot of people wont like it. but i can say it has great potential.

5503062 i guess i will try to find someone else to edit it and publish it i really have some great ideas for this story and actually i didn't like writing the rape scene but i needed something to really push him over the edge and make him snap but if i can't find someone who will edit it then yes it will not continue

5503074 well i wish you luck in your endeavors.

I remember reading this one. Well I liked how dark you made the story, also on that note was alittle hard to unimagine the rape part but overall I liked it. Hope you do find an editor because it's really good.

Alright, let's see. The storyline is pretty solid, you have the protagonist who owes money to a couple of shady individuals, which is pretty easy to understand. You have the antagonists, and while the rape scene is definitely horrifying, that's the point. I truly despise these ponies and I can understand why the main character went insane.

Good job overall.

May those stallions BURN IN HELL FOR ALL ETERNITY
But aside from that good story

5557392

#edge

you have me hooked now show me where this is going~

5598680 i'll do my best

5600111 thats all i ask for~