totallynotabrony
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That quote gave me the idea, that they are some fanatics, that think that ponies are Satan, or other bullshit.
Nice tension anyway. I was afraid I was wrong.
Not bad. I like the mare losing her temper in the transmission. Fighting an enemy that commits cruel and evil acts is bad, but fighting one that does so while insisting you're the evil must be uniquely frustrating.
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I have to agree with you there, and no sane mind would EVER want what they're trying to peddle.
Whoa . . . this was quite interesting.
Hmmm... Nope. There's not enough here. Insufficient data. There's no way to even tell what has really happened up to this point, or what anyone is fighting about. The only legitimate clue is blacked-out by the author so it would be impolite for me to discuss it.
It does seem that the first chapter ends with a decision point which will largely direct the next chapter.
So, it seems you were in the mood for a psychological thriller short. A depiction of wartime propaganda broadcasts. Curious. Also, the A/N. Also curious.
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Except there is no next chapter.
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Agree on not enough data to make an opinion. Unfortunately, it's marked "Complete" so I doubt we'll get it.
I wish there was more, but I suppose it'll do.
"I thought you said you weren't coming for us yet!"
"We lied!"
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I like to pretend the fans can have an effect on the authors of work they enjoy. Kind of like how the MLP fandom keeps thinking they've influenced Hasbro to make changes to the show series. If totallynotabrony happens to be in the mood to extend this story, then maybe enough comments will push him over the edge.
Aw come on.....one more chapter? Pleeeeeease?
"No John, you are the terrorists!"
And then John was a zombie.
i want moaar
i need know what happened with john 
It's always so frustrating when a story has such an ambiguous situation.
I strongly advise you to not under any circumstances make a sequel or another chapter. Despite the pleas of other commenters and the fact that it would be amazing and would totally get me and others hooked, leave this fic as it is.
If the reverse psychology doesn't work, I can capitalize on the lack of more to write my own story.
Interesting... But yet really not enough there to make any sort of judgement. I am not entirely sure what your intention was when it came to leaving a lot of details in the dark, maybe it was to make it mysterious so that others would use their imagination or something like that (or you simply forgot that you put a complete tag on the story), but overall it just feels incomplete.
Way too much is left in the dark. We can't exactly tell who or what john is (besides for obviously being human) or what the hell he is even doing out there in Equestria just through the story itself. The fact that you had to explain to us in the author's notes that John is a terrorist is not a very good sign.
We really can't tell what the conflict is in the story either, all we can see at the moment is that humans are at war with ponies and we don't know why. The only theories I have so far is that John is with a group of terrorists that are terrorizing Equestria for some variety of reasons, including religious, territorial, or plain malicious implications. However, I only had these theories due to the spoiler in the author's notes, it was not apparent in the story itself. Unless this a purposely left vague introduction to a bigger story, which I highly doubt due to the complete tag, this story is incomplete.
If it was your intention to make a vague one shot story that readers are supposed to figure out on their own, then I have to say you didn't do it quite right. Although you got the mystery of the situation down, I can't help but feel that you didn't leave us enough details. A mystery is only fun when you can solve it, and in this case, there is not enough clues. So if vagueness was your intention, I would suggest expanding upon the story a bit more, just so the mystery is (if only barely) solvable and the readers can really understand what is going on here.
On a positive note, I am interested in this story. I wouldn't mind reading it should it ever become more than just a one shot short story. However, I will be happy enough if you take the time to simply fix it, maybe then I will be able to give it a fav and a thumbs up.
Good day to you and keep up the good work!
Then it's safe to say he deserves whatever disaster befalls him.
That twist though.
In the... author's notes...