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Red and Black Alicorn OC


Yeah, so, please don't kill me because of my avatar...

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Princess Luna is the gaming princess, and in this story you get to see how she reacts to a Xbox 360 that somehow came through the portal leading to the human world.

Credit to marking for his amazing artwork on the cover. He's amazing at drawing sketches and stuff like that fast. Click on this sentence to see his user page.

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 77 )

Games luna should play. Borderlands (1, 2, or Pre-sequel), Titanfall, and the tell tale games walking dead pls!

Princess Mi Amore Cadenza, meaning 'my love Cadence' there, now you can spell it right.

She should play forza horizon

This story needs a lot of work. For starters, make your chapters at least 1,200 words unless your writing is Edgar Allen Poe level. That means loads and loads of detail, which will make this story more exciting for me to get into. As of now this is dreadfully boring, and I can't get invested into it. On the plus side, you're grammar is pretty decent.

Don't worry, the more interesting chapters should start to come out soon. Also thanks for both pointing out the good and bad things about this story :twilightsmile:

This has attrwmy attention. Do Transformers the Fall of Cybertron please by the way.

Lol, princess Luna playing an xbox yet the picture shows a ps3 controller, a psvita, an iphone, and an old NES. Is that a Mario cartridge i see? And weres corpse party for the vita xD

:twilightoops:The chapters are too short

5281811 that's just the stock "gamer Luna" photo

5281851 most gamer Luna pictures ive ever seen have an xbox 360 controller. This is actually the only one ive ever seen without. Don't try that stock crap on me.
Edit: also seen lots of pc. Mostly pc. Then xbox gaming, never ps3.


5282019 sorry dude didn't mean to get on your case, I just thought that was one of the most known GL pics. I'm kinda new to the whole brony thing

Why is everyone pointing out the cover? It's about the actually content! Not the front cover! Anyway, thanks for pointing it out nonetheless. I will change it :pinkiehappy:

Oh yeah, Twilight Kira, I completely agree with you, no jokes. When I first looked over my chapter I thought, crap this is too short. Hopefully though the future chapters should be longer. :twilightsmile:

I've seen so much worse, and this is pretty good. I don't mean insult, though it could use work, I'm just stating there is so much worse out there. Keep going with this, it has great potential (to me).

Thanks, I have been concentrating on making two stories (big mistake) so it has been kinda hard to write two stories. They are both also quite different from each over so when I am writing a chapter into this book I have to try to make it have more humour in it, as for the other story I'm working on I need to make sure it has some big twists in the story to give it more of a punch and shock.
My mind is blown! :derpyderp1:

So far so good. Oh and if you ponify Borderlands might i suggest the name "Discord-erlands" eh? eh?

Indeed I will! I might in fact play the game again to remember some of the stuff. Like the weapons. Anyway, thank you everyone who liked my video. You make me feel like a good person. Because deep down, I'm a evil person... Maybe. :derpytongue2:

You should do Transformers the Fall of Cybertron. That game is awesome and I would love to see a ponified version.

Okay! I haven't played it before but I will search it up on YouTube!

5286213 I know what you mean about working on two stories. I'm trying to make a Blue Exorcist crossover while working on a new story, and it is killing me!!

Have her play Transformares Fall of Ponytron. Ponified version of Transformers the Fall of Cybertron. It would be awesome to see her reaction to Grimlock and Bruticus.

But dispute this

I think you meant to say "despite this"

You need longer chapters! This is pretty much something I was going to write but Twilight was going to have found a way to travel between universes so she actually went to the game universes instead of just played them.

Luna. Will. Play. Tron. :rainbowkiss:

I'm sad that this story has to end. I love Watching Luna cry with glee playing games. :fluttercry:

I will try my best to fit in as many chapters as possible into the story before the deadline comes by, but I'm glad to know that some people liked it :pinkiesmile:
But nonetheless, the story has to end at some point and I am finding it hard to concentrate on two stories at the same time. This was originally made by me for a little fun but it has more views, likes and dislikes then my other story. Anyway, making more then one story at a time is confusing :applejackconfused:

Thanks for taking my suggestion.

Aww, okay. A little heavy on different paragraphs though, almost like you're leaning on the return key...

Good chapter

A white one? Cadence should've sent her an elite.

Have her play skyrim, mass effect or dragon age

Luna should play dark souls. Let's see her bad ass her way around the hardest game ever made

Thanks for the suggestions. Since the game for gold that came out on December (Raven: episode 1) was pretty unsuccessful (my opinion) I decided not to do it (but I did have some interesting crossover ideas) but I will wait till the next game comes out and since it's nearly christmas it will hopefully be awesome! But if it's a boring game then I will wait for the next game after that.

Mate, wtf? What happened?

I expected this. Well, I decided to make Pinkie Pie the author of the story. If you reread the chapter 'Pinkie?' Then you will notice that she is interfering with the story a lot. You will also find that there are lots of these things here. That's her crossing out mistakes or over exaggerations.

Pinkie is my fav of the Mane 6 but I mean, SERIOUSLY?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! ARE YOU FREAKING KIDDING ME, AUTHOR?!?!?!?!?!?! I SPENT LIKE 5 MINUTES GOING THROUGH THAT!!!!!!!!!!! But good story I liked it. :pinkiehappy: :heart: :pinkiehappy: :heart: :pinkiehappy: :heart: :pinkiehappy:

You... Are... Fucking... BRILLIANT!

Well, that turned out better then I expected. Thanks guys.

Maybe you could've asked Pinkie Pie to shorten it just a little bit?

This is the right length for a chapter! You just gotta fill it with actual stuff...

Another brilliant chapter:rainbowlaugh: this pinkie gimmick is hilarious! And hear I was with the whole " I just got skyrim on steam for Christmas " mindset

Where did you get the cover image? Why does this have a gore tag, but not a dark tag?

5459903 marking made it for me, he posted a blog saying that he could draw quick scetches for free for a limited amount of time, so I thought, why not? It has a gore tag because of the few chapters which contain blood, but I don't think I would need a dark tag, it isn't a dark story, is it?

5459867 Thanks :pinkiehappy: but I'm still going to do skyrim! I'm not going to ditch one of my first favourite games I ever had!

5459886 That, is a great but also not so great idea. Don't get me wrong! The possibilities are endless! I could change the animatronics to the ponies and build up a great tower on top of the base, but the only thing is is that FNAF is a game on the android or PC, it isn't on the Xbox 360. But that would be a great idea!

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