Presenting Princess Celestia, fair and beloved ruler of Equestria, and her daughters, Luna and Twilight, heirs to the Equestrian throne.
Wait, what was that last bit?
Due to an unknown spell, Princess Celestia must take care of her new young daughters as she fights her stronger-than-ever motherly instincts while finding a way to return everything back to normal.
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Chapters (10)
Very very amusing.I'm curious what caused luna and twilight to turn into fillies.Update soon
very interesting story. I like the idea.
If you want I can edit this, other than that I love where the story is going especially how you added sunset shimmer in, I dont think I have seen many other people do that.
Honestly I have no idea how people like you can come up with such creative ideas. I've been trying to write my pun fanfic for weeks but it always ends up being incredibly boring or it's way to similar to somebody else's story to be considered original. I like this and I'm eager to find out where you take it
Hope there is more soon I so LOVE this story
Oh i hope they never find a solution fpr their little cute problem there
Really nice, befor i had read this story i never thougth i would like it so much.
If they really are going to be her new Children, i would love to read more.
Like i said i would prefer it if they maybe have to stay in their current form and well befor i ask for a sequel again i just wait how the story proceed. If i like something i ask always to soon for a sequel, but if i be honest it looks more like a story which could work with many sequels for their different ages, i mean i don´t know if maybe even Discord is bad again. somehow it remembers me about another story i had read for a while.
In the story there were one student for every princess and many new problems, in the third sequel the new student´s where adults and (well that was the point i stopped to read it, because the story somehow messed something up for me, i don´t rememer what it was.)
Aw, poor Celly.
Don't worry, a nice bout of snuggling should fix you right up. Get her girls!
Interesting... I like it so far. With the next chapter I will decide if I give a Fav.
Way mega adorable. Comment and Upvoted for now.
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You are missing punctuation 95% of all dialog. Missing " and '. Lack of italicization, and even non dialog is missing punctuation. After this chapter is fixed. Please let me know I want to enjoy this fic. But it's so full of errors. Can't read a few lines without seeing something that is missing.
5257976 I know, I do not have an editor at the moment, but thank you anyways for pointing out the mistakes, I'm going to correct them right away
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You're selcome. So far the only real problems are the ones listed. Missing punctuation, and forgetting to italicize. I'll tell you what. Can't really edit myself since my tablet is all kinds of wonky at random moments. But I'll give you a list of amazing editors I know, or know in passing.
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Kingtiger666 [My main non-clop, non-L!Verse editor. Awesome brony, wonderful editor, and super cool person.]
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Level+Dasher {Editor for some of my favorite fics. And for one of my favorite Authors [http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Anonymoose].
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of course you could always do Overly Extensive Editors group.
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That said if you can at least fix the dialog tags and punctuation. I'll PM you with chapter fixes if you'd rather those be kept out of the comment box. All in all, nice fic and best of luck.
5258318 Thank you for being so kind, I'm totally going to use that list you gave me!!
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You're welcome
. Let me know when the chapter's ready and I'll give you a more fuller reveiw, and I look forward to seeing the touched up chapters. Since so far this has potential to be quite an adorable dawabetus inducing fic. With a really interesting premise ^_^.
Interesting. I find I like the idea of this. Going into the fav folder.
discord? bad Mexican takeout, bad Chinese takeout?
Please continue.
love the story, cant wait to read more
I thought she'd wake up pregnant with the two.
Twas funny, I'm eager to see where this goes.
This is... interesting. May the wind blow against your back.
Looks interesting. I'm wondering if Twilight botched the spell and it only affected Celestia or if it affected the whole world.
Looking forward to updates!
Nice this story has my interest
this is going to be a very cute story in a chaotic sort of way i'm very interested i look forward to you next chapter
Oh beast core this is funny. I see a simularity to the mlp loops here and I think this is loop worthy. I'm going to see if the guys on space battles agree with me.
Man, do I love me some good Momlestia.
LOL LOVE IT
hope to read more soon
Why do I have the feeling that Discord had something to do with this
5261637 Because there is a discord tag loll
I like it--but you have a huge problem with run-on sentences and comma splices.
The cuteness meter! It's over 9000!
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Update it now I love it too much
May I offer a suggestion? I think you should mark this as "alternate universe". At least, Depending on what has been written so far.
Actually, This story premise is a little of a grey area.
that shouldn't be a problem
Could be a good story, but I am not sure. This really is in desperate need of an editor, or proofreader.
There are some crazy tenses all over the place, some weird spelling.
Oh, and some crazy confusion on Celestia's part… because some of the gender pronouns are all over the place. Did Celestia grow a penis between getting into the tub and getting out?
Definitely would suggest trying to find an editor for this.
-Moose
Well, this is an interesting premise. Go on.
Please add more.. I like where this is going. Is it a dream or reality? Oh what a wonderful dream it could be though.
Well then, this seems interesting, you have my attention now.
interesting, I want to the nest
... You have my attention.
I concur with Alistairmir77.
Updates are required, please? Or all your data are belong to us.
Update now please
Me likey. I'd love to see what happens next. Please update soon, but don't rush yourself.
5290390 Don't you worry, according to my little schedule, the second chapter is due for 21/11!!
5290565 okie dokie lokie.
I wondered when Discord would show up. So far, so good, nothing TOO weird. (Yet)
Oh, ho!
I'm really liking this :D
I'm curious, please write some more chapters, I'm eager to read them :)
(Also, I laughed a lot at the House MD reference)
Also, on the second block, when little Twilight asks to the doctor "She’s not death, is she?”, I think you meant to say 'dead' instead of 'death' ;)
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I think you just answered your question.
Good story.
The wording is awkward at places. For example the first sentence:
"Celestia’s mind was a complete turmoil of ideas, all of them revolting over the same events of this morning, she woke up, took a shower, put on her regalia a regular routine just like every other day, but she hadn’t noticed, that she had woken up as a MOTHER!!"
I suggest something like this:
"Celestia’s mind was a complete turmoil of ideas, all of them revolving* over the same events of this morning. She woke up, took a shower, put on her regalia. A regular routine just like every other day. She certainly hadn't noticed that she had woken up as a mother!"
(Revolting= Repulsive, disgusting and doing a revolt I guess; Revolving= Spinning, whirling)
LOVE IT hope to read more soon