Hmmm. Perhaps this sequel will be worthy.

We don't need more of this.

Not again... we don't need anymore My Little Dashie fics, just like Fallout and Cupcakes.

What's with all the hate, y'all? Don't like it? Don't read it... and you don't need to thumb it down either! Plain and simple. It's not like this is written badly, because it's quite the contrary. Give him a chance to at least introduce the story.

>>488989488989

Thanks for the support and also I thank Katamariguy. I'm glad that people are enjoying my story. But I see why all of you guys had some trouble writing. Being in school and all of the assingments and projects I get  make it hard for me to write a good long chapter

>>488989488989 you speak the truth  

and for you haters here is what I think of haters

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Eeyup you go BG.

I don't care if it takes some time to get chapters out, I am so far liking your writing style and would be happy to wait if I could read more of this story. Just remember that if you like to write, don't worry about if you think we'll get peeved at you for taking a bit for a chapter release, just do your best.

A few spelling errors, uncapitalized i's, and quite a few large walls of text. You should split them up with every new dialogue, not just when a scene is over or the narrator is changed. It makes the story have better flow, and be much less confusing. Heh, sorry, great job on another chapter.

K thanks, I was in a rush to do this one. I had a big project due tommarow and had to fit some time in for this. I'll fix it now that I'm done.

*Groan*  Not again. . .  NOT AGAIN!!!   My heart just recently got fixed, as it broke from reading the other My Little Dashie fics, and now, now theres a fourth one that follows the series?!  NOOOOOO!!  But. . .  I.  Must.  Read.  IT!  I MUST!    It may break my heart but it will be worth it!  My life for Rainbow Dash!  ...  I'm Pa-ha-theti-i-i-ic!  

In all seriousness though good story.  As to those haters.  Just ignore all the other My Little Dashie fics.  In my mind, there are only three full fics.  The ones by ROB, ty500600, and EpicBG.  Now there is a fourth.  All the other ones suck.  If any one who has made any other fics. . .  No offense.  >.<

There may be great imitations, but nothing overshadows the origional story

I am pretty sure that the main character, I always forget his name, but "dad" had stopped watching My Little Pony before The Last Roundup first aired.  Just going to put that out there.

. . .  The rainbow is now DIAMONDS!

Is this really that bad? As soon as I put this up, I get three dislikes already. Come on is it because of bad spelling. Was the plot bad? You could criticize me instead of remaining anonymous at least. I hope this isn't some form of trolling because I worked kind of hard on this.

its realy good man keep it up

You are doing a great job!

how long will it take for you to complete this?

Cannot wait to read every single chapter after this one.  This story is amazing.

I'm not sure what's going on with the "thumbs down" because this is a good story.  It does have spelling errors here and there, but most notably some quotation errors. (You do forget to put in the beginning or ending quotation mark every once in a while.) However, they are minor to the point where I can simply overlook them.  My guess is that a good chunk of them just don't want anymore "My Little Dashie" installments.  If that's the case, then that's just sad.  I can understand the feeling of getting tired of more installments of a series you're not a fan of, but that's no excuse for giving it a bad rating without looking at it.  A good story is a good story and it should be treated as such.  If it's good, it doesn't deserve the thumbs down you are getting.

Do not let these people that are bullying you like this win.  Fight to the end and finish your great story.  I'll continue following it and root for you all the way.

Keep it up and best of luck.

Thanks everyone. Also I want to apologize to all of you because I received some realy good advice from EpicBG on this chapter. He pointed out some really bad plot points and scenes on my part and I totally agree with him. I am going to revise this entire chapter to make it seem more realistic and better.

>>507010507010

I don't understand your question. If you mean this series, I am not sure yet. Also if I gave a definite answer, it would probaly break some people's hearts. I can tell you that once I pass ten chapters, the end will be some time around then. It all depends on if I still have ideas by then. Right now, I am just trying to continue the story as much as I can because I already have the entire ending planned and written out. I am just filling the gap until then.

>>507205507205

Thanks for the support! I was just getting a little upset that people just thumb this down because it is another installment. It's not really fair to me in my opinion. Two of the three comments I had when I first started this story were complaining that it was another sequel. They probably thumbed down before even reading the first chapter. I wish people would just read it and enjoy it.

DAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW-bragash

DANG-IT YOU BROKE THE DAW MAKER

>>510494510494

Hah! Your comment scared me for a second. I thought you were going to point out some grammar or spelling mistakes. I was about to slap myself with a fish.

My heart Combusted, dew to the Twi-tasticness & Beautiful Epicness of this fic that your wonderful hands and mind has created!  Excellent Work!  

By the way, do you have any writing tips for someone who is a first time writer?

>>510765510765

Yeah just send me a message whenever and I can give you plenty of advice

>>511432511432

Is that a good thing?

>>512316512316 Yes. Not so much for my heart, however. Too cute.

>>512322512322

I get it now!

*eye twitches as my body begins shaking and tears flow down my face*

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D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW OVERLOAD!!!!

Sorry for the late chapter guys. I was out for a while last night. I'll upload another chapter for today by tonight. Oh, and sorry for the short amount of words.

I like how he's able to fight back against death itself and keep on living.  This is awesome, keep on writing this man!

The forth part of the triology? You have much to prove if you write this.

I'm seriously sorry about the short chapter guys. I've been having a writer's block for the last two days and couldn't think up big chapters. I actually had to take fifteen minute showers just to get the these last two chapters done. Taking a warm shower is my last resort in getting ideas and clearing my head. Anyways, I hope this writer's block goes away before the next chapter. I don't want to disappoint you guys.

>>504103504103

Oh, of course not.  But I don't think they are meant to overshadow it.  They are meant to continue it.  The first one is and always will be the best, but that does not mean that these are any bad.  I am really liking this as it is.

So I just wanted to say, that the part with twilight sparkle kind of came off as. . . bleh.  She learned her lesson in Lesson Zero, and she didn't have to write them once a week anymore so. . .  Yeah.  Also, why did the time travel spell need three powerful ponies, when Twilight Sparkle was able to do it by herself in Running out of Time?  Was it just an excuse to give shining armor a cameo?  Becuase if so I agree.  All in all, another great installment!  

"I dashed over there faster than the speed of light."  Sonic Rainboom destroying house ftw?  >.>

"The cider tastes a little funny like something special was put in it. If I know anypony, Soarin’ probably put some tequila or vodka in it."  Not that it means anything but. . .  Didn't Lauren Faust more or less confirm that cider is actually considered an alcoholic drink among ponies?  And there are no other ones?

Anyway.  I will be sending you a medical bill for the expenses.  You made my heart explode and I needed to get a transplant.

>>520877520877

Here's something that could help with writer's block:

Play some video games.

"felt like somepony like Big Macintosh stood on my back and jumped three times."  OWE!!!  Big Mac, say your sorry!     Nnnoope  Rat bastard. . . .

Amazing chapter.  One of your best in my opinion.

Manne, PonyManne.  Do not be compelled to get out chapters quickly.  Seriously.  Writing stories should never be a chore.  it should be what you do for fun.  When you do it for fun, you will do it better than if it becomes a chore.  No one will hate you if you take one, two, three days, or even a few weeks to get out a chapter.  If you are having writers block, no one blames you, it happens.  Just relax and write when you feel like the time is right.  You will only disappoint us if you stop writing the story all together.  To prove it to you, everyone who agrees with me, please post a reply.

>>521081521081

Oh boy, I feel like I'm going to write a chapter here. Yeah the Twilight part I just wanted to do because I was watching the Lesson Zero episode while writing. Twilight's time travel was only a week. The time travel I used was probably around 8 years or so. Also yeah, I kind of wanted Shining Armor to make an appearance. As for the apple cider, I didn't know about what Lauren Faust made it to be so that's my bad on that part. The expression with Big Mac came from the Sweet Apple Massacre which still haunts me to this day. And finally, man I hope my insurance policy can cover you. Thanks for reading!

>>521068521068

Tell me about it. I've been playing games to help it but all I do is go couch potato for the rest of the day.

>>521154521154

Then be one with your inner couch potato. Take a break. (I'm a 24/7 couch potato and I still think like a genius!)

>>521206521206

You have no idea. If you saw the amount of gamerscore I have on xbox, you would never believe I have the time to write.

>>521275521275

I'm a pc gamer myself.

I've always been really good at video games. Give me a little bit and i'll be a master at it.

I don't have any issue with a 4th My Little Dashie, but in my honest opinion the sentence structure seems a little disjointed. The flow of your writing isn't very fluent; there are a lot of stops and starts that detract from the story. Additionally, you may want to refrain from telling people not to downvote your work if they dislike it, that is what the downvote button is there for after all. I agree that people with no interest in reading a sequel to My Little Dashie shouldn't spam your fic, but where someone finds the quality of a piece lacking they should downvote it if they wish. That, and you're more likely to incite trolling by explicitly telling them to leave off.

>>523234523234

Thanks for mentioning that. Many of the fragments and other grammatical errors are intended. Not all but most are planned that way so that it feels like the others wrote it. If you read my other short work, I write very differently from this. I don't like the wording myself but I want to convey and write in the same style as the others. Also with the disliking, I was not really talking about not liking the story or grammar. I was just upset that people disliked it because it was a sequel.

Writer's block, eh? Ain't that a kick in the head. Metaphorically, of course (even if it kind of feels like it). I took a break from writing on the computer, and for a while wrote out chapters and brainstormed in a notebook with good old fashioned blue inked pen and lined paper. My wrist hurt, but it felt much more rewarding, like I'd worked harder by putting energy into writing out every single letter onto the paper. Of course, it's a lot slower (for me anyways). If that's not your thing, just take a break dude. No one is rushing you.

Sweet apple massacre. . . ? . . .  Do I WANT to know?

>>524120524120

Thanks for the advice. Oh and that expression has got me in a Fallout New Vegas mood. Thanks. I thought I was over and done wtih on that game.

>>524782524782

If you are as sane and normal as most other bronies like me, you will stay as far away from it as possible. For the love of all that is sweet and inoocent, do not read it to little kids. I stumbled across it and now I go into the fetal position whenever I see Big Mac in an episode. That story is not for the faint of heart.

Alright guys, I won't be having a new chapter today. Thanks to everyone's advice, I decide to take a little break. I spent the whole day not thinking of new ideas and focused on the things in front of me. After I finished, I finally got some ideas. The writer's block is fading and I started writing the new chapter. I won't have it done today but I am proud to say I'm up and running again.

I am happy to say that the writer's block is now officially over. I have learned a lesson,however, that will impact the progress of the story. I will probably upload a chapter every two days now because after seeing this compared to my last two, I see that pushing myself because I feel obligated is not just ruining the story for me but for all of you as well. Well, enough of my rambling, I hope you guys enjoy this one because I enjoyed writing it!

With that last few paragraphs, I got chills. Wow.

LALALALALALALALALALALALA

Bravo.  Bravo.  This was a very good chapter and I am glad that you are going to take it slower.  Also, not to throw a monkey wrench or anything but. . .  I see some inconsistency with the parents death.  Considering the fact that they were out to get groceries, so I assume they would have stayed in town.  In almost every city, the fastest speed is 35 miles per hour.  If children ran out in the street and the parents did swerve to the side, putting on the brake simultaneously, they would have slowed right down, and at worst hit the parked car at about 20-30 miles per hour, which I do not see as being fatal in any way.  However if for whatever reason the break didn't work the car would probably flip having taken a sharp turn which would have caused probable death, but still unlikely.  In car crashes, the car that is doing the crashing rarely suffers death.  It's the one being hit that takes the most damage.  The parents would most likely be wounded but not dead.  I see stuff like this happen all the time in my job.  Anyways, good chapter and it did relay a lot of good emotion.  Bravo.

>>540409540409

Yeah sorry I didn't clarify that. I forgot to mention that they didn't have any airbags as they rarely used the car and mostly walked. So any little crash have resulted in death if there was no protection. They also had no seatbelts on as nothing happened in the city. So considering all of these variables, almost anything could have happened. I left that up to the reader to decide. Also, reading the first story and inferring a little leads to the conslusion that I made. The character lived in a suburb so stores weren't very close.

LOL, that was a funny moment.  That was hilarious.  You definitely got this one right on the money.

who is daniel

>>545983545983

What?

Sorry about the late and short chapter guys. I had a busy weekend. I was out all last night while at a party and before that I was watching the Avengers. Anyways, I won't be busy next weekend so expect either long or mutliple chapters and also tommorow, I am doing another chapter.

>>552212552212

don't be so hard on yourself man. you are doing great!

you get 5 moustaches! keep up the good work man! :D

I like the story. Could I ask you to separate the text?

Agreed... >:[ >>489973489973

Awesome chap dude! ...Why do i have a feeling that somthing bad's gonna happen n th nxt few chapters? Poor Brian.

>>548849548849

Daniel:

Chapter 3, third paragraph from the end

>>556190556190

Sorry about that, auto correct has a mind of it's own.

The new character is from deathtap's The Problem With Magic. We are collaborating a bit and I came up with this after reading his story. Check it out, it's a really good fan fic and I think all of you will enjoy it.

>>558494558494

Haha! Good one. Nice to see Brian's perspective of events...

It's nice to see this scene from Pop's perspective, as well as having two of my favorite fics coming together in a sweet way.

>>559098559098

I thought the idea was pretty nice too. I was starting to run out of ideas when deathtap magically appeared on my front doorstep (figuratively) and presented his story. I have to say, if he didn't start his story, I think I would have ended my story by now or Wednesday.

>>489973489973

How are we hating? Just because we thumb it down doesn't mean were hating? This is more like hating. "This fic sucks ass and IT's S0000000 not 1337 MLG PROZZ.

At least were "mostly" stating why we don't like the fic. But yeah this is well written besides a couple of grammar erros and walls of text.

So, at first I was kind of curious as to why Fluttershy, I mean she is good at taking care of animals so she is good at taking care of ponies?  That is like saying a veterinarian can do a doctors job, but anyhow I think it was worth it with how she treated Rainbow Dash.  ^.^  I really liked this chapter, Fluttershy is one of my favorite ponies.

  Well, and Big Mac.

HAAAAAH!!!  Last line made me laugh.  Awsome chapter.  Although I admit at first when he was introduced I thought he was from Sunny Ville, from Story of the Blanks.  THAT would have been a twist!

>>558494558494 kk i will

I like where this is heading. I'll be around, waiting for the next chapter.

I was more pissed than you think humans.

Ha! Awesome. Great chapter.

Good job. It's exciting to see Brian play detective.

I loved the pills they had back on Earth because they didn’t have any taste.

GIVE ME DRUGS!!NOW!!

Is it sad that I find myself believing forest?  >.>     <.<

: Eeeeeeyup

Ah, thanks Big Mac.

This is a great fan fic but I hate how short your chapters have got I measured them and each is about only 1 page long in a book the minnum is about 3 pages Now before you haters swarm me listen to this I love the book my little dashie I also feel this is a good fan fic based off of the book but if Brian dies at the end of this book I will strangle my rainbow dash plush I feel like I am very qulified to say that as a reader.

>>573453573453

Sorry dude, but I have actually been writing more than my usual on weekdays believe it or not. In my older chapters, I was right around the 1500 word mark. Now I have been writing close to 2000. Don't worry though, the last chapter will probably take me a week in all to write, but will have roughly more words than 2000. It will be the longest chapter I have ever written and will probably stay that way because I am purely lazy and writing more than 1500 words is like running in the Olympics for me.

i was wondering if the guy in my little dashie somehow found a way into equestria that would be a great sequal to my little dashie (if she still rememberd him :l) RAINBOW FACES (meh special edition)javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');javascript:smilie('');

>>578115578115

I dont understand your question. He did find a way into Equestira, if he didn't ty500600, EpicBg, and I wouldn't have made these. That was the whole point....

Whip?  I've seen enough...never mind.

Trixie is kinky...

>>582431582431

I'd take a whip from her anytime.....

Just thinking. Going off of part 3 being 5 years later and in this one with Rainbow training for 3 years, that means Brian's been in Equestria for at least 8 years. Now I've seen the CMC estimated to be 7-12 years old in the show. So that has to mean they have to be 15-20 now. You'd think they'd have their cutie marks by now.

>>583654583654

I like to think of them as a running gag. They probably won't get their Cutie Marks until they are old ponies. When My Little Pony ends, I feel like Lauren Faust won't have them get their Cutie Marks, as a speculation left up to the fan.

>>“The Great and Powerful Trixie felt that the only way to subdue a beast such as yourself, she had to knock you on the head with a rock.”

Such a great line. I can so imagine her saying it, too.

I gotta say thanks.  I have been going through a. . . very hard breakup, to say the least, and with the actual show having ended for the summer, it has only been this, and a few other fanfic's keeping me happy throughout the day.  So thank you PonyManne, I can't wait for another episode.  Also, just curious, if Forest had been kicked out of his hotel room, why wouldn't he have brought whatever was in the safe with him, assuming that it is in fact his?  Or did I just answer my own question?  

>>586171586171

He actually arrived at the reception desk, and Crystal kicked him out. She made him pay five bits? But yeah, he just left. I read the chapter numerous times and it doesn't describe him going to his room after that. So either deathtap intended that or it was an accident. And sorry to hear about the break up man, that shit can be tough.

>>586455586455

>>586171586171

Sucks about the breakup, dude. Sorry to hear about that.

As to answer your question, yeah, Forest took all his stuff with him, but why should that stop an investigator from investigating, I say! I mean, there was nothing in the room, but still he checked. It proves that Brian is thorough - at least that's how I interpreted it.

>>587674587674

Yep. And I am really getting excited. This buildup is getting faster than I expected.

Sorry guys, I got held up for the whole weekend. I have some problems with what's going on in school and the work is killing me. Hopefully, the workload eases and more chapters will come out as scheduled.

Holy. Shit.

Speechless.

well still you are going strong and i can't wait for more chapters

Also, if you are interested, i am writing a fanfic myself, it is called: Lunar Rainbow

plz look it up and like it that would be very helpful. You see, i am trying to get it into one of the popular stories slots,and it is my first write so if you want, you can check it out. Plz do