Being a changeling has its benefits, but when a changeling leaves the nest to live a normal life away from the tyranny of the queen, how long can he keep his secret in a world where he is hated? How long can one pretend to be somepony they aren't?
The concept of changelings intrigues me. This is a very, very short prologue to an idea that I had. If there's any interest in it, I'll continue it, but otherwise I won't be worrying about it too much. It seemed like an interesting idea to me.
Of course, if I do continue it it's going to become quite the mystery story.
I KNEW IT! OMG I CALLED IT! A 'good' Changeling who tries to live a normal life.
YES! HIGH FIVE ME!
Heh. A whole lot of changeling and Queen Chrysalis stories have popped up since the finale. I don't mind it.
This one seems a bit different from the others I've read. Might be interesting, but I can't really tell with just the prologue. Tracking just in case you continue it.
this was going to happen eventually, and I know this might have potential. Keep it up, sir
>>491257491257 then you know hasbro has done a good job on Chrysalis and the Changelings if people started making stories about them right away. also, it was so an awesome finale.
HIVE FIVE MY SAME MINDED FRIEND!
Changelings have the ability to copy memories and abilities of the pony they take the form of.
This one will have the 4th wall breaking powers of Pinkie
The Speed of Rainbow Dash
The strength of Applejack
The stare and animal abilities of Fluttershy
and the keen eyes of Rarity
There is no hope if this one goes rouge.
Starting with a good changeling that has no loyalty to the Queen kinda kills the protagonists character arc.
This is definitely a story I want to see!
this is pretty good :D
I request you continue good sir!
ONE of them? And it doesn't seem like he noticed she's, well, female? ... Let's see where this goes.
It feels a tad rushed, but other than that I love it.
Intrigued, please do go on
I like this idea
I'll keep a look on this.
Fascinating story. I look forward to how this plays out. I like the Changeling. And I'm curious to see how he tries to live a 'normal' life.
is this a positive enough response for moar yet? xD
I. Love. This. Story. Period.
Also, you better make the fact that the Changeling is caught, but he is seen as good, and accepted into Ponyville.
Ooh I think I'm gonna like this one, I wonder which of them he copied. hmm? Oh well just gonna have to wait huh?
Interesting, certainly. Would definitely need a full chapter or two - maybe three - before I could say whether or not I truly liked it. The concept, however, is cool; and your writing's fine. I guess that just leaves the decision up to you then.
This certainly has potential, can't wait to see who he picked to copy. Does he even grasp the concept of genders I wonder?
<We are intrigued by this. We will follow.>
Ooh, I like this one. Keep on going!
Hmm, interesting. I think someone else said this felt a bit rushed, and I tend to agree. It wasn't too bad, but you definitely relied a bit too much on telling, rather than showing. On the other hand, Changelings are the most alien thing we've seen in Equestria so far (yes, more alien than magic ponies, rock-nesting land eels, or mythical beasts), so I could understand that viewing its thought processes would not be so clearcut.
One thing, though: if the changeling protagonist really hadn't been beyond the nest before, then it wouldn't really regard the queen as evil. Mind you, it could still recognize that she was too controlling and desire for itself a life free from her control, but I don't think it would consider her evil. Not that she isn't evil, but since that's all it has known it wouldn't have anything to judge her by. That would also give an opportunity for later problems as it tries to fit in, by doing things that other ponies would regard as "wrong" without realizing it.
Anyway, just my two cents. This story seems to have promise, and I just wanted to help.
If it copied Pinkie nopony would mind if there were two of them walking around because that would just be pinkie being pinkie
[WARNING: High potential story detected!]
Well, this is certainly intersting, and similar to an idea I've been toying with myself. Should be intersting to see where this one leads, and I hope you add to it soon! Hope to hear more of this in the near future!
High anticipation levels!
This has potential, though I have some questions.
Why is this changling smarter? Why is he the only rebellious changling? Can we get more information on his character in the immediate chapters?
The premise is interesting, but you've gotta give us more on the OC character you create.
>>494341494341 key word: prologue
Ready and waiting for story to continue my good sir.
And changelings are interesting, I'm thinking that with the Changelings, entire fanfics will be changed as well as new fanfics will be much more different for quite some time if they have Changelings and stuff.
This was an excellent start to a story about the Changelings I can't wait to see where this story goes
So I got around to reading this, and I want MOAR!
He had never left it, and when he did he hadn't gone farther than a few miles.
>never left it
>when he did
I think this would work better as "He rarely left it"
>>492376492376 What if someone asks him/her out on a date?
>>494902494902 that next chapter is under way
Another chapter, yay.
This is another sort of "prologue" chapter. It's quite short, it may seem sort of rushed, and it contains some background information. I have a lot of ways I want this story to go, but can only pick one, so I'm sort of fishing around to see which way I want to go before I make any decisions. And I have no idea which way YOU guys expect the story to go, but otherwise, the story is never going to give you anything directly, and don't assume things. BWAHAHA
Anyway, this is another short chapter that is sort of "testing the water" on this story idea. I still have to figure out which direction would be the best for this story.
And when I do.
It's gonna be awesome.
And the questions you have will be answered, just wait. I can't answer all the questions at once in the same chapter, that takes away the mystery surrounding the main character!
I wonder who the changeling is.
Oh sweet Celestia he took over Pinkie's body
Either the changeling took Pinkie's place, or she senses a disturbance. Perhaps in a wall. Most likely the 4th one.
"Each vibrant shade gave off a different feeling that caused the changelings mind to be stimulated in ways that weren't familiar." - Apostrophe?
I had this idea too, and have a fic on it.
Sadly, they cannot exist in the same universe D:
It's OCxPinkie. If you want to check it out its on my page.
>>495523495523 are you gonna put in the story that the mane 6 find out hes a changeling
>>495778495778 I'm not spilling the beans about anything
Everyone seems to think it's Pinkie. I dunno... it seems that way at the end, but Rarity's not acting herself...
Add to the fact that we have very little info to work with and it could literally be anyone.
Maybe I'm overlooking something. Again.
Either Pinkie or Rarity. Pinkie's more likely, 'cause she only said two words, but Rarity didn't freak out when she forgot the blanket.
Either way, this must continue.
Pinkie wants you to CONFESS!
Refusal of doing so is most unwise
Oh, I hope he isn't pinkie... He'll be discovered immediately.
Hmmm, interesting. This is definitely getting better. Good direction so far.
I'm... kind of thinking that the protagonist isn't the only changeling in disguise in this story.