First of all, all due apologies to AuroraDawn, who is of course well-known as the original author of the real Rainbow Factory. I know you are on record as not caring what anybody does with Rainbow Factory, but I still insist on apologizing for putting up my interpretation of your story concept.
Second of all, all due apologies to anybody who is foolish enough to read this. I needed to get this out of my head, and waiting it out was not working, so I had to write it. But I don't need anybody to read it. And while I like to think there are some interesting ideas in here, I doubt there's anything good to say about the execution. So consider yourself warned.
I think we've all heard the legends of what happens to those who fail their flight test. And they're not completely wrong, which is more than I can say for many legends. But they're by no means completely right, either. So let us follow one young mare, and find out.
If you're going to ask, as I requested you to do, don't bother. I'll answer right now: it was not worth it. There's a lot I could say about the four and a half months it took me to write this, because I am just that slow of a writer, but the only good part was the one where I was finally done. Now, in theory, I am free at last. And that is almost worth the writing.
Another remake? Oh, this is gonna be SO GOOD!
Aww shit
another Rainbow Factory story
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Just...no. Stop.
5100988 Well I did tell you not to read it. If you went against my explicit warning, you really have nobody to blame but yourself for the consequences.
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I didn't read it. But, good luck with all the other comments.
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-Said no one ever
5101012 No, the weird thing is that when I saw that comment, there was one view on the story, and one rating, which was positive. I thought it was sarcastic too, but apparently it wasn't. It worries me a little that it wasn't sarcastic.
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5101007 I don't think you understand. I want negative comments. They validate my opinions. Negative comments prove that I was right, and help reinforce my will to never again be tempted into writing. Positive comments just prove that some misguided people are lying to me in an attempt to be nice. They do not comprehend the terrible habit they are attempting to reinforce.
But, yeah, I'm fully aware that you don't care what my deal is. I just apparently don't care that you don't care.
This is a dark and depressing story and when you read it you get the same lonely feeling scootaloo did but I have to admit this was pretty good but too many sad stories could have a negative affect
5101064 "Negative comments prove that I was right, and help reinforce my will to never again be tempted into writing. "
To be honest, I personally genuinely like this story.
It's an interesting take on the original, with a few changes and additions, and still has a reasonably engaging storyline, though not as extreme.
And your spelling and grammar is good.
You'd probably do better writing more original stuff, rather than basing it on a fanfic series which already has far too many remakes.
"Positive comments just prove that some misguided people are lying to me in an attempt to be nice."
Is that sarcastic, or do you just underrate your own fics, or are you just so bad at writing fics that you end up accidentally writing good ones when you try to write bad ones?
5512026 I underrate my fics. Well, I almost always underrate my fics, anyway; I mildly overrated Flying for the Other Team initially, and I might have one or two that are even worse than I think, though I don't see anything to gain from trying to figure out which ones if so. And then, of course, I try to adjust my opinions upwards because I know I'm too hard on myself. But then I look again and I realize that everybody who liked <insert story here> is self-evidently an idiot with no taste. And then I scold myself for being so unfairly judgmental about people I know nothing about. And then . . .
So it's much easier to just speak my first thoughts. Besides, I'm usually trying to convey the self-loathing that writing can instill in me, and my first thoughts tend to do an excellent job of that.
And on the subject of writing more original fanfiction, even if I ever start writing again, I'm pretty sure that this will remain the only time I have ever reinterpreted somebody's story. I'm quite critical enough without inviting a direct comparison to somebody else's work, and I can assure you that I'm well past the point where I might look at a story and accidentally think "I could have written this better."
This needs more attention. This was the first Rainbow Factory story I've read, and wow did it blow me away. Re-reading it now it still does. The plot flows smoothly and holds my attention the whole time, as well as being an original take on the song. I've since read the original story. I like yours better.
I'm complimenting a Rainbow Factory related thing. Coming from me, that's huge. You're very talented, don't be afraid to write!
Daaannnnngggg.
This was a bigger snooze-fest than when I had to spend almost a whole day after I came back from school catching up on my homework.
I legit almost fell asleep at one point.
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I'll have to take your word for it; Celestia knows I can't suffer through 12,000 words of my own writing to find out.
Although I'm curious whether you've read the original, and if so how you think they compare. Just going off memory I can't decide which one I think is worse.