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Spider8ite
Fuck. Known one day as 'Mistress Spectrum'.
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Me Foxy and the rest the gang at freddys pizza like this story
5041347 Haha, oh my gosh, if that's true this is going to be my most awesome story ever! Thank you mate! Ahoy and Bro-hoof!
Thank me later.
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5041378 Hehehe XD
my now doesn't that cover image look enticing?.....
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5041843 why the hell does everyone use that thing? did iah make that a thing?.......
meh , well that was random.....
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I love it! Thank you so much!
Also, I'm seeing their relationship a lot like this:
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5041987 It could have something to do with the fact that Breaking Bad is the greatest TV show ever!
Bitch!
(Fandom joke, don't take personally.)
Honestly that song was the first thing I thought of when I read the title.
Just drop that whole last sentence. Never interject yourself into your story unless it is told from third person.
Yeah, can see the reference, one of my favorites songs.
And a very good story.
5044882 Thank you! Glad you enjoy it!
5042679 Oh man, you made me laugh!
Yeah it's just like that! No problem bro, I'm very happy you enjoy it! 
5043669 Not that greatest, but when I don't watching MLP, Orange is the New Black or OUAT, I watch this (or Doctor Who)!
As a fellow lover of rival/hate sex, im glad this fic was made, but i do have some problems with it.
The start was great, nice build up with NM sneaking in and delivering bites and the like, I don't have problems with the early beginning. But I think Celestia's interest in fear could have been shown better, probably by showing examples of a stuffy/safe/boring life dealing with nobles and the like, or having more build and motivation behind Celestia taking the death defying fall.
The fight between Celestia and NM was way to short, and I dont mean when she first arrived, I'm talking about when the foreplay initiated. There should have been a bit more build up or slowness before plainly revealing that Celestia got off on the fear or the domination, in fact this would be a time to pull out the 'show don't tell' motto, at least not so directly. It would have been much better if it was a back and forth between NM advancing and Celestia trying and failing to resist, she herself questioning why shes not fighting back as NM would give answers as to why. something like the lines where you state Celestia is into the rivalry and fear was fine, but should have come up a bit after a few other lines, or at the cusp of the real sex actually starting.
FINALLY the sex speaks for itself, and its not in the exact same language of what was happening. The biting was awesome (big fan of that, A+
) and a great example to show off the dynamics of their relationship, but the rest was just normal sex. No power play, no sub or dom, no more pain play or rough sex, no Celesta giving into harsh treatment, nor NM abusing her power over Celestia. this would be fine if the dialog didn't aim to make out the dynamic of their relationship out like that. Though its not like you completely missed the mark, the foreplay was spot on, with the holding down and biting like i said, it was mostly just the masterbation and cunnilingus, which could be counted as the meat and bones that feels otherwise.
also maybe its just because I've used the line as well with the whole 'I hate you.' after passionate sex, but I think there would have to be much rougher play involved for that to feel 100% well warranted.
once again, not a bad fic, and this critique could probably be fixed by tacking on another 6, or so thousand words on it. For only 3k, things where pretty well delivered in the long run, and I wish you would have wrote so much more, as I'm a slow burn and have been left with a throbbing boner. But if you got what you wanted out of this fic you made regardless, then my words are meaningless.
5042679
Lol.
And I don't get why people have angry sex...meh, tension maybe?
5048752 have you ever tried it?
I don't think that many people would turn it down ((from a male perspective)) 
5041378
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Well, that was very interesting. I love how Celestia gets so off on being dominated by someone of equal stand. Honestly, I think that is something she really needs. Someone to make HER into a subject for once. So why now make Nightmare that someone?^^
Who am I to disagree with that chapter name?