Twilight has just defeated Tirek and is adjusting to her new life in the castle when Celestia assigns her a new task unlike anything she's taken on before, and a certain cyan colored whether pegaus admits her feelings towards Twilight.
First time writer, bear with me here. Constructive critism is certainly welcome!
Rated teen to be safe, some Twilidash, but probably fine for everybody.
Please note, my version of Twilight's castle is probably not accurate, though we won't know until season five. I chose the castle layout for my story, so please just go with it.
Chapters (1)
A few spelling errors but I like your writing style so far. Can't wait for Dashie to come into your story!
Well, I don't know when you started it, but here are a few pointers, 1, -"Enjoying Power Ponies Volume #973?" Spike jumped, "Oh! Twilight! This room is epic!- That line should have been split into 2 paragraphs, im sure the person who checked your story to approve it missed that, and you have a few spelling errors, other than that, I see nothing wrong, I mean yea, kinda off to say she would ask Celestia, but nevertheless, it is good. Also if you would do me the favor and check out my story, Intangible, or even my other one Unrequited in which, little did i know, there are 4 named the same on this site including mine. I need a little criticism on them :)
Chapters could been a bit longer, but not a bad start/ keep it up
Few spelling and grammar mistakes, but overall, fairly good. Keep at it.