Octavia plays a private concert for the Wonderbolts and the four alicorn princesses, solely so a drunken Celestia can set her up with Soarin. Although Octavia resists at first, she begins to wonder if there's something more behind those pink flushed cheeks of his.
Written for the Crack Ships, Inc. monthly contest. Link! :3
Now with a Rage Review! Link! :3
Now with a ReadingSins review! Link! :3
No editor as of now. General feedback on how I'm doing is always appreciated!
Cover art by AliceHumanSacrifice0 on DeviantArt. Link! :3
Rated Teen for alcohol, light swearing and light sensual references.
Chapters (3)
Oh this sounds interesting.
*adds to read later*
I'd read it now but I have to run.
Pretty well paced and an interesting idea. You might want to look over it again for some editing. I think you spelled Octavia wrong once. But otherwise good!
4830086 Thanks for the catch, I'll fix that
Just remember to put a link in the Prompt thread so people know to come and read it.
4832646 Will do, just wanted to get two chapters out first.
So many things wrong here... but i'll keep watching for more, see what happens.
I was wondering about editing. There was quite a few confusing spots throughout this chapter.
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I try and self-edit, but it usually doesn't go well.
If it's not too much, would you mind telling me what is wrong? I'd love some feedback and ways to improve the story. I want it to be the best it can be for the contest.
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Mainly a few places where there were extra words that don't belong, or missing words that may be significant. I'd have to read it again for example.
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Thanks. I'll reread it myself and see what I can catch.
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Although, to be fair, i may have confused it with another story i stopped half through. May have confused it. Hope not.
Nice story! Although I do agree some spots were confusing, can't particularly say which because my mind has a sort of autocorrect feature. Love octavia to death so this gets a fav
I <3 Octavia
Celestia+Moonshine =/ Don't mix well at all
... Drinks at a party...
That you didn't make yourself.
Go tavi go.
It's a three outta five.
Okay, one chapter in, and this needs to be turned into a series.