Vinyl and Octavia fic i came up with. inspired by Two's company, three's crowd. I did my best not to copy from other stories like it and to change things up up, but there's only so much you can do after you find a good base for characters you see for two seconds. I'd like some criticism, but only if it helps. I do NOT want random hating and if you see something a little too similar in my story tell me and I'll either give credit to the original owner of whatever it is, unless I came up with the Idea myself and it happens to be the same as another...then i don't care
cover pic here, i didn't make it http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=Vinyl+Octavia#/d4d7c6n
Chapters (7)
Remove thy dialoge from the paragraph! Tis a wall of text and walls of the text variety are difficult to read. Thy hast an excellent story and it would be a shame to see it as a wall of text further on.
342885 dont understand what you're saying
342897 Translation: You have walls of text. You need to make a new paragraph when someone new speaks.
342897 Sorry, but I had the sudden urge to type like that but anyways, you need to remove the dialoge from the paragraph. It makes the story some what hard to follow. Please refer to the following.
[Wall of text]
[space]
[Characters speech followed by their description of actions.]
[space]
[Wall of text]
342943 I've been getting stuff like that a lot. I guess it's just how I write...i'll go through it and try to make things more consistant later but for now im feeling pretty lazy
i love it. i want more. MOOOOOOOOORE IS WHAT I CRAVE. MORE OR YOU WILL LOSE YOUR SOLE! anyways its good so far.
another very interesting story that I like very much it's getting real good too.
343405 this is one of my fics I have pushed aside a bit...I have chapters waiting for uploads though!
That was bloody AMAZING and belive me when I say this I will be fucking ECSTATIC when the next chapter comes out. So if you please do me a favor and post soon
343579 just for you my friend, uploading ch.2 right now!
345133 ch.2 is up, three's coming sometime today. I think i have a total of six completed, but im currently in progress with my TwiLuna fic so this wont be updated after that for a little bit
345279Fair enough If you can post soon as always and I wish you good luck P.S. the third chapter was EXCELLENT it gets better and better I didn't see Octavia getting pregnant coming! I love your work please keep posting and surprise me some more if that's ok with you
346340 if you liked this go search two's company, three's crowd. it's what made me want to write this. I've got halfo f chapter 7 written and I'll upload 1 chapter a day
346346 alright thanks a lot
Omg Twilight Sparkle, and Princess Celestia has a foal now XD hahah awsome. Plus Scratch and Octavia is going to be parents too another awsomeness XD.
352404 Mhm, just you wait until my next uploads thank you good sir here have a mustache
Hahaha you welcome and thank you for the mustache it would quiet handy in the near future hahaha
346346 I read a few pages of what you said (it took a long time to find it though
) I can see why took a bit off it if I were the author I'd be honored can't wait for the next chapter and I still love it. It's worth every second of my life
354857 you mean the two's company one? and I did my best to differ it, but the only thing I really took from it was the magical impregnation but I changed up how it happened a bit. I'll upload another chapter now
354929 Thanks a lot I'll give my feed back when I'm done
*scratches head* that was quite nice I'd normally have a bigger reaction but I've kind of run out of things to say after the third chapter
BUT I still LOVE these keep posting so I can see what happens next
355614 you should pick up on some of my other stories too, on Twilight Nachtschatten I'm actually working on my grammar and it's just going in every which way, and that's th one i work on right now
AWSOME another good story I can't wait for the next one XD
358419 whether you mean story or chapter it won't be long now for either
358458I know it's short, but it's a story to me because it's very interesting too.
360219 no the context in which you said 'can't wait for the next one' makes it look like you're saying you can't wait for the next story instead of next chapter and I say I'll have a new one for both soon
Oh okay sorry to make it sound confusing to you I didn't mean it that way, but yeah I do like it a lot though.
Omg omg omg omg another good one again hahaha keep up the good work your doing great.
Great as always, good job too can't wait for the new one so keep posting please
363576 I'm at a sort of writer's block...I can't seem to get any of my pony stories out. I'm going to start uploading an all OC pairing fic I've got going and the only thing I can seem to write is my novel...I'll get the next chapter of UF up tomorrow but after that it might be a while
363591 I understand I've had writers block it mainily came from me put most of my good ideas into the first few pages
But enough about me I'll wait patientily for your chapters, but still be eager
363609 well it's not so much as writers block as i totally forgot where the hell I was going. I often have to stop writing in the middle of an idea because I write during school, and then I get an idea for another fic and start writing that. these fics and chapters I upload change at least two or three times per chapter, at the moment- as I said before- the only thing I can write more than a couple sentences is my novel...and I can't upload that here for it isn't pony related
363632 bit of a shame, but ok. I'll relate with you for a sec (why? because I feel like it) I have a few ideas to a fic i'm writing I write in school (like you), but when I get another idea for something it's like I have ta' write it down before I forget. And as soon as I write it I lose my place in my main idea (and it's so damn FRUSTRATING
). ANYWAY, I have the same problem as you (almost), but I don't exactly have fans yet (and I write something unrelated ta' anything ponyish when I screw up kinda like you and your novel). I'll stop here unless you want ta' talk more (which i'm open for
)
363703 why sure. I am a chain writer. I literally go from fic to fic...my seven ponies fics all ahve at least four chapters to them now and I just started the first one about three weeks ago and I got an eigth planned. then there's my novel, my Strawberry Panic fic, my Naruto fic, my oneshots and my Fanime story i write on and off as well. I go on a huge writing spree every now and then where I get like three chapters written in one day and others it takes a week to write one
363980 that happens ta' me all the time I come up with good ideas for one fic and completily forget where I was going with the other one then while I'm writing that I come up with good ideas for my story I left and it's just an on-going cycle
364638 Eeyup
364996 And in the end it's EXTREMELY annoying and FRUSTRATING. *sigh* then I take a break for a few days or at least that was the plan than I lose great ideas in the break and that's even worse than before so I return to my annoying cycle
Don't really know where this story is supposed to be going anymore lol, Halfway through the third page-which is where I left off- I started writing with the dialogue spaced out like apparently I should so bear with it.
DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
374564 is that a good damn or a bad damn?
A good damn
374814More please
*No spoilers here* which are *No spoilers here*? Gotta be that way due to magic.
375337 huh?
Very nicely written. I like where this is going.
faved and watched.
I'm enjoying this sooo much. The story just seems to flow naturally without feeling forced in terms of new scenes or plot developments.
414497 thanks, it gets much more interesting as it progresses
414511
More intersting? I can't wait!