Also known as, the Twilight.
I feel like this story doesn't need much of a description. After DJ Valkyri-3 I wanted to write more cutesy romance and see if I couldn't squirm my way back into ponified. Saw the picture and, well, this happened.
Also, I never really see Twilestia from Celestia's point of view. It's always form Twilight's or an omniscient view so I thought I'd try it out. Turns out it's really fun to write!
Enjoy!
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Added the sex tag for chapter 2 specifically, but unless insinuations without real descriptions and raunchiness with a dose of lewd iconography rubs you the wrong way then it's perfectly safe. It's still nowhere near needing the mature tag.
Chapters (5)
Beautiful story so far, good job! Hilarious, mysterious, and adorable! Celly's gonna have to give into the ear nibbling at some point, which will be a surely amusing and positively cute moment. Thank you for such a chapter. It was quite delightful.
Fluffy and fun. Definatly waiting for more
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Glad you guys like it!
I have to say that i love this story and will happy/eagerly watching it
Tons of fluff? You have my undivided attention!
What a lovely story so far. I normally don't read Twilestia, but I'm actually enjoying this quite a bit. On with the fluff!
Should that be Celestia? Also, there's about a dozen or so reversed or missing letters throughout the story, like "si" instead of "is" or "staf" instead of "staff". Clean those up, and you've got yourself one heck of a chapter.
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While I don't really think minor mistakes like that take away form a story, thanks for being polite about it. I think they're fixed.
Great story I love some light hearted stories once in awhile
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I like writing them every now and then too. It's fun to do epic adventures and war stories, but it's also nice to just write pure floof.
Cute. I'm definitely tracking. But just..., garlic cloves in pancakes? Is that a thing? The spice cloves would be an odd enough mix, but...
This was adorable. I am eagerly looking forward to more.
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Just a pinch, that's literally how I make mine.
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Okay, so just like a pinch of garlic powder. That's not too weird I guess. I mean I put cinnamon in my marinara. Maybe I'll try it some time. It's just the way you wrote it made me think she was using multiple cloves of garlic which would be considerably more odd.
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Naw it's just random pwodered garlic cloves. A few shakes of it, a healthy portion of nutmeg, a mound of cinnamon, some vanilla, and a little bit of oil in the batter itself so you don't need so much butter or cooking spray on the pan. Mix it thick so it puffs and sticks rather than spreads and it's like an actual pancake cake.
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HERESY WHERE IS THE TWILUNA
YOU SHIP TWILUNA LIKE FEDEX
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I SHIP A LOT OF THINGS LIKE UPS
also the Twiluna is coming later
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any chance for some updates to some of your stories
i have most of them in my library and i needs updates
HUZZAH PORN!
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Passion Darling, we're far too classy for common smut.
Apparently I chose the right time to get back into fimfiction, this is delightful!
and I don't usually go for Twilestia, so you know I'm being serious. Twi-Dash is OTP XP.
I appreciate the descriptive style, but I'm interested to know how long it'll take for Celestia to admit what she already knows to be true XD
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But my friend, twilestia is bestia.
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Depends on which ones lol. Apotheosis and the changeling ones are either back in the works or next in line
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You may convince me yet...
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well those ones the vampony one with scarlet in the name, survival is hell, and the one with twilight who volunteered to be put in prison
So much fluff. That Twilight-Celestia interaction is wonderful.
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Scarlet high and Scarlet reverie are both high on my to do list. Survival is hell sequel is dead at this point, and that random twilight once wasn't going anywhere
I think the only comment I can give this chapter...and story... is 'Delicious!' Even tho I expected something like this, (honestly I thought they'd gone further the night before) You could feel Tia's confusion...especially about how she could tell they were closer...
I eagerly await the next chapter.
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really i liked that story :( what with the carved runes and the maic draining eye
Garlic-and-syrup pancakes with nutmeg.
Um.
Okay.
Also,
(Psst whipped egg whites, folded into the batter)
What is DJ Valkyri-3?
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less fluffy texture and more puffs up so it doesn't spread in the pan
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a story I finished recently
Very enjoyable fluff! You really need a proofreader though:
"missed here" should be "missed her"
"afterall" should be "after all"
"flushed up" should just be "flushed"
"got ot their hooves" should be "got to their hooves"
Finally, there are lots of jarring viewpoint changes between third person limited and omniscient, for example:
"She was on vacation, she never gets to wear it like this- the masses expect her usual multicolored aesthetics" - this sentence has switched to an external narrator's point of view instead of Celestia's. To be consistent, it should be "she never got to wear it like this - the masses expected her usual multicolored aesthetics".
Another example: "It really has been a while since she’s taken this form." should be "It really had been a while since she'd taken this form." This happens distractingly throughout the story.
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Proofreaders have failed every time I've used them in the past. They either take far too long or don't want to deal with my inconsistent uploading.
As for the spelling mistakes, thank you. I've been building a computer the past couple days and things keep going wrong so I haven't had the chance to go through and fix them- someone PMs me them as well.
As far as the viewpoint changes, it's mostly because I'm experimenting with a different writing style. Your feedback is definitely helpful with it! I'll try to make it less jarring. The thing I'm going for is a full third person narration that also covers the character's perspective, narrating their thoughts without directly writing them as thoughts.
I'm loving this story. It's fun and cute!
Fluffy!
Only things that threw me were the changes to the number of children Cadance was expecting and the names of Twilight's parents from show canon, otherwise, it was cute.
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My knowledge of cannon up to the changeling invasion and the Crystal Empire, that's about it. That's whne I stopped watching, so I have my own established headcannon for things.
I didn't even know cadence having kids was cannon.
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Ah yeah, that would do it... Cadance had an alicorn baby named Flurry Heart in season 6, I think, and Twilight's parents fanon names of Night Light and Twilight Velvet were recently canonized in an episode that focused on her family.
Got a little talky in the last two chapters, and using your own names for Twilight and Shining's parents was an odd choice that kinda threw me more than I thought it would, but otherwise it was a very nice piece.
Thumbs-up!
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Well, I didn't plan on going further than the teen tag, didn't plan an adventure or a tragedy not much to do besides talk XD.
It is a interesting thing your main six have going on here, I like it.
Beautifully done good sense of humor throughout. I'm not going to lie I laughed harder at the hookers and blackjack joke than I should have.
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Glad you enjoyed it!
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Glad you wrote it!
Is here mature sequel/prequel to it? Because it feels like it should.
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Naw, it was just a cute little thing that got kinda spicy
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oh, well. It sweet and nice story on its on.
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I also have no interest in writing anything sexually explicit anymore, especially if it's not humanized. I experimented with it a while back and it's just awkward to write for ponies.
I love how playful they're being. That's an aspect of these two characters that rarely gets mentioned.