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Applejack isn't known for being romantic. She's sometimes too blunt and straightforward with what she has to say, so it's not exactly easy for her to play mysterious.
But, when it comes to a certain Pegasus, she can't seem to form words to use at all.
Don't let the comments spoil the story, please.
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A cute little scene for AJ. I like it. Good job.
You ma'am have earned Mustaches
EDIT; Sorry couldn't help myself, erased the spoiler.
4771795 HUSH YO'SELF CHILD! Seriously, you just said the bucking ship when you weren't supposed to.
I like it ever if it is a pony I've never heard of in the show before
4771806 Sorry, Fixed!
4771813 thank you.
2 views, 12 likes and 8 comments? WTF? Oh, and I like it.
Let's just I am glad its not an appledash fanfic for once. No I aint telling who it is I wont be the type who spoils the story in the comment section.
I was surprised, although since you described "they"-- as a Wonderbolt that might have something to do with it.
Well I had a few candidates, but then you mentioned they were one of them... so yeah. Had no clue.
OK. Totally NOT gonna tell...
Yay I called it! Cute story, I enjoyed this more then I thought going into it
gold star :)
Love it! Have a
Applejack is so cute! I kinda want to know where this romance will go. Love how she kept fighting with herself.
4771804 shh! They can't know it's not! Harmony Charmer wanted to keep 'em guessing! Edit out the part where you say it's an A******* story (please? Don't wanna sound pushy or anything)
*looks at blog post comment* *looks back at story* Called it! Who else did?
4771932 you kinda half-did. Although I TOTALLY agree!
Hmm. A whole fic just to guess which pegasus AJ is talking about? Talk about a weak premise.
4772636 Umm, I think it is who it is, as I've already read the story.
Now, trying to avoid spoilers, part of my problem is how forced the misdirection is. The mystery pony, who we know little about from the show, is described as having a number of traits that we know match someone we do know from the show very well. I mean, there's nothing really wrong with that, it's just too easy a way of misdirecting the reader to be worth dedicating a fic to, in my opinion.
Celestia smiled, knowing that her student would arrive soon. She couldn't wait for that energetic mare to burst through the door, full of excitement for learning new magic and history. She paused for a moment, and wondered if her student had had the time to hang out with her older brother recently. Perhaps she'd have to see if he'd like to join Ponyville's guard, so that he could be closer to his sister. That was an idea she could discuss with her student when she arrived.
She was disturbed by her thoughts by the sound of a door opening beside her. Smiling widely, she turned to her student.
"Hello, Lyra."
See? Too easy.
4772592
No it's not it's obvious! Only a brony in the actual mlp desired age group would think that! Wait it's thunderlane right!?!
4772606
And look at all those downvotes wow someone's disgruntled over my appledash comment 
Well woops but yeah thanks for getting what i mean.
Nice lil' story ya got there.
I like how her crush was really I-Ain't-Telling. Thanks again Harmony Charmer!
You can't even tell me if they're a mare or a stallion?
Sequel?
4773539 If you read it you'll find out.
It took me 10 reads, but I think I've finally got it. I think...
Well played ma'am. Well played.
4773231 again, stop saying the AD word...
4774553
And we both got downvotes for it.
4776139 uh-hi, no spoiling!
4772739 Pretty much this.
The target of affection has almost no defined personality in the show (and what little he has drastically contradicts what we see here,) so there's no moment of recognition for the reader when we find out who it is. It's more of just a "Oh, that's who the author chose. Okay." Misdirection works well when the reader can go back and see how they should have been able to figure it out but didn't. Here the author's just written a name on a piece of paper and told us to guess what they wrote down.
Also, while I understand why you had to avoid using gendered pronouns, it was really obtuse and made the whole thing irritating to read. English just isn't a language you can do that in.
All in all, meh. At least you tried to do something creative. Not gonna vote on it either way.
4776334
What? I am not spoiling anything and can we take this elewhere I don't want to clog up the comment section.
4776683 agreed. PM me sometime
I really wanted the pegasus to be Rainbow.
I would like to see more of this ship.
I thought it was awesome
4776752 me to
4785148 third... But Thunderlane was a interesting surprise.
Nice story
4772636 is your avatar Ferris Bueller?
4812040 You're a doctor
Ooooh...
An Applejack X _________ story...
Me likey!
My reaction when i finished reading
And harmony charmer i suggest you to read "The Weight of Responsibility by Calm Wind" is very neat and has this special ship on it
The writing and content is really good but it doesn't feel like there's any payoff. If this is a one shot I feel like there should be a satisfying ending instead of a chapter that feels like a prologue.
...
Surely didn't see that coming.
I have little words to offer, so have this:
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That was one of the best, if not the best, romance-based one-shots I've ever read. Great job!
4868636
thanks for giving it away.
Very cute story! Although I think that the story would have been better if you didn't try to obscure who AJ's crush was.
Applejack and Thunderlane huh? Never seen that ship before.
Lol a donkey joke it's been awhile ever since season 3
You mean red
Aww this was a very short Cute story and Applejack feeling a little embarrassed when she acts like that in front of Thunder Lane which it's a very interesting shipping I only seen one story those two together which I thought that's actually kind of cool but anyway this is a cute one keep up the good work