When Twilight is given a journal from her teacher, Princess Celestia, she never expected to learn the past of Queen of the Changelings before she was even a queen. This is the story of Princess Papillon, who was the Princess of the Flutter Ponies.
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Takes place soon after the Season 2 finale and before season three
A HUGE thanks to:
my beta-reader; Fantasia Archsage
My poof-reader; L0rd0f7hund3r
and
my editor; Evia The Unicorn
Chapters (4)
1,005 word huh? Cutting it a little close now are we?
4778074 yeah normally i can write a little above that (on a good day) but i need to get use to writing fanfiction when it comes to mlp (there A different between mlp fanfic and the fanfiction when it come to down human beside ponies)
The work shows promise however, you might want to proofread a touch more carefully. You have some words that, while spelled correctly, are incorrect in the fashion in which they are used.
Also could have used more of a hook in the opening, but that's just my opinion. Looking forward to more.
I think if you fix your gramnar spelling errors this will be just fine.
A interesting premise, if I do say so myself. I doubt Twilight could resist such an historic journal. Mind you, with several syntax errors & faulty homonyms in the prologue, my Grammar Nazi Senses are tingling. (Hallowed is another way of saying "holy," for example.) A good start all the same.
4778605 Thank you, yeah It one of the things that i need to work on when it comes to writing (next to stay in character with both canon and a oc). I was going to have a scene with princess Celestia and Luna but I was having trouble writing it so I just had the scene just on it lone. I might do that now since I got some what a hand on writing fantficion with ponies (beside humans.)
4779007 Yeah thank you for pointing that out. It one of the things I need to work on when it comes to my writing
4779068 Somehow that does sound like her since she did kinda read both Celsetia's and Luna's journal this past season. Yeah that is one of the thing i need to work on, wjen it comes to my writing skills.
xD Ok now that made my day
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My work here is done, then. 
This looks neat!
Very interesting! I wonder if The flutter Princess was friends with morning glory or Honeysuckle. And I also wonder if Queen Bumble and her swarm will show up?
A few mistakes but good story I guess.
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Thanks :3
4781340 hmmm never really thought of that before. Maybe I guess I would mind at least mentioning them at least. Thank you for the idea
4781511 Yeah my grammar isn't the best when it comes to that but thank you for letting me know
That's okay. I suck at grammar as well. Join the club!
Do enjoy changeling stories. Will we see Chrysalis redeemed or changeling getting a pass for the wedding?
4836294 as in may for next season or in my story. If you mean my story This story main is about her past but Maybe there might be something at the very end when I am done
As for Queen Chrysalis being either redeemed or changeling getting a pass for the wedding, I see it going both way but I think there might be some some way Chrysalis is somehow going to make it up for the wedding somehow. But since Princess Celestia did (in a way) wasn't all that mad with Discord (at the end of season 4), so who knows.
Not a whole lot to go off of right now seeing as only the prologue's out, but you seem to have a very interesting set-up to your story, as well as a good way to deliver it via Chrysalis's diary entries. I would recommend finding an editor or proofreader in a group that caters such services to go through this with you; some sentences are a bit difficult to understand or make sense of here and there. Overall, though, your story at the moment looks rather promising, and I wish you well in your writing!
I'm all for a flutter pony fic. Keep up the good work, can't wait to see the progression into a changeling. I'm guessing that Rosedust isn't going to be immortal
oh well still love the concept.
4779459 That reminds me,I have those edits available in my Google Drive.
FotFP-Prologue
I'll get to the current chapter, ASAP.
Short chapter is short!
Also, new edits!
FotFP-Journal Entries 3-7
Very nice chapter, love how you madeMorning Glory her hoof maiden. I wonder if there is something more sinister behind her illnes.
Anyway, Keep up the good work! 
4944098 Thank you. I promise myself will not spoiler ANY part of this story
4943890 Thank you very much, Thunder :hug:
It feels unnatural for there to be so many parenthesis and no commas. Perhaps turn most of the parenthesis into commas, just to help reading it.
Morning Glory has disappeared from her room sometime during the night. No pony knows what happened behind the door.
a curfew has been set until this crisis has been dealt with. There has been talk about...if it was cancelled...and getting some reports that she needs.
No need to repeat a sentence.
Rosedust about what the hay
Seems to me that you could stand to build this up a lot more than you are doing. I mean you are having the potential for the murder-mystery (just an example mind you) of the century and are wasting its potential. I mean this is a diary reading, seems that diary's are a bit more personal to me. They include things like thoughts and feelings, ideas and conspiracies. Even intimate details of the ones the person writing it likes. (One reason I never kept one) Just one author's opinion.
Are there any plans to complete this story? I ask because I am going to favorite this because the plot behind it sounds interesting. HOWEVER, until it is completed, I am going to give it a thumbs down. Because while I may approve of the plot behind the story, I DO NOT approve of the fact that it has been 2 months, 3 weeks, and 4 days since the last update. I mean, I understand that greatness can't be rushed, but needing days in order to update the next chapter means one of three things. A: You've given up on the book (this is the most likely scenario). B: You’re too busy to write any more (this is understandable). Or C: You're dead (this is a scenario with a 50% probability chance, seeing as how people die every day.) If option C makes you feel uncomfortable than that means two things. You are obviously not dead, and I am sorry for having that as one of the three possibilities. Also, don’t give up! Your fans deserve better! I, of course, meant that in the best and most encouraging possible way. (This comment has been copied and pasted for the sake of saving time, HOWEVER the plot behind your story does sound interesting, the only reason that I mentioned the fact that it has been copied and pasted for the sake of saving time is because it is usually used for stories that have been sitting for a much longer period of time, for example, stories that have been sitting for 2 years, 4 months, and 29 days [i only say this in case I sound unduly pushy]).
5483890 Sorry for the very long wait
, alot of things have happen all at once ( mainly with school and the holiday rush (work at target.)) these past couple of months. yes I am still planning on complete the story aspa. But the good news is that I am currently working on the last entry (and the equloge) The last time I check I wasn't dead (if i am than i minght be in Limbo 
) Don't worry I am not giving up, since I want to finish this up before getting back to my others fanfictions (ff.net). Don't worry, i totally understand where you are going with that. I just want to make sure that I do a nice job tiring everything up. This is my first fnafiction that I am ending and I don't want to screw it up.
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Okay. Just wanted to make sure that the story (and you) weren't dead. It makes me happy to know that neither one of those things are dead.
Huh, nice classification system with the flutters, summerwings and windywings! And I love your use of Morning Glory, too! Keep up the good work! :)
Interesting.
Fey ponies count both Flutters ponies, Summerwings, and Windywings ponies. Flutter ponies are better with it comes to magic skills. Summerwings have a deep connection with nature and plants. Windywings are great flyers, and about 65 percent of the Royal guard are Windywings.
Huh very interesting