Prologue: What Time is it? It’s Research Time
It was near the end of a warm summer day in Ponyville. Celestia's sun was lowering after a nice day, while Luna's moon was rising in the sky. The inhabitants of Ponyville were just sending in for the night after just another quite day. It was normally quiet for Ponyville when there wasn't out of the ordinary happening. Like for example, a swarm of flying pest, that ate every idea of food and later everything in sight. Tonight a crossed eyed, gray mail-pony was making her last delivery for the day. Her last assignment was to librarian of the Golden Oak Library.
The mail pony landed outside of the hallow tree and knocked on the door with her hooves. The door was opened by a small purple dragon, Spike “Hey there, Spike, I got a package for a Twilight Spackle,” said the mail pony with a smile. "Thank very much." Spike said as he took the small package (with the royal seal on the top) from the blonde mare. The mail pony gave Spike a smile before turning around and taking off. Spike took the package inside wondering what the sun princess could have sent to Twilight.
Maybe it was something that had to do with Twilight’s research.
Thought Spike as he made his way to the upper level of the hollow tree, to where Twilight was at the moment.
Twilight Sparkle was doing some research in the Golden Oak Library, a normal occurrence for the young purple unicorn. However, on this particular day, she was trying to find some information on the Changelings. She has been trying to do some research on them, ever since the event of her older brother’s wedding a few weeks ago. Twilight was surprised of how little information there was little out there on the Changelings. The few things she had found so far like the “language” of the Changeling (a series of hums, clicks, and whistles in varying lengths and tones) from the book, Not Your Everyday *Equstrian Language.
“Hey Twilight, Princess Celestia has just sent over a package of some kind. There is a letter that is on top of the package.” Spike said to Twilight, “Where do you want me to put the package, Twilight?” said the baby dragon, who was stepping over piles of books and notes from Twilight’s current research. Growing up with Twilight, Spike knew not to mess with her notes.
“Thank you, Spike. I can take that for you. I wonder what the Princess sent me.” Twilight said while using her magic to open the letter. Twilight placed the small package on her desk where there no notes were at. Using her telepathic magic, Twilight open the letter that Princess Celestia had sent her to her.
To my faithful student; Twilight,
I hope you find this journal that I found very helpful for your current research. I as sent you some research papers that you might want to read afterwards.
Your teacher,
Princess Celestia
“Wait that it?!” Twilight said out load, skimming the letter to check if she didn't missed anything.
Spike was struggling to make his way over Twilight’s work without messing anything up, “Maybe you should open the package she sent over.”
“Good idea, Spike! I’m sure the princess wouldn’t send over a random book if it wasn’t important.” Twilight said as she wrapped the package with her magical aura to lift up the package. She unwrap the brown mail package to show a leather-bound book; it had no title, and with some folded-up parchment. Twilight guess that the folded-up parchment were the research reports that her mentor would like her to read after she was finish with the book. Looking at the book, Twilight guess what was a couple of water stained on the cover. She looks it over with the utmost curiosity, studying the book to front to the spine. Almost two-third up to the top of the book; was a stamped image of some kind of insect wing. It was most likely the owner's cutie mark since she didn't recognize as any old family crests. She looks it over with the utmost curiosity, studying the book to front to to the spine. She opened it; the writing inside was worn down with age, and with a few water stains still readable never the less.
Spike was heading up to his bed, while Twilight was lighting a candle on her desk. She carefully set the ancient book on her desk so that she didn't rip any of the pages from the book. She flipped opened the book once again to the first entry of the readable writing. “Alright. Today …”
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Today, Rosedust was crowned the new Queen of the Fey Ponies yesterday. The coronation itself went by very smoothly. It looked like every flutter pony in the kingdom was at the coronation today. There were also some very important guests there (like the Lord and Lady of the Flutter Valley) and the Princess from Equestia. It was nice seeing her again; it has been a while since I’ve seen her last. The last time I have saw her, was when father was still alive and well. Oh, how I wish he could have been here to see Rosedust’s coronation. I know he would have been so proud of her.
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Today, my older sister and I went to Canterlot for the Summer Sun Celebration. This was my first time going to Summer Sun Celebration; while this Rosedust was her tenth time going to celebration. There has always been something new [to] see when I go to Canterlot. There are so many wonders here that there are too many lists. One of my favorite places that we used to visit was the old crystal craven that I and my sister use to explore when we were fillies. In the cavern, there were these huge crystals that reminded me of mirrors. Rosedust said one time that they were the very first cavern that the unicorns use to search for gems. They had to stop because the crystals were cruse with draconequus’s chaos magic. She said that if anypony would have looked at their reflection and said their name three times, which both their appearances and mind would twist beyond recognition. Back then, I used to believe that old mare-tale but now I know she was just putting my hoof with that story. Ever since father became ill, Rosedust have been even busier than normal with it comes to Royal Duties. I hope that she doesn’t push herself too much.
1,005 word huh? Cutting it a little close now are we?
4778074 yeah normally i can write a little above that (on a good day) but i need to get use to writing fanfiction when it comes to mlp (there A different between mlp fanfic and the fanfiction when it come to down human beside ponies)
The work shows promise however, you might want to proofread a touch more carefully. You have some words that, while spelled correctly, are incorrect in the fashion in which they are used.
Also could have used more of a hook in the opening, but that's just my opinion. Looking forward to more.
I think if you fix your gramnar spelling errors this will be just fine.
A interesting premise, if I do say so myself. I doubt Twilight could resist such an historic journal. Mind you, with several syntax errors & faulty homonyms in the prologue, my Grammar Nazi Senses are tingling. (Hallowed is another way of saying "holy," for example.) A good start all the same.
4778605 Thank you, yeah It one of the things that i need to work on when it comes to writing (next to stay in character with both canon and a oc). I was going to have a scene with princess Celestia and Luna but I was having trouble writing it so I just had the scene just on it lone. I might do that now since I got some what a hand on writing fantficion with ponies (beside humans.)
4779007 Yeah thank you for pointing that out. It one of the things I need to work on when it comes to my writing
4779068 Somehow that does sound like her since she did kinda read both Celsetia's and Luna's journal this past season. Yeah that is one of the thing i need to work on, wjen it comes to my writing skills.
xD Ok now that made my day
4779459 My work here is done, then.
This looks neat!
Very interesting! I wonder if The flutter Princess was friends with morning glory or Honeysuckle. And I also wonder if Queen Bumble and her swarm will show up?
A few mistakes but good story I guess.
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Thanks :3
4781340 hmmm never really thought of that before. Maybe I guess I would mind at least mentioning them at least. Thank you for the idea
4781511 Yeah my grammar isn't the best when it comes to that but thank you for letting me know
That's okay. I suck at grammar as well. Join the club!
Do enjoy changeling stories. Will we see Chrysalis redeemed or changeling getting a pass for the wedding?
4836294 as in may for next season or in my story. If you mean my story This story main is about her past but Maybe there might be something at the very end when I am done
As for Queen Chrysalis being either redeemed or changeling getting a pass for the wedding, I see it going both way but I think there might be some some way Chrysalis is somehow going to make it up for the wedding somehow. But since Princess Celestia did (in a way) wasn't all that mad with Discord (at the end of season 4), so who knows.
Not a whole lot to go off of right now seeing as only the prologue's out, but you seem to have a very interesting set-up to your story, as well as a good way to deliver it via Chrysalis's diary entries. I would recommend finding an editor or proofreader in a group that caters such services to go through this with you; some sentences are a bit difficult to understand or make sense of here and there. Overall, though, your story at the moment looks rather promising, and I wish you well in your writing!
I'm all for a flutter pony fic. Keep up the good work, can't wait to see the progression into a changeling. I'm guessing that Rosedust isn't going to be immortal oh well still love the concept.