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Twinkletail
I write poni. I am easily distracted. I like Oreos.
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I love it 11/10
Kinda wish there was a second part to this. Well done.
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Discord. That is fucked up on soooooooo many levels.
How this ended with a "Complete" tag, I'll never know. NEW CHAPTER, PLOX! XD
I'd love to see another chapter of this
Why is this marked complete!?
We need more of this! So many
depraved, I meankinky, I mean "fun" ways that this story could go now! It's a travesty to end such a great fic setting so suddenly!4622690
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I'm considering a sequel, honestly, but I don't know when I can get to it. I've got soooooo much on my plate writing-wise
And thank you so much for the support! I was a little self-conscious about how this one came out. But then again I always get self-conscious about my work. I'm really glad people are enjoying this one
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It was hawt.
4624477 Do it. The author of Five Score demands it.
That will teach AJ to never challenge Discord
I'll echo the others and hope that you will write a sequel someday
This is great, I enjoyed this story so much.
Technically rape by impersonation.
I would assume that this has some serious consequences for everyone involved. No way something like this is going to end well.
... that was hot. Why aren't there more like this?
Aha what a great read!
You should totally do another chapter of this or a sequel of some sort as it was very fun to read. 
Oh please have a part two! I'd love to see AJ going to town on herself as Caramel!!
This was perfect, but needs no part two. Why? Because it ends so perfectly. Now...if there was a story that takes place maybe a few months after this with Caramel looking for another stallion...or a way to be a mare and THEN find a stallion, that I can get behind
(lol, get behind 
)
Ahem, anyway this was well written and Discord, for the short time he was played, was played believably so, which is in itself an accomplishment.
Lastly, the clop was very well done. I need not say that it served it's purpose well
4631085 Oh my Celestia yes!
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Or maybe Applejack's willing to share?
4636797 Interesting purposal. A Caramel sandwich sounds delicious.
Love this, although I have one little nitpick. When Caramel was in AJ's body, I think you should have changed all of the male pronouns to female pronouns, mainly because, well, Caramel was a mare for those parts.
The clop was nice, but I think that reading certain scenes (if you aren't into M/M) could have thrown people off, especially when they're fucking, you know? If you switch the pronouns around, that would completely negate that effect, and people would still know what would be going on.
Also, this totally needs a sequel.
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That was actually one of the major things I was debating back and forth on while writing it. I justified it to myself by saying that he identified himself as male, but I still wasn't confident that I'd made the right decision with it.
I maaaaay go back and edit that around. Not sure yet though.
Though I m not a fan of Soaring X Applejack just because of some freaking pie this was pretty good. Like.
4641741 I think it works as you have it, I thought it was pretty clear what was going on...
And I too would love to see a second part. :)
I agree this was a good story
I saw this won a contest in the Transformations group, and I must say… I'm not impressed. Though your grammar is significantly better than the majority of stories I've read on this site, there are some rather significant storytelling issues up-front.
This paragraph states and restates the same point, which is easily condensed to a single sentence, as I'll demonstrate.
One sentence is probably a bit minimalist, but I needed to prove that it could be done. Two sentences would probably be ideal, but nearly 120 words dragged, especially in a section that appears to be summarization to rush into the story proper. There were a bunch of other places where you restated points already driven home, most notably here:
What is in red repeats what comes before it and is shown far more vividly by what follows it in green. What's in orange was shown in the previous scene, far too recently for it to be forgotten.
I also mirror the point made by 4628452.
I can't stop laughing at this
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11/10 Would read again.
I need to do a story using this concept now.
I hope AJ doesn't blame him for giving in to the moment... Wasn't really his fault after all,
I wish there was a sequel to this...
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So do I.
Brilliant!