A young man in high school has let his friend convince him to try mushrooms for the first time, but tripping near TARDIS-sized inter-dimensional rifts is never a good idea. Three guesses where they end up.
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i like it.
432802 thank you (someone likes it
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I'll wait to pass judgement :)
In the meantime, might want to have the shrooms actually introduced. It shifts from "pats the bag" to "I haven't taken shrooms before."
Also, takes more than one to trip you at all (though I guess there are some serious lightweights out there). A full ounce would put you in the state of absolute @_@ that you described though.
433596 ah, I was unsure what to describe as I have never had them, so I kind of assumed it would only take 1 for a first time, i'll fix that
but to all for now it'll be a few more days than first thought as I wasn't expecting a stomach virus to move in today and can't write well when I have to keep leaning over a trash can
You foal! You must try them before writing about them! Kidding... Mostly
The experience you normally recieve off of a standard dose can only be described as thus:
That feeling when you wake up and are still dreaming. You are aware of the dream and consciousness at the same time, and both have equal validity.
It's worth experiencing at least once, though if you ever do, start with a small dose. Take a full ounce (might be gram...) on your first time and you really will end up in equestria. Or silent hill
Well here you go everypo- ONE everyone, not pony, ugh. 2nd chapter of 1st fanfic ever, I once again apologize for not getting things going yet, but I didn't want to rush into it, I once again apologize for the lack of our good old friend The Doctor and the other characters I tagged but still haven't had major parts, at first I was like "I'm gonna post this and it'll be actiony and hilarious"
, then I was like "But Wait!" 
"I need the story and main character to be introduced first" 
But now it's 1 A.M. and I'm just like 
so once again constructive criticisms, hate, love, screaming fans (maybe one day), and suggestions for where to go, how to do it, and the like are welcome, I would also like to take this opportunity to point out that this is not in fact a self-insert
Hmm... I'm not usually a fan of HiE stories. (Shut up anypony who also follows me on deviant Art.) Well, I am not usually a fan of Earth x Equestria stories to be exact, but this has an interesting premise to say the least. The transition from Earth to Equestria is... The most I know about magic mushrooms comes from that one Proton John video and Mario Bros...
Anyway! Bit of a slow start, but that isn't something I really care about. There are several places where grammar can be improved. Nothing a simple desk reference can't fix. I also noticed a couple misspelled character names. (Not that it didn't take me a couple months to get Apple Bloom and Nightmare Moon right...) Still, not a major offense in my book, just something to be wary about.
The number one thing I caught was keeping character references in order. It got a little ambiguous who was saying what line without some sort of cue. Maybe break up the dialogue with some actions that refer to the characters by name. And don't be afraid to throw descriptions around. It is better to overdescribe something and cut the number of descriptive words and phrases in half than not describe at all.
Anyway, I'll keep watching if you keep writing.