Nightmare Moon's Tiny Adversary
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Chapter 2
Part 3
“What happened next?” Twilight asked curiously, trying not to let her excitement show through.
“Screams of fear. Locked doors. Abusive insults calling us the monsters. Prayers for my sister to come save them. Some even threw whatever they could get their hooves on at us, and a few particularly foolish ones tried scaring us with garlic,” Nightmare Moon said, grimacing at the taste left in her mouth after her recollection of Luna’s memory.
“That's horrible!” Twilight exclaimed, stomping her tiny hoof on Nightmare Moon’s silver horseshoe. “How could they be so ungrateful and disrespectful towards the princess, especially after she protected their town?”
Nightmare Moon cleared her throat at Twilight with a tiny smile, showing her fangs, and the tiny mare was quickly reminded who she was dealing with. “Umm…” she began, much more demurely, “what happened to Princess Luna and her guards after that?”
The dark alicorn closed her eyes and took in a deep breath. “We tried to keep them alive until we reached the barracks, but some of them, poor unfortunate souls, died from their wounds or froze to death without shelter and care. No pony gave us shelter on our long way. If even one of them had done differently...” Nightmare Moon said, before she trailed off into a respectful silence that Twilight dared not disturb.
“Erm...hmn.” Nightmare Moon cleared her throat again. “Have you any more questions? As much as I enjoy this conversation, my time is a bit limited.”
“Well... I can now understand why you—I mean Luna—felt so betrayed. But then, why would you try to destroy the world a thousand years ago if you would show us mercy now?”
Nightmare Moon's eyes widened briefly before narrowing dangerously. "Destroy the world?" she snapped. "What manner of slander is this? I tried no such thing!"
The force of the alicorn’s voice physically propelled Twilight off her hoof, but the little mare lit her horn and levitated herself back up into place before she fell too far, much to Nightmare Moon's surprise, before she began massaging her ears.
The dark alicorn took in a deep breath to calm herself before speaking, "Our apologies, but thy false accusations angered us."
Twilight furrowed her brow in confusion at Nightmare Moon’s statement. “‘False accusation’? From what I read, you tried to bring eternal night to Equestria, even though without the sun, the everything would freeze and all the crops would die...”
Twilight stopped herself when she saw Nightmare Moon glaring daggers at her. “Did I say something wrong?”
“Yes, you did! Your ignorance is something I would not have expected from our sister’s student. Our goal was to regain the love and respect of our subjects, to show them that we are not a mere pet of their beloved sun princess. It was not to kill them all. Do you think we would be so stupid as to try and gain respect and love from corpses?” Nightmare Moon said, her regal voice fuming as she tried her best to restrain the strength of her voice for the tiny unicorn’s sake.
“B-b-b-but that’s what was in the book! Wait a minute, if your eternal night wasn’t eternal, why did you refuse to lower the moon and keep the sun from rising?” Twilight asked suspiciously.
Nightmare Moon frowned. “We did so to weaken that traitorous wretch you call your mentor. We both possess a bond with our respective heavenly bodies, so we sought to cut off Celestia’s power source. Once we had overthrown her tyranny, we would force an implementation of another form of rule much more equitable to us, something much more permanent than her empty promises, and thus restore control of the sun to her. We never meant to harm our subjects, even if they deserved punishment for their misdeeds against a princess.”
What? So the tale about the two pony sisters would be a lie! Or... maybe Nightmare Moon’s lying, but then again, that would go against what she says about honesty. If she really is telling the truth, then...
“It’s all just a big misunderstanding?” Twilight said, tapping a hoof to her chin in contemplation.
Nightmare Moon blinked a few times. “Care to explain?” she asked flatly.
“Err, well, when you refused to lower the moon, you must have made everypony and your—erm, Luna’s sister think that you were trying to bring about eternal night. That has to be why Princess Celestia banished you to the moon with the Elements,” she said slowly, more to herself than to Nightmare Moon. “She had to choose between you and the lives of all her subjects and, more broadly, every single living creature on the planet. Back then, she must have thought that was the only way!”
Twilight turned to Nightmare Moon excitedly. “The world today has changed, and ponies are much more open minded than in the past. I’m sure your sister’s very sorry for what she had to do, so if you can tell her the truth, I am sure she would forgive you, as long as you can forgive her as well,” she said, but her speech had the opposite effect of what she expected.
A loud crack resounded through the air, and Twilight looked down to see that all the tiles around where Nightmare Moon was sitting had broken, with the alicorn’s horn burning dangerously.
"I will forgive your ignorance,” Nightmare Moon began, in a low, tense tone, “for you have never known us before and the books you have read were the works of fools who knew even less, but we cannot forgive our sister hers!"
Nightmare Moon straightened up, her sudden movements jolting the tiny mare on her hoof around as she glared into the space before her. “We hate our sister for how she treated us! She turned our own subjects against us! She sealed us on the moon! Is it not logical that I would think her goal was to become the sole ruler of Equestria?”
“But to think,” the dark alicorn said, grinding her teeth together as she continued to rage to the empty Town Hall, even with Twilight leaning backwards as far as possible to try and put distance between them, "to think that she banished us because she thought us so foolish as to doom our subjects to a cold death is far more insulting! By the honor of the moon, I cannot allow this affront to stand! For insulting our intelligence so, she will pay!"
Nightmare Moon swung her hoof up unexpectedly, leaving Twilight briefly suspended in the air. With an enraged feral cry, the dark alicorn slammed her hoof down hard to the ground, unintentionally catching the little unicorn midair and pinning Twilight between her silvery horseshoe and a small crater in the marble floor.
The alicorn’s eyes widened, and she quickly withdrew her hoof to reveal the tiny mare she had accidentally battered.
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Twilight took a deep, frantic breath to replace the air that had been knocked out of her, and she immediately winced, clutching at her ribs. More than a few bones had been broken, and her body was now covered in a collection of cuts and marble dust. Her nose was also bleeding freely and was no longer aligned correctly, if her eyesight was to be trusted.
Alternating between trying to fill her lungs with air and coughing out dust, the tiny unicorn eventually managed to look up at Nightmare Moon, finding that the alicorn’s snarl had been replaced by a worried expression. Too ragged to do anything further, Twilight just laid motionlessly on the ground, barely registering as Nightmare Moon’s horn sent waves of magic into her body.
She wasn’t quite sure how much time passed before the alicorn spoke again. “Stand.” Nightmare Moon commanded.
Twilight tried to move her legs, and to her surprise, they cooperated. Most of the pain had disappeared without a trace, and she did her best to comply to Nightmare Moon’s order.
“Thou hast endured worse. We can see it in thy resolve.”
Twilight took a deep breath and gritted her teeth before lifting her forelegs and pressing her hooves against the floor’s surface, her legs trembling as she did her best to ignore any lingering soreness in her bones. After the little mare had finally stabilised her shaking hooves, she took few quick breaths before looking up at Nightmare Moon, who observed her every motion carefully.
Twilight blinked. “W-wait, how? I’ve-I’ve never felt a healing spell that powerful before!”
Nightmare Moon let out a snort, faintly smiling. "Thou art mistaken. Healing magic is light magic, and so would belong to that wretch's domain. We have merely blessed thee as we would our Night Guards during times of hardship and war. Consider it an apology gift for our carelessness."
“Blessing...?”
"All will become clear with time. We promise. Now, how art thou faring?" Nightmare Moon asked with concern as she lowered herself to Twilight’s level.
“B-better, I guess. My body still hurts a bit, but I’ve long since gotten used to aches like this,” Twilight replied as she stretched out a few kinks in her back and smiled. “Thank you.”
"It is we who should thank thee. Thou hast been the first pony in eleven hundred years who dared speak to us so casually. Even our own guards hath never been so open with us as thou hast been," Nightmare Moon said calmly. "We are thine enemy. We have sworn to kill thy mentor. We are terrifying to behold and we have even hurt thee, but thou hast shown nothing but bravery and understanding, despite our sister's lies. If we had had more subjects like thee in our times, we might never have rebelled against our sister in the first place."
Twilight was stunned beyond words, staring back in shock as she registered the fact that she was not only pleased by Nightmare’s praise, but even found it heartwarming. The more time she spent in Nightmare Moon’s presence, the more she felt as if she were speaking to her own mentor.
I don’t understand. She’s acting as if I was the only pony who has ever looked past her appearance. The only...
Twilight’s thought was broken when she felt the tip of Nightmare Moon’s wing brush across her aching back protectively.
With a proud smile for her little subject, Nightmare continued, “In the past, we used to craft and shape the night sky, turning it into a wondrous masterpiece for our subjects to admire. Regrettable that it was only for ignorant fools back then, but for a subject such as thee, it would give us great pleasure to add to the majesty of the stars in your honor.”
Twilight found herself blushing at the praise, though she soon found herself recalling a certain memory to mind.
"Wonderful, isn't it?" Twilight asked.
She caught Celestia's attention and pointed a hoof upwards. "Your night sky is so wonderful. The stars are so bright and though ponies see them every night, there’s so much still unknown about them. I found an astronomy book about the constellations and, though there were many things I didn’t understand, I’m sure that when I grow up I’ll be able to learn everything about the night sky and the constellations that you’ve made."
Twilight felt a small surge of guilt she had not expected to feel, and she looked up into the black alicorn’s eyes with a shamefaced expression, rubbing at the back of her neck anxiously. “I-I have to apologize about something...”
Nightmare Moon’s expression softened with confusion as she spoke in a low calming tone. “We should be the ones apologizing, not thee...” she said slowly.
“I praised my mentor for your hard work.”
Nightmare Moon went silent, and her questioning expression now had a hint of a scowl in it.
“I’ve always loved the night sky, and I’ve spent a lot of time studying the stars and constellations. It was a hobby of mine that brought me great joy,” Twilight said in a low voice, looking down as she absentmindedly tapped her hooves together, “and I’ve always praised my mentor for making it so beautiful, even more than I praised her for raising the sun... I’m sorry. I see now that you’re the one who deserves that praise.”
Nightmare Moon blinked a few times as her eyes began to water. For the first time in millennia, she had been praised for her work, by her enemy, no less—no, by the student of her biggest enemy. Midnight blue washed over her dark coat, and she even became a little smaller as she grabbed up the unicorn in a tight hug against her belly. “Thou hast no idea how pleasing it is to hear such words.”
Twilight winced as her already crushed body was once again squashed, though she was far less concerned with steadily increasing cramps in her back and general lack of air than she was with the indigo fur she was stuck in. After few more seconds, Nightmare Moon released her, and she took in a gasp of breath as she lightly pushed herself from the belly, landing on her hooves with a light clop before losing her balance and falling back into a sitting position. Twilight lifted her head to look at the alicorn, who grew taller again, regaining her dark, intimidating appearance, much to the little unicorn’s surprise, though Nightmare Moon still had an embarrassed blush on her face as she quickly raised a hoof and cleared her throat.
“We-we are very pleased. Thou hast proved thyself to be not only strong and brave, but also very wise. Tell us, are there any other ponies such as thee who admire our nights?”
Twilight smiled with renewed hope as she got back to her hooves, for in that one moment, she saw the true form of her mentor’s sister, something that was possible to restore.
“Oh, I’m not the only one. There are many ponies who enjoy your night,” Twilight said, causing Nightmare Moon to eagerly lean in closer. “There’s always the nightclubs where ponies go to have fun in the late hours after sunset. Ponies in love often spend time together under the blessed light of your moon. Many great scholars have entered the field of astronomy and dedicated their lives to studying the secrets of your sky, and did I mention that ship captains still use the stars to navigate at night?”
Twilight finished with a beaming smile, and Nightmare Moon’s fur color seemed to revert again, though the tiny mare’s optimism waned when it switched back to its resolute black.
"We are pleased by your news,” Nightmare Moon said, straightening up into a regal posture. “Thou hast restored our faith in our subjects. Once we defeat Celestia and take the crown—"
To the alicorn’s astonishment, her mouth was sealed in a magenta aura. She blinked a few times, looking between the unicorn and the magical telekinesis around her muzzle with a furrowed brow.
“W-wait! There’s a better solution!” Twilight desperately squeaked out. “Just tell your sister the truth! Tell her how she and your subjects hurt you, and how you never intended to hurt anypony. Nopony remembers you, so nopony would fear Luna for what you did in the past. You and your sister can share the throne equally and I would be honored to be a subject for both of you! There’s no need for more violence!”
Twilight’s magic briefly flickered, before going completely out. The increased mental strain in addition to the ordeals her body had gone through caused the tiny mare to fall to her knees, breathing heavily. Now that I think about it, maybe I should’ve let her finish before I started speaking. I’m not sure if I can take much more punishment today.
Nightmare Moon looked down silently at the exhausted pony, and when she finally spoke, it was with a hint of regret in her voice. “We are sorry, but we cannot fulfil your wish. We have gone too far and done too much to live under our sister’s shadow again. We shall take over Equestria or die trying.”
The alicorn’s ears suddenly perked up, and she looked up as if searching for something, a tiny smile playing at the edge of her mouth. “It would seem that our sister approaches. As much as we have enjoyed thy company, we must ask thee an important question,” Nightmare Moon stated curtly as Twilight used what strength she had left to look up.
“Wouldst thou join us?”
“W-what?”
“If thou shouldst join us, we would reward thee beyond thy comprehension. Power. Riches. A spot at our side, ruling Equestria as our advisor... “
Twilight shook her head as she tried to stand defiantly on her shaky limbs. “You want me to betray Equestria? Betray my mentor?”
“Thou hast heard my story. Thou hast seen how wrong thy mentor is. We are in the right. Wilt thou not join us?” Nightmare Moon asked desperately, sensing her sister’s concentrated aura of power grow ever closer.
“That’s true, I sympathise with you, but I will not betray my mentor. She’s almost like a mother to me.”
Nightmare Moon frowned, but she pressed on. “Thou carest for thy fellow ponies. Thou wouldst even risked thy life to save them. I pray thee, join with us, or they shall suffereth.”
Twilight could hear the desperation in Nightmare Moon’s voice. She’s bluffing. She doesn’t want to hurt anypony. On the other hoof, she seems desperate to recruit me and is too honest for her own good. Come on Twilight. Play it smart. She’s a prideful pony, and it can be played upon.
Twilight’s thoughts were cut off as Nightmare Moon slammed her hoof down in front of her, shaking the ground with a thunderous crash.
“Thou hast a limited time to decide. We shall bring destruction to this town and its citizens until thou wouldst agree to serve us,” Nightmare Moon growled, lighting her horn and spreading her wings impatiently.
The hammering of Twilight’s heart grew to a fevered pitch. “I will join you,” she announced in a loud, clear voice, trying not to show the panic she was fighting.
Nightmare Moon smiled. “A wise decision. A decision thou shalt not regret.”
“And I will stab you in the back the moment you’re weak!” Twilight added, catching Nightmare Moon off-guard.
“W-what?”
“You said yourself that you don’t tolerate dishonesty. Even if you force me to follow your orders, but I will be anything but loyal. Is this the kind of subject you want to rule? The kind of loyalty you desire?” Twilight played her ace, a very risky attack on Nightmare Moon’s pride. The little unicorn took a few deep breaths as she continued to match gazes with the dark alicorn, who stared back at her in disbelief.
The dark alicorn sighed. “Thou art wise indeed, and thy honesty impresses us. Using force to make others respect and follow us will not give us the loyalty and love we desire.”
Twilight let out a sigh of relief.
“Instead, we shall defeat our sister and take over Equestria, and then, with a wise rule, we shall prove to all that we deserve their respect and loyalty. We swear it on the honor of the moon!”
With that final line, Nightmare Moon swirled into a fog and flew outside of Town Hall, leaving Twilight motionless and stunned.
All her attempts to save Luna had failed, and soon Nightmare Moon would face Celestia in combat. Twilight, weak and crashing from her adrenaline high, collapsed again as sleep tried to overtake her exhausted body and mind. The little mare fought the allure of rest, the urge to just close her heavy eyelids and forget about what was to come, as she crawled towards the exit.
“I... have to... tell the princess... that her sister... her sister…can still be saved...”
*explodes from sheer joy.*
You are joking! Man, this is the bomb! What a release, will be looking forward reading this. Big thanks, keep up the good work!
Sweet it finally here is so great
AND ON MY BIRTHDAY TODAY!?!?
Officially, BEST 20th B-DAY EVER!!
Liked, Favorited, Read when I wake up! It's finally here!
Yesyesyesyesyes!
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DID THIS ALL POST IN A SINGLE DAY?!
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This is what my top editors have been working on for months. It is a lot to read so no need to hurry. Just have fun and leave comment what do you think of this sequel or of each chapter, I am really curious how well we did.
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Happy Birthday and have fun. Just do not abandon a party to read this if you plan to make one.
you know a story is good when you don't have to read it to know. all that is needed here is to look at who the author is
Pardon my ignorance, but I couldn't help but notice something while reading the prologue. Does Twilight have the ability - if she chooses to - to turn herself back to normal size?
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Yes.
Though she's got poor control when at full size, overestimating things.
Not a problem in 'dust off and nuke it from orbit' type situations. (though she's been reluctant in the past to use this ability)
Yay.
4584434 I see. I have to wonder how much power she could have in this storyverse when Celestia, Luna and Cadance give her their powers when she is normal size. I'd imagine that Tirek would be obloterated along with half of Equestria. XD
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Thanks, but I still hope that what I wrote life to the standards you put on me, and be aware that most of this is work of my top editors. I may be the one who write this story, but with my limited arsenal of words and English not being my native language, a lot of stuff had to be rewritten for better flown.
So I think that my two top editors deserve a hug.
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Yeap. Returning to her normal size is in Twilight's abilities, but shrinking herself is far above her league. So if she ever returned to normal size, she would need help of Celestia (or Cadence) to shrink again.
And yea, if she ever returned to her normal size, she would most likely push door open with strength that would move two tons heavy boulder, she would hug another pony so tightly that it would put Pinkie's hugs to shame, and by levitating another pony, she would throw her/him flying to other part of ponyville.
As for Twilight getting power from all 3 princesses, she is not that powerful, so it won't make much diference in terms of raw power, HOWEVER, Twilight has been challenging herself for her entire life, delt with giants on her every step and had a lot of compat trainings, so while her raw power would not be greater, her skills and fighting abilities would most likely put Tirek to his knees. (It is like a diference between enraged mage with to much power for her to control and enraged battle mage who has been fighting and hunting giants for his entire life, it would easy break the stalemate).
4584497 I do have to say this series was rather well thought out. The idea of how Twilight had to come to terms with her size changes but still being able to use her powers as effectivly if not more so than in the show itself while still accepting the scale of her size and her abilities. :)
44k words already!
<3 you Commander.
Poor Luna. Afraid that she can never be forgiven even when confronted with evidence that Celestia has been trying to make things right for a thousand years.
It is finally here it is great more is great
I have read the other story you made and I will tell thise, thise one beats all others and is in my top5 fav. I look forward to more and hope the will as awesome as thise one in ch to come
Gods speed old friend.
you know i cant wait to see how strong she will be as a alicorn in the show she could cary 4 of her friends and that was with no strength training
and i cant wait to see how rainbow reacts to twilight being in the wonder bolts
It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! YAY!
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Well. Being small is both her limitation and stregnth.
Living a harsh life made her far stronger than in the show, but being afraid to return to normal size greatly limit what she can do.
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Those 44k words were edited for few months. I will update this story as fast as my top editors can edit it, but I am afraid it will take at least 3-4 weeks before I can upload new chapter, so do not read this story to fast, but rather read slowly and enjoy.
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I am afraid that it is waaaaay ahead of this chapter, but yea, she would teach Appletiny a trick or two.
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Actaully, from Luna's perspective, she thought that Celestia banished her to the moon to become sole ruler of Equestria, and now she found out that it happened because Celestia believed that she was going to kill everypony with ethernal night. It was a big hit in her pride, something Nightmare Moon won't forgive easy.
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Oh, how I love to reply on comments like those. (This comment rather than say that this story is good, it say why this story is good).
Anyway, thanks a lot. I always found Rarity to have the biggest trouble representing her elements because of her weaknesses, but flaws are in characters so he/she can overcome them, and since Rarity is a noble type of pony, it was obvious that Twilight will dislike her character. As for Rarity, the first step to fight one's flaws is to acknowladge them).
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It took us few months to get those things edited. Please do not read it all in one day because it will take a looong time before next chapter will be up. Just enjoy yourself, but do not rush with reading.
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This story is good, because it was the project I and my top editors put the most work into. "Celestia's Tiny Student" was my first story, a story that helped me gain experience and assemble an editing team. My side stories were more of an experiment and something I wanted to write for fun (my top editors didn't worked on "My Little Medic" so I could update it quickly).
Still, I am unsure what to think of how fast you read everything. It took us months to get this sequel started, and you finished reading it in few hours. Updating it with another chapter will take weeks at best.
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Hello.
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Here it is - http://popcornpuffs.deviantart.com/art/Twilight-Sprinkle-332044253?q=favby%3ACommanderEX%2F56625796&qo=28
I collected all tiny Twilight arts I could found in deviant art in this blog: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/274684/twiny-art-section-full-galery
If you like tiny Twilight's arts, feel free to check it and have fun.
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With earth pony magic support and willingness to train it, she sure will be very strong. But keep in mind that Twilight walked with TOM on her back in Discord's episode, so even in the show Twilight was very strong physically.
Did you read chapter where Twilight meet Dash in this sequel, or not yet?
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Hope it was worth the wait. Feel free to leave comment what do you think of what I wrote, I would like to know your opinion.
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Have fun, do not read it to fast and leave feedback what do you think.
4585261 yes i have she said she knows spitfire and got a ride from her not that she was in the wonderbolts
Are the editor credits in the chapters?
So I'm totally looking forward to reading this, but how much does My Little Medic figure into this story? I still haven't read that one...
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If you liked it, check up the art's I collected in this blog
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Well, technicaly she was their medic, not a fellow fliers, but yea, it is still being part of the Wonderbolts.
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Pinkie: Actually it is a fanfic, does this still counts?
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You can thank me by telling me what you think of what I wrote. Every author like to respond on feedback, and mine stories, while have many likes, have surpricely low ammount of comments and feedback, so outside of knowing that people like my story, it is hard to say what they like and dislike in it.
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At the last chapter. I wanted to credit editors in each chapter, but with so many people I worked with, it would be a huge pain to do that. So I put all editors/pre-readers at last one in author notes, but I think I will also place them under story description.
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Yea, but this lots took months to edit, so do not rush to fast over it. Next chapter will probably be uploaded for next few weeks. Also, feel free to tell me what you think of what I wrote, i am curious.
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Events in "My Little Medic" affect this sequel, but not that much. I think it won't hurt if you read "medic" later.
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Oh, You will need to read to see, bwahahahaha. But yea, Twiny would make a wonderful model for Rarity's imagination.
Love it! i'm so glad the sequel is finaly out! Poor twilight take a lot of bitting!
THe conflict with Nightmare moon is very interessant but it's also weird.
At first, it seems that NM tortures Luna and enjoies being in control but after they seem very close, like just one ponny who gets angry/happy.
NM is really a other dark personality at last?
Please continue, your story is amazing! (And your Twilight is a shameless Marie Sue)
Pff...author could began from this chapter, previous ones are waste of time.
Wow.
Woooooow.
You are the first example I've ever seen of an author who waits to release the sequel until there's quite a bit of it written out... and then releases it all in one day.
But I am not complaining.
You and your editors did a fantastic job, and I respect that you went and got experts for some of the more complex characters.
Yes, Rarity and Nightmare Moon/Luna. Rarity is tricky to write well, especially when we're addressing her earlier flaws, in order to mold her into the pony we all know she can be. The clash between her and politically-savvy Twiny also pleased me. Ordinarily, I'd prefer relationships to not start out this way, but having Twiny say nothing and letting Rarity live her little delusion would, to me, go against what you molded Twilight to be.
As for Nightmare Moon... Writing correctly in an archaic dialect is hard.
LOVE IT can't wait for more
ITS HERE!!!
And its 43,670 words?
Sleep is for weak!!
4585261 Thanks for the blog info. I'll check it out in the morning. Seriously though, I rarely ever give a like to incomplete stories nowadays but you have proven yourself worthy of such trust. Keep up the good work with both this and "My Little Medic". This ones like is already well earned.
Ten chapters. This is probably the biggest debut to a fic that I've seen yet in terms of words and chapters for one posting. Fantastically told so far, you've really done well in making this fic live up to its namesake, and I eagerly await more!
MORE TWINY I SAY!
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Yea, she sure do. I bet that if Twilight was an RPG game character, she would be the one who sacrefices all her luck to improve her strength, endurance and magic, and having - 10 luck sure strike her everywhere she goes.
Nightmare Moon was not torturing Luna, it is just her way of talking to her. And yea, Nightmare Moon is like Luna's darker personality, but while Luna and Nightmare Moon are one and the same, their conciousness and awarness is split up. It is as if two personalities or two minds shared the same body.
Aww... But I didn't wanted to make Twilight a Mary Sue. She have many flaws and is constantly challenged by the enviroment around her, and Mary Sue is a character who can solve every problem she encounter without any efforts on her side.
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You mean chapter 2 "Nightmare - Luna" ?
Or chapter 2 from "Nightmare - Sacrefice, Nightmare - Mercy, Nightmare - Luna" ?
And do this mean that everything what I wrote besides Twilight's encounter with Nightmare Moon is bad?
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Yea, it was not easy. With AJ I had no idea how to write her accent correctly, and I didn't know many words she used in the show, so I searched for many people to help out. Sadly the person who wrote her so well in "Summer Sun Celebration - Applejack," ran out of time to work on her and I had to find other people, and man, I had to search a lot.
As for Nightmare Moon/Luna, I wanted to make switch between thsoe two special, so I decided to have Luna speak old Equestrian while Nightmare Moon use modern one, and both of them adress themselves as "we" since they are two personalities in one body. It was not easy, but luckly I found someone who helped with old Equestrian and was good in editing Nightmare Moon (I found him in gorup "Nightmare Moon Hero").
While I searched for AJ editor, I also looked for someone who like to write Pinkie's sentneces to help out as well.
As for Rarity, she is flawed in the show, but it also makes her a good character, because she have flaws to overcome, and since her standards goes against what Twilight believe, their personalities colided. (Not all friendships starts with candy and rainbow).
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Who's that? RealityCheck! An elite author who next to Pen Stroke wrote great Nyx's stories.
It is an honour to receive comment from celebrity like you. Even if those are just three words I am unsure what they mean. I am fan of your stories and I hope that you liked mine.
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You will need to wait weeks. My top editors take their time to ensure quality of every chapter.
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Nope, read it all in one sitting, and I now bask in the contentment.
-Missy
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Please do not read everything in one go. You should read it slowly while rested and with snacks next to you and enjoy every chapter.
It took us few months to get this sequel up, and it will take weeks befroe next chapter will pop out, so do not rush it to fast, or else fun will end to quickly.
Also, hope you can leave some feedback and tell me what you think of it.
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Well, Twilight ate hot sauce in the original story as well, so he should blame it on the show. Also, unlike in the show itself, in here Twilight is already hardened to take on such hot integrents (she endured fireballs, drinking rainbow, eating super hot soup that Philomena prepared for Celestia during april foal's day and so on) so she can take it like a boss.
Still, if someone put a dislike on my story, it would be nice to know the reason behind it, but whatever, there is no story that will satisfy everyone.
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Will do. Hopefully I won't fail your expectations in later chapters.
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Well, originally it was meant to be prologue and 5 chapters. But after taking a closer look at edited work, I decided that it would be far better if I split it into more for estetic reasons.
Chapter 1 was turned into Twilight meeting AJ and RD, chapter 2 turned into meeting with Rarity and Fluttershy, and chapter 3 into Pinkie and Nightmare Moon.
You get the picture.
Anyway, it took my editors months to get this sequel going, and it will take weeks to update new chapters, so I hoped that it would last for a bit longer than a few hours, oh well.
Also, feel free to join Twinyverse group. I made it for all the fans of tiny Twilight and I hoped we could use forum to talk more outside of just comments.
I wish i could have read this story slowly over time and enjoy it like i did the first book... but then after waiting for it since i had read the first one and finding this i just had to start reading. five hours later i return to the real world on my nbed having finished the last word of the latest chapter of this story, it is quite clear that we are still just at the start (or so i hope) and i am truley looking forward to what is to come.
The only complaint i have is that you did not update the first story with the news that this one is out since only story uupdates get sent by mail and thus i didnt know that this story was posted untill now.
4585798 okay thank you for letting me know
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Well, there is a new rule saying that you cannot upload chapters that are not story related, so making announcments in previous stories is kind of against rules.
But on another side, some other authors made announcments and no one complained, so I think I will do that, but not today. I will make announcment in previous story and blog post tomorrow morning.
And yea, there are like 50 more chapters of this story already finished by me, but they are far from perfect, and it take weeks for my top editors to rewritte them for better flown and quality.
This is awesome.
I think what really shines is your characterization of everyone. The mane six are all in good form, but the crowned jewel has to be NMM. I absolutely enjoy your portrayal of her. Keep this up.
Yoda hmphs at the silly shrinkage solution, "Size matters not! Judge me by my size, do you?"
>>>But to think,” the dark alicorn said, grinding her teeth together as she continued to rage to the empty Town Hall, even with Twilight leaning backwards as far as possible to try and put distance between them, "to think that she banished us because she thought us so foolish as to doom our subjects to a cold death is far more insulting! >>>
Uhm... when you kinda shout really loudly that, and I quote, "THE NIGHT... WILL LAST... FOREVER!!!" and then laugh like a flipping lunatic, what else was Celestia supposed to think?
NMM is worst pony.
Yay! It is up!
4586735 Well, to be fair no one tried to talk her down like Twilight did in this fic.
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That's not being fair. That's being an omniscient reader who already knows better.
But when you've got a god who's gone batshit demon mode on you, has turned the day into night, and is so arrogant and prideful that they will shed blood instead of remain neutral and impassive in order to be heard, then what do you DO?
You can only, ONLY expect them to be an enemy. You have people to defend. A world to save. Do you risk everything on submitting to this unknown entity who has already killed? Who is obviously insane? Just to try and talk them down? If you are wrong, every life will be extinguished. Stallions, mares, foals. Dead children for miles. The world a barren wasteland of dust and the ruins of civilizations.
Or you could fight, and not take the chance. Use what advantages you have to ENSURE that there will be a tomorrow for the people who depend upon you. No matter the cost...
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So yes, like Alondro said - NMM is worst pony. Rather than being so insane, prideful and arrogant, she could have done what people are saying Celestia and everyone else should have done instead. She could have gone to Celestia and informed her of the fears of their people - and they could have worked together to solve the issue. Plays about Luna's bravery, stories of the thestrals who protect children from all the monsters in the dark and scare away the bad ponies. Songs of the night to match those of the day. ... Basically a huge PR campaign they could have put together. But instead, she gave in. She snapped and went full retard. You never go full retard, pony.
4586982 That is true, I was just pointing out that no one tried in canon.
This is my fetish.
But... that makes no sense. Celestia would cripple Twilight, both physically and socially, in fear of her power? There was no better solution? I guess Twilight having no friends at the start of the series makes more sense this way; Twilight would be an emotionally retarded wreck.